Flutterbyes I could have skipped the cover lol Thank you for your comment I will have to ground my line weight back and fore.
Artsandgoodies thanks and yes font is my downfall. Could you recommend a font style?
Heavanbat agreed, I will need to spice us Bubbha's presence. There are more sides to him ;p
kubo thank you. The pallet may change slightly indeed
Gakken! I hope to see you again in the normal battles!
Speed Death Tournament 2020, Round 1 / B7988 vs. Bubbha Grimmaw
Critiques & Comments
# 19
Posted:
Feb 5 2020, 01:58 PM
# 18
Posted:
Feb 4 2020, 11:57 PM
Gakken: I congratulate you on submitting your first comic here! I know you were stressing about this up until the deadline and I hope the experience hasn't soured you to the idea of future matches.
Symon_says: This was an enjoyable comics; It had a full story that I could easily get on board with, you used your opponent's attibutes (or lack there of with their inability to speak) as a main part of the story, and you introduced us to your character with fun and interesting dialogue. I would love to see one more level of grayscale to this comic. The yellow monotone is fun, but some of the panels could do with a bit more depth which another grey would help with. Good Job!
Symon_says: This was an enjoyable comics; It had a full story that I could easily get on board with, you used your opponent's attibutes (or lack there of with their inability to speak) as a main part of the story, and you introduced us to your character with fun and interesting dialogue. I would love to see one more level of grayscale to this comic. The yellow monotone is fun, but some of the panels could do with a bit more depth which another grey would help with. Good Job!
# 17
Posted:
Feb 4 2020, 11:52 PM
Gak: Hey, good effort! One-weekers are hard, lol. Next time, though, don't forget to make sure your pages are big enough to be visible!
Symon: I really enjoy the juxtaposition of space bumpkin speech and the almost poetic narration, especially at the end. You're already aware of the quality issues, so all I'll say is that the events of pages 8&9 are a little muddy; I'm not sure exactly what's going on from one panel to the next, though I can glean from context clues that B79 was spaced. I think some backgrounds or some different angles would've helped; you've got a lot of different angles of the spaceship, but most of the views of Bubbha are fairly static.
Symon: I really enjoy the juxtaposition of space bumpkin speech and the almost poetic narration, especially at the end. You're already aware of the quality issues, so all I'll say is that the events of pages 8&9 are a little muddy; I'm not sure exactly what's going on from one panel to the next, though I can glean from context clues that B79 was spaced. I think some backgrounds or some different angles would've helped; you've got a lot of different angles of the spaceship, but most of the views of Bubbha are fairly static.
# 16
Posted:
Feb 4 2020, 10:39 PM
Gak: Welcome to void comics, Hopefully this is a good lesson on dealing with comics in a time limit. Comics are hard but we can help and it's great you entered this tourney and were able to produce something.
Symon: 10 pages in one week is really nice. I really like how you did the ship all the details on the side of it were really nice. My main crit is the font, it's too big and not a comic font. either go on sties like Dafont, 1001 fonts, or blambot and get a free font to use as they are meant for comics. You can also get away with decreasing the font size a bit so that you can have room for more dialogue, also when sketching plan out where your speech bubbles will be. But that's always an easy fix and you did really good with this comic.
Symon: 10 pages in one week is really nice. I really like how you did the ship all the details on the side of it were really nice. My main crit is the font, it's too big and not a comic font. either go on sties like Dafont, 1001 fonts, or blambot and get a free font to use as they are meant for comics. You can also get away with decreasing the font size a bit so that you can have room for more dialogue, also when sketching plan out where your speech bubbles will be. But that's always an easy fix and you did really good with this comic.
# 15
Posted:
Feb 4 2020, 11:12 AM
Gakken: Too bad you couldn't finish! A week is a very tight deadline. It would have been nice to get a closer look at what's happening on page 2. Better luck next time!
Symon_says: Ooh, look at you with your title page and everything. Sometimes you're really rocking that rough "Not quite digital, not quite traditional" (even the way part of the image is washed out might be creatively put to use) but as it settles in that it's unintended, the comic sufers for it. If you can't get access to a scanner, see if you can find some better lighting for photographing your pages. Your comic is ambitious, and some hierarchy of line weight would really kick its look up a notch.
Symon_says: Ooh, look at you with your title page and everything. Sometimes you're really rocking that rough "Not quite digital, not quite traditional" (even the way part of the image is washed out might be creatively put to use) but as it settles in that it's unintended, the comic sufers for it. If you can't get access to a scanner, see if you can find some better lighting for photographing your pages. Your comic is ambitious, and some hierarchy of line weight would really kick its look up a notch.
