That last panel is one of my favorite things you've ever drawn haha. I love how Mayes feels so much like a trojan horse for Garland's story to continue. You did a great job of showing us a bit of Mayes' personality, but left enough vague about him that I'm both intrigued and wondering whether it matters, or whether this really is just a story about Garland and Mayes is the mask he held up to get his own story without being accepted on the site as a character. Either way, I love what you're doing here. Your art is improving a lot, and it's at a place where it's hard to pick out any one thing to work on; you're improving in every aspect, I think, and you just need more practice to get a more solid feel for the forms of things. I'd suggest adding some practice with inanimate objects to your figure drawing as a way to improve on that overall. But legit I feel like the best crit I can give is basically just that you're already on the right track and just need to keep going!

I feel like this comic would have been just about perfect if you'd been able to finish it. It's a little unclear to me what's happening on the third page that triggers Soggy's breakdown, so I'm not sure if there's any context I need other than him being so stressed that he lost control because of something (I can't tell if it was him being attacked or if it was some sort of accident or something). I think I would have liked to see some aftermath showing Soggy after he's calmed down again or something. The ending just feels kind of abrupt. But maybe that's something you were leaving for the next comic, which is probably fine, especially considering the time constraint! I'm sort of babbling now, but I hope something there was helpful.