Here are some of the things I had problems with:
Page 1:
When you see him sitting on the couch you assume that he is a lot bigger that he really is. By putting a note that the couch is small it just makes it seem like you fucked up and are trying to cover up. Even if you didn\'t mess that up I would suggest doing everything you can in the drawings to show what is the reality in the story. Bad Apple\'s the size of an apple so by putting him on a large couch you would have driven that point home right off the bat. That\'s easy info for the reader. Blam! You\'ve established a fact right off the bat.

On the last panel of page 1, I couldn\'t for the life of me figure out what he was holding in his hand until later on when it was mentioned. I then went back and it still doesn\'t look like a hammer. Maybe if the handle was more visible? You should have put a panel with the camera showing him rearing it back before the \"clang clang\" effects. Again I didn\'t know what was happening with out knowing what he was holding. I thought it was a trumpet and he started playing band music. A, *gouge*  effect would have been much better for what happened than the clang.

Page 2:
Panel 2 is confusing. It breaks panel and goes into the 3d and 4th panels for no reason. It\'s okay to sometimes break panels for effect but this didn\'t work at all.

Page: 3
The arrows at the bottom of page 3 are no good to me. I dislike arrows showing me where to go next in a comic. The panels should be laid out so you can automatically see where you need to go to next. By putting more space between the two panels and the large last one, I think it  would have made it easier to see where you had to go. I think I would have known anyway but the text balloon breaking into the bottom left panel from the right has potential for confusion as its going the wrong way. All pages should end with the suggestion that the story is moving on to the next page. If the panel was flipped I think it would have been just fine as the balloon would lead you on to the next page. Just putting the balloon on the other side would have been fine too but then it would be just below the \"bonk!\" and not have the same flow as being down and to the right. It\'s kinda hard to explain but you want to have a motion or flow to everything. You want to make people think about your story not how it\'s being presented.

Misc:
I personally don\'t have a problem with hand written text as long as it\'s readable and I found all of it to be reasonably easy to read. Others would demand some sort of pre made font to even consider giving a high score. A premade font would bump the quality level up for sure. I do kind of like the organic look to hand written stuff though for your art as it suits it.

The comic was enjoyable but most of the song in-jokes at the end were lost on me. My own ignorance is to blame for that though. Konami man was totally out of left field and was fucking awesome! Was that from the Goonies game at all? It\'s oddly familiar.  The number to hell was funny;  as was him checking to make sure he got the job done. I would imagine anyone who took part in a death tourney would wind up in hell anyway. Yeah overall your comics definitely have their own feel to them so that is a definite positive. Keep on keepin\' on!!

With the low quality I\'m getting, I might wanna know what I\'m doing wrong so I can fix it.

Hiemie, you kick so much butt. I already told you about what I thought about your comic, so I\'ll save on internet space.

DarkChaos, not bad for a first run out. The story seemed kind of bland, and the entertainment value just wasn\'t there.

Yipes man...just yipes...This is a battle that is random, strange &  just plane weird....guess it mostly definately fits...here man...demons attack...19.95 on dvd

Go hiemie! BTW, The Mighty Jagrafess of the Holy Hadrojassic Maxarodenfoe is better than any Dalek.

This is gonna fucking rule.

Finished! Hope you guys enjoy the fun.

Hope Apple gets far. I wanna draw that bad boy!

go hiemie go hiemie!