@Video
Man, glad to see you givin it your all! Your humor and writing were well-executed and fit in well with the tone of the whole race. Honestly, this whole ridiculous situation seems to be right in your wheelhouse and it's awesome to see.
Art-wise, your color choices started off so-so and ended up really superbly chosen. I absolutely hope you keep the pink goggles as a memento from this race, as they add such a good splash of color to Jules designs. Plus, naturally, anytime comics include pink-purple I'm all over it.
The big art note is a small one: Watch how you ink the mechanical stuff. You seem to do it with the same organic hand you use to ink people, and that doesn't lend itself well to unyielding machinery. A more careful, measured, stroke would work better, otherwise your characters seem to live in a Gumby-esque world where things look ever so slightly malleable.
Wacky Races 2, Round 2 / Koosh and Lapin vs. Jules Saphir
Critiques & Comments
# 15
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Oct 8 2017, 06:13 PM
# 14
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Oct 8 2017, 10:53 AM
Oh man I enjoyed how Jules was in this comic. I guess I don't know much about them, but I'm really getting attached to them! The trick on page 4 was great, and I love the empathy Jules displayed. The sun setting was GORGEOUS. I like all of this, great job!
# 13
Posted:
Oct 5 2017, 06:17 AM
Video: Gosh, the humor here is SO up my alley. So cute and dumb all over. You got a real solid running gag established in just eight panels, that's got to be a feat!
Nothin: Kiiiiiiiiiiichiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii iiiiii...
Nothin: Kiiiiiiiiiiichiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii iiiiii...
# 12
Posted:
Oct 3 2017, 07:17 PM
Video - It's so awesome to see you acing this tourney! Colours and humour are A + The only thing I wanna point out is that I feel like you could have thrown in more full body shots, particularly for Jules, since a majority of panels seem to focus more on either headshot or half-body. If only for a bit more panel variety. But other than that, you're totally rocking this! Keep it up!
Nothin - Nooooooooo : ( I wanted to see more adorable father and daughter antics. Ah well, hope you're feeling okay.
Nothin - Nooooooooo : ( I wanted to see more adorable father and daughter antics. Ah well, hope you're feeling okay.
# 11
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Oct 3 2017, 06:54 PM
Good job Video A+ content
# 10
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Oct 2 2017, 09:48 PM
Awww Koosh Koosh! From what I can read something happened and resulted in a default; hopefully, you're doing ok.
Video: I really love how you were able to pull this off. Even though it's a small thing: having a first page involving the people who lost is a nice touch to it: gives a bit of a heads up for readers of what's happened. And the character interactions are fun to read and see. Even with Koosh-Koosh not taking a moment to think about saving his bike versus saving his daughter showed that you cared enough for his character. Really good read!
Video: I really love how you were able to pull this off. Even though it's a small thing: having a first page involving the people who lost is a nice touch to it: gives a bit of a heads up for readers of what's happened. And the character interactions are fun to read and see. Even with Koosh-Koosh not taking a moment to think about saving his bike versus saving his daughter showed that you cared enough for his character. Really good read!
# 9
Posted:
Oct 2 2017, 02:21 PM
I love that the blimps' faces match Jules' mood~ The sky shots are pretty but I don't get a real sense of speed, alot of it feels like everyone is still or moving slowly. Keep that in mind for the final round to keep it looking exciting!
# 8
Posted:
Oct 2 2017, 10:10 AM
Video: Jules' secret soft spot for children absolutely warms my heart lol. I love how Lapin is just absolutely Not Afraid and hes just like "ok i guess". Saving them at the end and pretending he missed, you clown prince, you~ XD Colours in this are GORGEOUS especially from page 5 and on as it slowly gets darker. Pink is not easy to make menacing but Jules can do it lol. Your impacts could be more.... er, "impactful" i guess. speedlines or hitsparks or something to really amplify the movement. when the two ships collide I barely noticed what happened coz it was sort of "bonk" and Koosh hitting the ground should have had... maybe like a dent, or a squash, or anything but it looked a bit soft so work on that. Still, youre one of my favorites this tourney, give it your all in the final round!
# 7
Posted:
Oct 2 2017, 08:24 AM
Yowch, I'm sorry to hear Nothin defaulted, I hope things are okay on their end. It's a shame we can't see what they made too.
Video though, I just wanna say, I love your comic, even if this is an auto win on your end, this comic came out really well, and is fully deserving of a win, in my opinion. Your art is honestly fantastic, and I really enjoyed reading this comic. I think the only issue I had with it, was to me, the first page recap, didn't really captivate my attention. This of course is understandable though, as a recap, but I think it paled in comparison to how amazing the rest of your pages were. I absolutely loved your plot by the way! It was super adorable, and silly, and I loved seeing how you drew your opponents! Both those moments when your person dropped Koosh-Koosh's daughter shocked me, and made me laugh a bit. I'm glad she ended up fine in the end though!!
Video though, I just wanna say, I love your comic, even if this is an auto win on your end, this comic came out really well, and is fully deserving of a win, in my opinion. Your art is honestly fantastic, and I really enjoyed reading this comic. I think the only issue I had with it, was to me, the first page recap, didn't really captivate my attention. This of course is understandable though, as a recap, but I think it paled in comparison to how amazing the rest of your pages were. I absolutely loved your plot by the way! It was super adorable, and silly, and I loved seeing how you drew your opponents! Both those moments when your person dropped Koosh-Koosh's daughter shocked me, and made me laugh a bit. I'm glad she ended up fine in the end though!!
# 6
Posted:
Oct 1 2017, 09:45 PM
uploaded. I'm going to be honest, i was stumped story wise. So, hopefully what i did came together in a pleasant way.
# 5
Posted:
Sep 25 2017, 05:17 PM
Oh shit this is an amazing match-up!
# 4
Posted:
Sep 25 2017, 03:36 PM
I got my bias', but rock it and roll it, guys!
# 3
Posted:
Sep 24 2017, 06:00 PM
What a fun match-up!
Can't wait!
Can't wait!
# 2
Posted:
Sep 24 2017, 05:54 PM
They're down to clown
# 1
Posted:
Sep 24 2017, 05:49 PM
NOW THATS WACKY
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Oct 8th, 2017
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