Doodle Dan vs. Xia

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Puzzlething
Artist

457 comments

# 11 Posted: Jul 9 2013, 09:37 PM

Psycho Sean -

Make sure you play with the levels after you scan it, because often the whites are too dark and your blacks are too light. It'd also make it harder to see your marks inside the solid black sections, and keep the text and bubbles from sticking out so much. They immediately pop out as digital and separate.

The text in the bubbles gets way too small sometimes, it's really pixelated, and the font itself isn't as readable as it should be. There were some pages, like 6 especially, where I was struggling to read what you'd put down. Even now, I can't really be sure I totally got all of the story in your comic, which is a shame because it's really unique. It's almost like an old fashioned science fiction horror!

I think it's great how unique and interesting the layout of every page is, but sometimes it gets kinda busy and hard to look at. Some of that is prolly just the contrast thing rearing up again, but I also think I would've liked it if you'd made those grey tones a more prominent part of the design. It made your comic way easier to the read.

Skulls -

Damn Skulls, this is totally on another level. Your poses have great action, and your panel layout and composition is super tight. Everything is just crazy clean and oozes professionalism. I don't have much critical to say because I think you made such an effective comic. I think at this point you've established a really strong fundamental base, and now you need to just push yourself to do something crazy. Like your background is super smart, it's simple but organic making it easy to create any kind of structure you'd need for the fight. Maybe next time do something more complex with your setting, not because what you're doing isn't amazing, but just to push yourself that much harder.

Amazing comic dude, great work!

Psycho Sean             -

Make sure you play with the levels after you scan it, because often the whites are too dark and your blacks are too light. It'd also make it harder to see your marks inside the solid black sections, and keep the text and bubbles from sticking out so much. They immediately pop out as digital and separate.

The text in the bubbles gets way too small sometimes, it's really pixelated, and the font itself isn't as readable as it should be. There were some pages, like 6 especially, where I was struggling to read what you'd put down. Even now, I can't really be sure I totally got all of the story in your comic, which is a shame because it's really unique.  It's almost like an old fashioned science fiction horror!
                 
                   I think it's great how unique and interesting the layout of every page is, but sometimes it gets kinda busy and hard to look at. Some of that is prolly just the contrast thing rearing up again, but I also think I would've liked it if you'd made those grey tones a more prominent part of the design. It made your comic way easier to the read.

Skulls               -

Damn Skulls, this is totally on another level. Your poses have great action, and your panel layout and composition is super tight. Everything is just crazy clean and oozes professionalism. I don't have much critical to say because I think you made such an effective comic. I think at this point you've established a really strong fundamental base, and now you need to just push yourself to do something crazy.  Like your background is super smart, it's simple but organic making it easy to create any kind of structure you'd need for the fight. Maybe next time do something more complex with your setting, not because what you're doing isn't amazing, but just to push yourself that much harder.

Amazing comic dude, great work!

Animeshen
Artist

1490 comments

# 10 Posted: Jul 8 2013, 11:54 PM

ahhhhh Skulls, this was amazing! The lines, the tones, the composition, you really outdid yourself! you set a new bar now lol now I want to see more like this from you! Psycho Sean, man you are really good at filling space lol I don't mean that as like a half compliment, I mean its cool how theres always something interesting to look at in all your panels! Great use of angles, and your character scares the piss out of me which i guess is bonus lol. you might need more practice drawing women though? just a li'l li'l nitpick. Great comics you guys!

Sean Patrick Kelly
Artist

117 comments

# 9 Posted: Jul 6 2013, 08:11 AM

CrackingSkulls: Ah thanks you two! That means a bunch!

Sean you nailed Xia pretty spot on! Kinda creepy that our comics are so similar too haha thanks for the battle!

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I know i thought that too!! in a weird way, if either of us had used the same side character helping Xia we could have made an unintentional 2 parter!!!

Thank you as well for the battle; What the others had said I agree your comic was amazing, Very clean, smooth, and paced. The only way this would be more awesome would be turning it to a motion comic with power ranger music!!!

also i saw this clip on youtube and imagined people's reactions to our comics http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Mw2cTlY9xDc if change internet with comic

Cracking Skulls
Artist

354 comments

# 8 Posted: Jul 4 2013, 04:33 AM

Ah thanks you two! That means a bunch!

Sean you nailed Xia pretty spot on! Kinda creepy that our comics are ao similar too haha thanks for the battle!

PyrasTerran
Artist

1513 comments

# 7 Posted: Jul 3 2013, 11:32 AM

Skulls! Jesus shitfire these are GOOD!

Charlie
Artist

731 comments

# 6 Posted: Jul 3 2013, 11:26 AM

Holy shit Skulls, I just read yours.

Just gotta say that was one hell of a fight comic - I'll leave more in depth comments once I am done with this tourney round I think but just...holy shit. You've improved so much over these last few comics and I fucking loved your layouts and the tones and the action like you wouldn't believe. I kinda saw the first 8 pages as roughs but didn't see the rest of it at all until now. Great work dude, really.