your style of comic is enjoyable to me. The artstyle is complementary to the storytelling. I could see more panelling but you have enough mastery of composition to make it work
that aside, interesting character. Very different from other characters who are from outside the popular trope of "strangers arrives to town"
Intro Story / Deimos-96P9
Critiques & Comments
# 6
Posted:
Dec 8 2019, 04:37 AM
# 5
Posted:
Dec 7 2019, 07:19 AM
Your storytelling is like poetry. It took me a few reads to really grasp what was going on in the first few pages, but that might be because you threw a lot of new terms at us that I didn't immediately connect. Reading through this character bio is a lot of fun. I love your world building style, it makes me really invested in this character already. As usually, your grasp of page layouts are light and dark values is great in this comic, though there are a few spots where I think a little more retooling could help with clarity. The last panel might be the only one worth mentioning; it took me a moment to discern what was going happening on the battle. Other than that, I really love the slow and subtle insertion of color into the comic without it looking like its unfinished, just an accent to complete the comic. Im excited for this character and hope to have the chance to draw them in the future
# 4
Posted:
Dec 7 2019, 04:02 AM
Really cool comic, I'm hype to see more of this character/ some gritty action comics on here. I don't have much crit in terms of art/ writting this was solid. Though I do think some establishing shots of the environments wouldn't have gone amiss.
# 3
Posted:
Dec 6 2019, 02:21 AM
Your style is very dramatic, it’s perfectly suited for this kind of comic! I really like how you convey movement and the brutal moments, like explosions and the bloodied figure on the floor on page 1. I also like the slow transition from black and white to the inclusion of red on the last page.
I was going to say I like the armour designs, and I do, when I can see them that is. On page 3 especially there’s so much going on and such dark inks that it’s hard to see what’s happening. I had to reread a few times to get the story overall as well. I have a feeling that if I hadn’t read Deimos’ bio and design sheet first, I wouldn’t have known who he was, because the transition from his youth to his current self was so abrupt I didn’t realise it had flashed forward and thought you were introducing another character. I would appreciate more hints of who he is before the transition - since his face is hidden and his name is different, it’s not clear who he is without referring to his design sheet.
I was going to say I like the armour designs, and I do, when I can see them that is. On page 3 especially there’s so much going on and such dark inks that it’s hard to see what’s happening. I had to reread a few times to get the story overall as well. I have a feeling that if I hadn’t read Deimos’ bio and design sheet first, I wouldn’t have known who he was, because the transition from his youth to his current self was so abrupt I didn’t realise it had flashed forward and thought you were introducing another character. I would appreciate more hints of who he is before the transition - since his face is hidden and his name is different, it’s not clear who he is without referring to his design sheet.
# 2
Posted:
Dec 5 2019, 12:56 PM
That's such an interesting character! so violent and yet disciplined. That ending left me wanting more!
i'm looking forward to his next comic!
i'm looking forward to his next comic!
# 1
Posted:
Dec 4 2019, 11:18 PM
Interesting intro! I liked the dialogue, it had a nice sense of elegance, almost, which was a good contrast to the usual sort of brutal dialogue we get from these scenes. I felt like it ended a bit too suddenly, though! Like, I felt as if we could've used a bit more follow-up after the battle ended--as is, it kinda felt like a movie ending immediately after the climax!
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Dec 10th, 2019
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