Thanks to all for reading. Seems I need to practice backgrounds and colors more. Also, I'm super-slow, so I probably need to work on that too. 5 pages vs. 15 is a little disproportionate.

Thanks for the battle MrPr1993. Do you have the hi-res version of that thumbnail pic? Looks dope, I want to see~

Thank you for the reviews, everyone! Whew! I sure have tons to learn!

And I congratulate HFR for this battle! Ahahah! Samson sure didn't take losing well! And what neat depiction of Virtua there! Love the entry! XD

MRPR1993- This was also another character I didn't know what to make of. Now that we've gotten a taste, she went a way I totally didn't expect. She's funny! Not just with casual gag humor, but with what she says as well. I super dig the moments where you have her speaking in the third person. I feel it adds to that not-so-real gimmick character feel she's got going on. I do notice its not consistent though. She goes into lapses where she  states "Virtua will kick your kaboose" and on the next page speak like a regular person, saying I and me. If this Virtua says business is something you wanna keep (and I hope you do), be sure to proofread her dialogue so it all sounds similar and coming from her.

HFR- I laughed. I gotta admit I laughed fo sho. I honestly didn't know what to expect with this character, but what you have shown has me amused at the utter insanity that is  Colonel Mac Samson. It's also great to see you did away with dialogue altogether to just showcase strictly visual humor. The intensity of those eyes as he gets into his Street fighte- uh, I mean Tekkem- uuum that vidya game bid'ness! I know we've all had moments where we bomb a round that we wanna shoot up the game outright. Thanks for letting us live out our dreams in a comic, Mac.

MrPr1993: You should work on your staging, especially for the action scenes. Virtua's so massive that it's easy for her to have a closed silhouette, so you really need to push her body language in order to really show off her strength when she fights... or to just better show what she's doing. That "bleh!" pose, for example, was pretty confusing, The punchline was funny, but transition to it was confusing.

HFR: Well, this is a relatable comic. I feel like this came from experience, mushroom cloud included.  Are you lightening with white? I think you could pick your colors a little better.

Pretty entertaining reads.

Pr - I don't know what to say that hasn't already been said before.  I suppose the ending felt a little bit anti-climatic.  Pretty funny, though.

HFR - Does this guy realize how much these arcade cabinets cost?

Oh Nana.

what 'majority'

MrPr1993: Not gonna lie; Virtua and Mac Samson are both extremely ridiculous in concept, so I was VERY excited by this matchup. I'm glad for all the hijinks and explosions, but I think you could've taken it further with the story-- this is the kinda matchup where I could see Virtua throwing an 18-wheeler at him. I dunno, I'm just saying you could've really amped it up to ridiculousness and it would have totally fit. Other than that, the only other thing I'd suggest is to rely less on 'local' color, as in-- the straightforward "she's bright blue, Polterdot has pink hair". To put it a better way, try experimenting with limited color palettes to give your colorschemes more unity.


HFR: I always appreciate a comic that reads well with no dialogue, so good on you. The story is short and simple-- against the kind of ridiculousness I said I expected-- but that actually makes the narrative very nice and condensed.  You don't have to embellish any more to this story, and I like the angle of Virtua as That One Damn Boss. However, I'd like to see you give some more love to backgrounds in future comics!

All in all, good job, you two!

Mr. Pr:

As always your lines are clean and consistent which helps your personal style shine through. I do like the way that this comic went however, I did have a few things that bothered me as I continued to read. The action scenes are somewhat stiff to me, looking more like poses than fluid movement, so I would study up on some ways to increase the effect of motion without having to lose your personal style. The coloring was very bright and crisp which was aided by the solid line work. I was just a little confused as to why she agreed to have sex with Mac Samson? She showed no interest in him other than kicking him out of the bar and appeared hardly interested in him sexually. If it was a thing to challenge him that’s still kinda cheap sounding in my book as having characters just go at it in the first comic they’re in together feels overused and lazy as a majority of artist do that on this site. Even with my comments I still the story and dialogue were strong enough to carry the comic through.


HFR:

I was super excited to see you in action right away and I wasn’t disappointed! The lines and motions are very fluid, with the extra lines to stress rushing forward or button mashing, and the coloring was very solid throughout. While the idea wasn’t totally original with you playing as the characters in a video game I do think you took a somewhat fresh look on things as Mac Samson was more concerned about their assets than his actual gaming skills. I do wish there had been maybe form 4th wall breaking or some interaction between both main characters however, with the time constraints this works well! All in all, a solid comic!

Mr P: there was probably a lot more of that story than there needed to be, im sure there were some elements you could have cut down on to have made a simpler story for yourself. i guess im mostly referencing the NPCs, they didnt seem super necessary to the story and just sort of padded it out. I like how you write the Colonel though, and his interactions with Virtuosa. Fight scene was funny too!

HFR: This was simple and weirdly satisfying lol i kinda love it just the way it is XD the expressions you draw on him crack me up!

It is complete! Too bad it got rushed (procastination of DOOM!), but at least it's done!

(...and aw man! I put the dialogue bubble on the wrong character on Panel 5! Gah!), and forgot to readjust Panel 8. Well, that's what happens when I don't double-check.

Can't wait to see what you put out. Best of luck👍

lolol this i gotta see

This'll be interesting... I wish you luck, and the colonel!