@St Shen - You'd be right. It was pretty rushed. And I really wanted the battle to have a resolution, but maybe later I'll post the last two in the deleted pages Art Jam, if only for clarity's sake.

@ZigZagaroo  Thanks for the words!

@elge  sorry you didn't find the dialogue interesting

@Radji  yeah both stories talk about responsibility of the übermensch~ Arena's path is hazy now, and what she becomes can change with the wrong (or right) day

@Shen  Thanks I'm glad you liked the art and fights! I missed drawing Arena's sand powers. "i dont think either Swan or Arena is necessarily right OR wrong." <- that's exactly what I was going for; I wanted every person to really feel like their side is in the right. I felt my climax was with Arena stopping the fight, and the after pages being the falling action/conclusion


Thanks for the comments and critiques guys

Jaykat- like the others said i do wish this had a resolution but these things happen, cant be helped. I like your backgrounds, especially in the first three pages where they are shaded, you fill a skyline and an apartment very nicely. Swan's movements during the fight scene were very pretty but the effect for her powers was a bit scribbly I think, I imagibe it should look a bit more graceful, personally. It kinda feels like it got a little rushed towards the end and its hard to properly critique a story without an ending. Anyhow, welcome back!
pyras, damn, gorgeous work! I love the colours on this, they really help sell the mood and I like the chalky texture. The fight scene was badass, loved the way Arena's sand morphed around Swan. the story is a little hard to critique because i dont think either Swan or Arena is necessarily right OR wrong. They both acted a lot out of emotion. Im glad you included for Arena the line "i wont let a god into my head again" because it helps remind why she would find this character so personally offensive. I feel like ending kind of.... trails off a bit I guess, like its not a terribly strong climax after that heated argument but its at least good to show Arena still has a sympathetic friend. Anyhow, you worked hard and it shows, this was a fantastic comic, good job!

@Radji The last two pages that didn't get in would have explained who the assailants were. Nonetheless, more will be revealed later down the track. Just need to re-plan everything.

Jaykat Oh mon dieu ! AU kidnapping !
Swan just got herself in some shady business. Liked the action, but i would have liked to know a bit more on the assaillants. Not to say that it was rushed, but i am now in this situation where i have the MIGHTY NEED to know more.

Pyrrasterran I'm receiving dawn of justice vibes from this, ha ha. Arena is falling prey to old habits i see. great art, the colors are plentiful, but that's okay, it works here. Yay to Gumshoe, best underling ever !
What will arena do now? Continue on her tracks or question herself on her methods and her personals problems?

JayKat: Nice comic. I thought it was well paced. I heard things weren't going to well for you, so I understand the abrupt ending. Hope things have calmed down or will calm down soon for you.

Pyras: I don't know if it was your intent or not, but I liked the crayola-like finish of the pages. The last few pages had textwalls and were not interesting.

Good job you two.

I've been looking forward to this battle for awhile and I must say you both didn't disappoint! Both of your entries  had interesting stories to tell while also providing some stunning visuals to back it up. I might try to give a full critique for you two some time later but being the amateur critic I am I can't promise it'll be that good.

Submitted!

Honestly, I'm not happy with how my part looks as real life wasn't very kind to me this time round. Plus I couldn't get the last two pages done in time, so I apologize for the weird and abrupt ending on my part. At any rate, critique away.

Sorry, had to extend. Shit at home has been taking me away from my tablet XD

Good Luck to both of you! This one's gonna be good

Well. Here it goes!

EDIT: Got a cold...what wonderful timing. Still gonna soldier through this!