# 12
Posted:
Feb 1 2020, 01:32 PM
Flytee: SYMON_SAYS
The comic has a pulpy, old-school sci-fi vibe to it, its quite a unique aesthetic I like it a lot. Your character designs/translation of your opponent is really well done as well. I also love how everyone has defined, strange way of speaking. I'm not usually a fan of overally phonetic speech buuut it worked quite well here. It added to their weird, alien-ness.
Crit wise, clarity issues/ speech bubbles/ font use have been covered.
The sporadic colouring at the start and on page five feel unnecessary to me and didn't harmonise well with the greenish hue going throughout the comic. I think just a bit more shading and tone instead would've worked better.
Out of curiosity what is your method for colouring? It looks like you just go over the photo digitally, but it could've been coloured with promarkers. I can't tell! It's driving me nuts!
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Thanks Flytee! Space bumpkin speech has it's quirks. I'm hoping to get more of them tones and shades in the future. I used layer styles like grain merge and darken and such with colored layers.
Charlie: I too hope things aren't cause of more space ghosts.
Fun comic! A little hard to follow at times but I do like sci-fi
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Heathen: Symon: Please do more marker colors like on their ref sheet, I love your traditional look when it's more polished, it reminds me of 90s video game art, the sort of stuff that used to grace the pages of Nintendo Power and Hardcore Gamer. Photographing pages with a phone or tablet camera is perfectly fine, but this is awful quality. Sometimes you do what you gotta do, I guess. Can't wait to see your next round.
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# 11
Posted:
Jan 31 2020, 07:39 PM
Gakken: Hope this was a learning experience, don't stop.
Symon: Please do more marker colors like on their ref sheet, I love your traditional look when it's more polished, it reminds me of 90s video game art, the sort of stuff that used to grace the pages of Nintendo Power and Hardcore Gamer. Photographing pages with a phone or tablet camera is perfectly fine, but this is awful quality. Sometimes you do what you gotta do, I guess. Can't wait to see your next round.
Symon: Please do more marker colors like on their ref sheet, I love your traditional look when it's more polished, it reminds me of 90s video game art, the sort of stuff that used to grace the pages of Nintendo Power and Hardcore Gamer. Photographing pages with a phone or tablet camera is perfectly fine, but this is awful quality. Sometimes you do what you gotta do, I guess. Can't wait to see your next round.
# 10
Posted:
Jan 31 2020, 02:53 PM
I too hope things aren't cause of more space ghosts.
Fun comic! A little hard to follow at times but I do like sci-fi
Fun comic! A little hard to follow at times but I do like sci-fi
# 9
Posted:
Jan 31 2020, 09:33 AM
gak- better luck next time, those first panels looked real promising. Also don't be afraid to ask for help in the submission process if you're unsure on sizes!
SYMON_SAYS
The comic has a pulpy, old-school sci-fi vibe to it, its quite a unique aesthetic I like it a lot. Your character designs/translation of your opponent is really well done as well. I also love how everyone has defined, strange way of speaking. I'm not usually a fan of overally phonetic speech buuut it worked quite well here. It added to their weird, alien-ness.
Crit wise, clarity issues/ speech bubbles/ font use have been covered.
The sporadic colouring at the start and on page five feel unnecessary to me and didn't harmonise well with the greenish hue going throughout the comic. I think just a bit more shading and tone instead would've worked better.
Out of curiosity what is your method for colouring? It looks like you just go over the photo digitally, but it could've been coloured with promarkers. I can't tell! It's driving me nuts!
SYMON_SAYS
The comic has a pulpy, old-school sci-fi vibe to it, its quite a unique aesthetic I like it a lot. Your character designs/translation of your opponent is really well done as well. I also love how everyone has defined, strange way of speaking. I'm not usually a fan of overally phonetic speech buuut it worked quite well here. It added to their weird, alien-ness.
Crit wise, clarity issues/ speech bubbles/ font use have been covered.
The sporadic colouring at the start and on page five feel unnecessary to me and didn't harmonise well with the greenish hue going throughout the comic. I think just a bit more shading and tone instead would've worked better.
Out of curiosity what is your method for colouring? It looks like you just go over the photo digitally, but it could've been coloured with promarkers. I can't tell! It's driving me nuts!
# 8
Posted:
Jan 30 2020, 10:20 AM
Fred v2.0.1: What peculiar friends. Be careful how you set up your shots, despite all the narration it got hard to follow what was going on.
