Thanks for the battle, Neo! Sorry it was a little short of "epic."
I really liked your side! You had no way of knowing this, but seeing my character beat on Sheldon's character has been a secret schoolgirlish dream of mine for years now.
Danielle vs. Katka Katarina
Critiques & Comments
# 23
Posted:
Jun 26 2010, 09:46 PM
# 22
Posted:
Jun 24 2010, 10:17 AM
Neo-the inking is nice and clean as usual but you're still having some issues with pushing the background to the background and foreground to the foreground, some toning may help with that problem. Another thing I noticed was you have some pacing problems here and there with your text. Most of page 2 there's really no chance for the reader to breath and no time for characters to really react. I think overall this was rougher than your usual stuff so I'm assuming time was just a factor here, but story wise I enjoyed it.
Rabbit-It's a shame you weren't able to give this your all, I really don't have any crits art wise. But I think story wise this was very interesting and different for you, it was nice to see you do something a bit darker and more serious.
Rabbit-It's a shame you weren't able to give this your all, I really don't have any crits art wise. But I think story wise this was very interesting and different for you, it was nice to see you do something a bit darker and more serious.
# 21
Posted:
Jun 21 2010, 07:51 PM
Neo, I liked this but I think I have seen you do a little better, this didn't have the level of polish(as far as perspective and anatomy) as your last few comics. It was a little wordy for my tastes, but it was very easy to follow and flowed well.
Rabbit, I'd really wish I could have seen this finished.
Rabbit, I'd really wish I could have seen this finished.
# 20
Posted:
Jun 20 2010, 09:46 AM
NeoIcarus - Your comic was really fun.
# 19
Posted:
Jun 19 2010, 04:28 PM
Rabbit you can do whatever you want with Tammy if you go forward with that story. I'm booked with my webcomic so I won't be able to do anything myself.
# 18
Posted:
Jun 19 2010, 12:55 PM
Neoicarus, it seems you didn't have enough time for cleanup. I went and compared this to some of your older comics and this attempt is somewhere in the middle. While your panelling style is to have a lot going on in a cramped way, I think you're getting better at it. In comparison to Master of Disaster, where this was a problem, I think it looks better now. I like it more when you have the black gutters because compositionally to me, it looks pleasing and there were a few pages here where I felt it was lacking. Though you make attempts at shading in the past, there is little to none here. And the linework is not as solid as it has been in the past; there are issues with proportions at times when it comes to the lines. For example, Danielle standing next to the car, makes the car look smaller than when she's in it. So it's somewhat inconsistent and full body shots could have been tightened up. You do have a lot here, so I suspect you ran out of the time before you cleanup, tighten up, etc. It's a standard Danielle story so it's a fun romp.
For Katka, the comic feels a bit more detailed than the norm here though it's unfinished. It's a bit hard to gauge it beyond that. I liked the story. One day I'd like to battle Katka.
For Katka, the comic feels a bit more detailed than the norm here though it's unfinished. It's a bit hard to gauge it beyond that. I liked the story. One day I'd like to battle Katka.
# 17
Posted:
Jun 19 2010, 12:47 PM
Neoicarus: This comic was a little wordy to me. I think it could've been really funny but it just didn't seem to flow right.
Rabbit: I like where this is headed... you aren't gonna leave us on a cliffhanger, are you? :c
Rabbit: I like where this is headed... you aren't gonna leave us on a cliffhanger, are you? :c
# 16
Posted:
Jun 18 2010, 11:44 PM
Uploaded.
Going to bed.
And retiring.
Going to bed.
And retiring.
# 15
Posted:
Jun 4 2010, 10:13 PM
alberto311:
Aww that is total BS Rabbit rabbit!!!!! you have 15 days left...Quote
That's because I somehow made the Extension button magically work in the meantime. XD
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# 14
Posted:
Jun 4 2010, 09:23 PM
ja ja jaj ja... damn quote button... i'll figure you out sooner or later..jaj jaj ja... I am so gonna have a hang over tommoroww...jja jajja ja.
# 13
Posted:
Jun 4 2010, 09:20 PM
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Aww that is total BS Rabbit rabbit!!!!! you have 15 days left... you can so give us at least a three page penciled story.... and maybe with some word balloons and ...dialogue...and such... but yeah! Ju CAN DU EEEETTT!!!! AND DU EEEETTT AWL NITE LOOOONGGG!!!
# 12
Posted:
Jun 4 2010, 05:21 PM
Thanks, SLS. :>
In other news, I'm totally swamped and the "extension" button isn't working. So I hope y'all like two-page pencil comics.
In other news, I'm totally swamped and the "extension" button isn't working. So I hope y'all like two-page pencil comics.
# 11
Posted:
May 31 2010, 08:45 PM
Rabbit Rabbit: Not that this is important, but I just got dumped and I don't have the motivation to do ANYTHING right now.
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;3; That's because I haven't went "SQUEE!" and *glomped* and *huggled* your ass yet.
*gives you same fangirly-lovin'* Feel better yet?
# 10
Posted:
May 30 2010, 08:17 PM
Not that this is important, but I just got dumped and I don't have the motivation to do ANYTHING right now.
So this may be a short comic.
So this may be a short comic.
# 9
Posted:
May 23 2010, 04:51 PM
Lights out. Fights out.
Make it hot. Or I will end you both.
Make it hot. Or I will end you both.
# 8
Posted:
May 23 2010, 02:18 PM
You both hit like girls.
# 7
Posted:
May 23 2010, 01:44 PM
the unrest in GP HQ has spawned a cat fight! :0
# 6
Posted:
May 23 2010, 01:10 PM
yes!
# 5
Posted:
May 23 2010, 01:01 PM
I'm putting my money on the girl
# 4
Posted:
May 23 2010, 12:26 PM
omg girl fight!
# 3
Posted:
May 22 2010, 06:47 AM
Setting phasers to fun!
Thanks for the match, Rabb! May the heavens shudder from it's majesty.
Thanks for the match, Rabb! May the heavens shudder from it's majesty.
# 2
Posted:
May 21 2010, 09:00 PM
Yaay one of the very few battles I am looking forward too all month! Slay em' gents!
# 1
Posted:
May 21 2010, 06:33 PM
Alright, let's DO THIS.
Only been waiting for this for three years! 8D
Only been waiting for this for three years! 8D
Regular Match
Drawing Time:
3 weeks + 1
Ended:
Jun 25th, 2010
Votes Cast:
26
Page Views:
2671
Winner:
NeoIcarus
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Everybody else - Thanks for the comments and crits. Yeah, I didn't get to polish this up. My bad. The next one will be better.