gibson you make a hell of a fight there ahahaha with flashy speedlines

btw..nice ending

darknight your story is good to team up with your opponent and i really appreciate that kind of story

well for the votes, i vote for jackster

Jackster: Quality-wise, it was pretty good, but the anatomy looks weird in several scenes. Also, I have to say that Gibson doesn't seem to be the same person in the character sheet, mainly due to the hair "color". On the story...well, I have to say that I didn't enjoy it much 'cus while you tried to continue from Jetaime's entry, it felt out of character, especially Kirin also, Gibson seemed too caring about her, weirdly different from how he acted with Demon. And a personal bummer was that he performed a goofy jump instead of going to Atom while badassly guitar surfing.

TODK: I have to say that I really liked your story and the overall "cheesy sentai show" feeling (bonus points for MMPR season 1 ref). Don't have much to say here, except perhaps that most of the panels felt "too white" if you know what I mean...I know I'm not really one to talk on this topic but eh...you know...

Not bad guys, lots going on here so better get to work!


Jackster: Artwise dude, you're still a top contender, however your anatomy looks really strange to me, especially page 2 where Gibson's arm size seems to change in every panel. The story here also had a few questionable moments, once again I go back to page 2... "You just saved my life, wanna go out on a date?" which is then followed up by gibson looking so very offended I'm surprised he didn't slap her and shout out "THOU CURSED WENCH!". This may just be me, but that whole situation seemed highly unrealistic (granted they're in a sentai tourney...). I mean, was it in character for Kirin to have just gotten the tar kicked out of her, watched two people die in front of her, and then after all of that just suddenly want to jump onto Gibson's cock? I can understand somebody in her situation being thankful and wanting to do the stereotypical "kiss the stranger who just saved my ass" bit, but you really made her out as being more desperate for love and that just doesn't sit well with me.

Still though, for what it's worth the action was quite nice and I kinda feel like you're also using charmy's cheesy scar/trophy match ending here at the end, but you need to work more on human anatomy.



TODK: Very nice story telling on this one, I'm kinda glad that you haven't totally forgotten about your last opponent and decided that her death could be beneficial to your storyline (not something I see very often with the exception of Hiemie's Bad Apple). It did get a tad confusing towards the end, but I wasn't confused enough to the point where it got to be a major concern. The only true concern however is the quality of your art here, you gotta find some time to clean up that line work and get rid of those pencil lines cause that could really hurt you towards the next round. My suggestion is to find some blue non-photo leads or pencils, seriously, that shit disappears after you ink a page and scan it!



Anywho, both were pretty good, but TODK's entry stood out on top for me.

Jackster:
Inks and tones are looking great again in this round, and the last 2 pages were pretty epic! Some of the anatomy seems a little stiff this round compared to last however the thumbs up panel stood out to me the most. I agree with Jet about page 9, maybe an upshot with atoms head getting busted up close as the focal point would have worked? Pretty good read, but the disaster at the end was kinda too final, like it doesn't whet my appetite for more because it seems everyone is destroyed.
 

TODK:
Dude! thanks for bringing my dead team back as zombies!! that was cool to see, and I like how you did the evil earth powers.  You lost some points on quality for sure, It didn't really bother me though, just needed a little more erasing. Spot blacks and line weights were used well I think.The Ronin Repulsa angle paid off big, and I liked how king lemon got involved.  All this additional conflict Really made me interested in the story, I was confused a bit on the last page, think it could have used a "TRANSFORM" panel, but I got it. Page 3 was another weird pacing thing, think it needed more transition between the events at the temple and Kid Atom and his girl. Maybe just something to show they were nearby, like the temple in a bg, or at least a "meanwhile" box woulda helped.
anyway you got my vote, I wanna see whats next!

Jackster: I didn't really dig this comic as much as I usually dig on your stuff.  Maybe it is like Angieness said, not having the zanyness does seem to be a bit of a hinderence.  I don't know.  In the end, I felt like I hadn't connected with any of the characters or really bought into the story.  

TODK:  I really liked the first half of your entry.  The whole thing with King Lemon was awesome.  When we got to the battle I got a little lost.  I thought the art was great and while it was a little inconsistant there towards the end, all in all it was very good.  I think I liked the fact that there were so many good ideas in this entry the most.  

Great round guys,
JV

jackster: there's a lot of stuff i like in this comic. gibson's "chill, baby. i got this." attitude towards the end was pretty cool, and i thought the way gibson and kid atom launched themselves at each other on page 6 was awesome. the mushroom cloud at the end was also very impressive. i think the image on page 9 could be a lot more dynamic---you spent two pages building up to it, and when we get to the impact, the poses seem kind of static.

todk: i loved how you designed ronin repulsa. i had a similar design in mind, with rita repulsa's crazy hair cones, but then you threw some awesome lord hazanko robes on top of that! the story is great, too---i like how effortlessly you can infuse humor into your action/drama. i really admired your paneling in the last battle; the paneling in this one is still nice, but i think you've got it in you to do better.

good show, guys.

Jackster-I managed to follow this comic a lot better than your previous Sentai entry, but I feel like without humor you have a harder time telling a story. Like I could follow it fine but nothing really pulled me in. Of course I totally understand there's not much time to give the audience build up in a 1 weeker but it just didn't feel as though your heart was as in this comic as your previous comics.

TODK-I really liked the approach you took with the story and I love how chaotic your stuff is. But you're still having a lot of issues with tightening and cleaning your stuff up. Granted not everyone has to do super clean work, but seeing these pencil lines that obviously shouldn't be there kind of hurts the presentation. I do wish the ending was a little more finalized but I'm assuming this story was made with the intent of continuing it in the next battle.

Gibson I really liked the tones in this. In order to take your art to the next level I would suggest  putting more effort into perspective and backgrounds, and trying to make the anatomy and faces more consistant/better. but good job with the story it was entertaining.

TODK, I really liked your first story better, this one seemed a little rushed with anatomy ad backgrounds. The story went on way too long and could have been wrapped up a lot quicker. There just wasn't enough meat to justify the page count. It was handled competantly though

Man as a toku fan I really love this tournament and people's ideas.  Void is great.  I love both of these characters, and its a pity one of them has to die.  In this instance though I feel that Kid Atom's story was a little meatier and had more substance.  In Gibson's, Kid Atom was sort of a silent menace and died sort of...unheroically.  But it certainly looks like everyone wants to nuke Void, hehe.  You're both amazing at including many details, backgrounds and all, although Kid Atom's needed some cleaning and it's author is aware of this.  There's really not much more for me to say, except I thank you both for this.

All submitted, I apologize beforehand for the shit quality, inconsistencies and any possibly spelling errors.

I need to figure out a happy medium for adjusting my lines because it seems no matter what I do they always come out scratchy and shitty looking.

Anyway, thanks for reading guys!

i'll leave a proper comment later today or tomorrow. i just wanted to say that these comics made my day.

Can't wait to see this

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