Agent KOBA vs. Sonny del Salvador

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ledes87
Artist

55 comments

# 20 Posted: Mar 17 2011, 07:49 PM

Thanks Joshua. Yes, I will try to make all my fights with this level or better! hahaha, and I'll make the next comic less saturated.
Thanks for the comment!

Coatl
Artist

320 comments

# 19 Posted: Mar 16 2011, 09:12 PM

JoshuaEliGilley: You guys did a fine job on these.
Coatl, great characterization in the dialogue, the "go-to-funnywords" got a little repetitive and needed a bit more mixing up, but the pacing was spot on and hilarious, and overall the art is looking really nice. I would suggest if you are going to color the linework like that, perhaps use it selectively to support the narrative, instead of changing randomly every page, I.E. how you added that subtle fade on the last page to close it out.

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you're right, I reread it and it does get repetitive but under the context of the story's conception, I did come up with this in a segmented fashion. For example the first thing I came up with was the bit where they talk about getting ajob which was much longer then I came up with the ending and the beginning ect.
I think I should make sure to do an outline treat ment of the story to make sure it doesn't happen as much again.
the coloring was indeed random, I wanted to use one or two whole colors but I am planning on making colors "bleed" into certain scenes.

thank you for the crit.

JoshuaEliGilley
Artist

462 comments

# 18 Posted: Mar 16 2011, 09:01 PM

You guys did a fine job on these.

Ledes, super level up since the last comics I've seen from you! your writing is much better and clearer. Also your line work is great here, keep it up! I like the shading and depth of the color, but maybe try setting the mood with less saturated colors that do not strain the eye as much.

Coatl, great characterization in the dialogue, the "go-to-funnywords" got a little repetitive and needed a bit more mixing up, but the pacing was spot on and hilarious, and overall the art is looking really nice. I would suggest if you are going to color the linework like that, perhaps use it selectively to support the narrative, instead of changing randomly every page, I.E. how you added that subtle fade on the last page to close it out.

Coatl
Artist

320 comments

# 17 Posted: Mar 15 2011, 04:59 PM

ledes87: Coatl Thanks, I really liked your interpretation of Koba. You nicely captures the personality of Koba.

(sorry for my awful english)

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hahaha it's all good man. This guy was fun to write and I really felt that personality wise these guys would easily click.

ledes87
Artist

55 comments

# 16 Posted: Mar 14 2011, 08:04 PM

Coatl Thanks, I really liked your interpretation of Koba. You nicely captures the personality of Koba.

PyrasTerran Thanks! hahaha this was my closest approach to color, for now just red ... need to improve on that!

Hey Anonymous! thanks, I try to do the next story just as interesting or even better!!

Mrnoitaull thanks! I tried to give a special atmosphere to the story. (Using only color that can handle it now.)

Thank you very much everyone, and thanks for reading!

(sorry for my awful english)

Coatl
Artist

320 comments

# 15 Posted: Mar 12 2011, 12:37 PM

Mrnoitaull: Ledes, the red really worked well with the mood of the story you had going and the pacing was spot on to me.

Coatl, this is a jump up from your previous work. I enjoy the progession. Keep it up, dude.

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Anonymous:Coat, you have definitely improved as an artist, each panel looked awesome.

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thank you guys for the compliments, I'm very grateful. I will try to improve each time you see me here.

Darius Corry
Artist

443 comments

# 14 Posted: Mar 12 2011, 11:18 AM

Yeah this was a good matchup

Ledes, the red really worked well with the mood of the story you had going and the pacing was spot on to me.

Coatl, this is a jump up from your previous work. I enjoy the progession. Keep it up, dude.

anonymous

91 comments

# 13 Posted: Mar 12 2011, 09:49 AM

amazing job you two! Ledes87, your story buildup was wonderful; I am very interested to see what happens next.
Coat, you have definitely improved as an artist, each panel looked awesome.

Coatl
Artist

320 comments

# 12 Posted: Mar 12 2011, 09:18 AM

PyrasTerran:
Coatl: there's alot to like with the art and your improvement has definitely shown. Although the story is a bit frivolous it is still funny, and the last page left it off with an interesting seed for the future (that can probably be explored in ledes' side if that side continues)

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i wouldn't be surprised that you felt that way about the story. Actually I wasn't even sure what I would write about because I felt like KOBA was too over-powered. I decided that they would have a conversation instead because I found it humorous how KOBA was sorta unorthadox in the way he handles people that he might even relate to Sonny.

PyrasTerran
Artist

1513 comments

# 11 Posted: Mar 11 2011, 11:53 PM

*blown away*

Looks like Arena's got something to do now.....

ledes: I'm stunned and elated that you kept it up with the Arena/Orphanage link from last year and I would be honored to match you in the future with Arena. The art is great, my main gripe is that I feel there's way too much red~

Coatl: there's alot to like with the art and your improvement has definitely shown. Although the story is a bit frivolous it is still funny, and the last page left it off with an interesting seed for the future (that can probably be explored in ledes' side if that side continues)

Great job both of you!

PyrasTerran
Artist

1513 comments

# 10 Posted: Mar 11 2011, 06:35 PM

Awesome, can't wait to see it from y'all

Coatl
Artist

320 comments

# 9 Posted: Mar 11 2011, 06:26 PM

UPLOADED!

Coatl
Artist

320 comments

# 8 Posted: Mar 10 2011, 08:44 PM

ledes87: Uploaded!! Good luck and thanks for the fight Coatl!!!!

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yeah same to you. I learned a lot from this battle.

ledes87
Artist

55 comments

# 7 Posted: Mar 10 2011, 07:45 PM

Uploaded!! Good luck and thanks for the fight Coatl!!!!

Coatl
Artist

320 comments

# 6 Posted: Mar 8 2011, 03:08 PM

getting dat rendering done!

Coatl
Artist

320 comments

# 5 Posted: Feb 25 2011, 01:42 PM

art update, gonna be a pretty short story for me, having fun drawing these characters in panels. hope I don't disappoint.

Update #2 Inking, experimenting with different pens for textures, wish me luck. I can't wait to see what Ledes whipped up.