Chimaeric, Radji and Pyras - this is extremely well done! The backgrounds, characters (and their emotions) are so nice and detailed. I love it so much.
As for crits:
-Last panel on page 3: "It's called small talk" I feel like the balloon or balloon tail could've been placed better. I thought it was Arena who said it at first.
-I am not quite sure what the 3rd panel on page 14 is.
-Page 14 doesn't have any shading at all. I wonder if this is intentional though.
*spoiler alert. stop here if you haven't read the comic yet and don't want spoilers*
And just when I thought that Arena and Marie are just going to brush aside that kiss that happened the night before, they went on to rekindle it the next day..well, with an interruption but it was a funny and humorous way to end an otherwise serious comic overall. Curious where this new development between Marie and Arena are going to take them. Please make more comics exploring the relationship with these two!
Overwork / Marie and Arena
Critiques & Comments
# 8
Posted:
Aug 29 2019, 07:46 AM
# 7
Posted:
Aug 29 2019, 05:45 AM
Give credit To pyrras too folks. He did 60% of the writing
# 6
Posted:
Aug 28 2019, 09:26 PM
this is all around a fantastic comic. All the detailed backgrounds and character line art is fantastic. Also the story showing the relationship between the two is great. I think page 5 is my favorite because of the top panel showing Marie in different parts walking is really a great layout.
# 5
Posted:
Aug 28 2019, 06:12 PM
heads up for folks: The script was a co-writing production between Radji and I
# 4
Posted:
Aug 28 2019, 04:53 PM
Gosh Marie looks so cute and happy in this comic. There's such an amazing sense of space and location. Void City's really is a place with its own character, whose architecture tells or hints at a story, but the story told in it is not about the city, but a very intimate and personal one. Great job!
# 3
Posted:
Aug 28 2019, 04:02 AM
this was amazing. I love your art style Chimera, it's so expressive and unique, the backgrounds are also really cool and inspiring. Pg 7 was particularly badass for this- the mix of sci-fi and stone carved walls was so aesthetically pleasing for me.
In terms of writing, great job Radji. I'm relatively new to void and I'm not at all familiar with Marie/ Arena. But you got me to care about these two and their relationship.
This was a joy to read! I hope to see you guys team up again in the future.
In terms of writing, great job Radji. I'm relatively new to void and I'm not at all familiar with Marie/ Arena. But you got me to care about these two and their relationship.
This was a joy to read! I hope to see you guys team up again in the future.
# 2
Posted:
Aug 27 2019, 01:22 AM
Inspirational stuff! I love your style, Chimera, it reminds me of the concept art for A Link to the Past.
# 1
Posted:
Aug 27 2019, 12:06 AM
Guys i cant go into depth right now but damn this is excellent!
I think Chimaeric was in main charge of the line art? In any case it serving super nice and i have to say i have never seen a more likable impression of Arena.
A very important aspect to me were the little details in the background. The ornaments on the Bridge? the graffiti on that street?
I love this!
The writing is also pretty fluid. A little too convenient bar placement but thats nitpicking. Character development is relatable and heartfelt. Nice little vanilla roller coaster. So well done guys!
I think Chimaeric was in main charge of the line art? In any case it serving super nice and i have to say i have never seen a more likable impression of Arena.
A very important aspect to me were the little details in the background. The ornaments on the Bridge? the graffiti on that street?
I love this!
The writing is also pretty fluid. A little too convenient bar placement but thats nitpicking. Character development is relatable and heartfelt. Nice little vanilla roller coaster. So well done guys!
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Sep 2nd, 2019
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