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Kozispoon: SYMON_SAYS- I don't know why but this color throughout appeals to me. It's like a piss yellow, or overexposed film. It's giving me old alien films of yesteryear. Also I love how these space pirates talk. It's so swarmy!
think the biggest thing I'd say to be mindful of is your word bubble placement. You tend to choose tight cramped areas where there's plenty of stuff going on that it crowds all your elements. Thing is ,you have areas that are open and empty, but the word bubbles arent placed there. Also considering your page size, your font could afford to be smaller to net you more comic panel space. What font are you using now? If you havent familiarized yourself with dafont.com, I'd highly recommend it.
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# 7
Posted:
Jan 30 2020, 01:47 AM
GAKKEN- I...I got nothing. Your comic page is so small I can't really make out whats goin on to critique it. Sorry
SYMON_SAYS- I don't know why but this color throughout appeals to me. It's like a piss yellow, or overexposed film. It's giving me old alien films of yesteryear. Also I love how these space pirates talk. It's so swarmy!
think the biggest thing I'd say to be mindful of is your word bubble placement. You tend to choose tight cramped areas where there's plenty of stuff going on that it crowds all your elements. Thing is ,you have areas that are open and empty, but the word bubbles arent placed there. Also considering your page size, your font could afford to be smaller to net you more comic panel space. What font are you using now? If you havent familiarized yourself with dafont.com, I'd highly recommend it.
SYMON_SAYS- I don't know why but this color throughout appeals to me. It's like a piss yellow, or overexposed film. It's giving me old alien films of yesteryear. Also I love how these space pirates talk. It's so swarmy!
think the biggest thing I'd say to be mindful of is your word bubble placement. You tend to choose tight cramped areas where there's plenty of stuff going on that it crowds all your elements. Thing is ,you have areas that are open and empty, but the word bubbles arent placed there. Also considering your page size, your font could afford to be smaller to net you more comic panel space. What font are you using now? If you havent familiarized yourself with dafont.com, I'd highly recommend it.
# 6
Posted:
Jan 28 2020, 04:00 PM
What peculiar friends. Be careful how you set up your shots, despite all the narration it got hard to follow what was going on.
# 5
Posted:
Jan 28 2020, 11:55 AM
Good effort Gakken! I'm glad I captured your characters always changing mysterious figure lol
Thecydork I had to photograph the pages because of no scanner. I would like to invest in one of them fancy miniature ones that would help me out, of course I should just go with using the digital drawing and can the traditional base...
But the SDT is an enlightening experience
Thecydork I had to photograph the pages because of no scanner. I would like to invest in one of them fancy miniature ones that would help me out, of course I should just go with using the digital drawing and can the traditional base...
But the SDT is an enlightening experience
# 4
Posted:
Jan 28 2020, 05:48 AM
Gak - Ahh what happened? Some nice-looking compositions on the first page, second one is super small though. In the future make sure pages are between 800-1000px wide, and try not to get too bogged down with the perfect idea or what have you. One weekers are tough and you really have to budget your time. Even if you’re not the biggest fan of an idea, as soon as you have one you should just go for it so that you can produce something that’s at least a finished story, and legible.
Symon - Digging the shots of the spaceship you include in your comic, very detailed. I couldn’t get a good sense of what was happening though due to the lack of colour and use of mostly closeups, which meant I couldn’t really see the environment your characters were in. An establishing shot of the interior may have been more helpful. I also think it would be better for you to scan your pages - the flash and yellow colour were quite distracting and made the speech bubbles stick out.
By the way, were you colouring digitally on top of the photo? There’s an odd quality to the colours that are present and a lot of gaps beside the lines that make it look like you did so.
Symon - Digging the shots of the spaceship you include in your comic, very detailed. I couldn’t get a good sense of what was happening though due to the lack of colour and use of mostly closeups, which meant I couldn’t really see the environment your characters were in. An establishing shot of the interior may have been more helpful. I also think it would be better for you to scan your pages - the flash and yellow colour were quite distracting and made the speech bubbles stick out.
By the way, were you colouring digitally on top of the photo? There’s an odd quality to the colours that are present and a lot of gaps beside the lines that make it look like you did so.
# 3
Posted:
Jan 28 2020, 12:43 AM
Awesome job Symon! you defo got the mysterious aspect of B7!
# 2
Posted:
Jan 20 2020, 10:24 PM
Aha- good luck to you too *sobS*
# 1
Posted:
Jan 20 2020, 05:32 PM
Alright! Aliens everywhere! Let us give them a good show Gakken.
Space. There's too much of it and it's everywhere.
Good luck!
Space. There's too much of it and it's everywhere.
Good luck!
Comic Details
Speed Death Tournament Match
Drawing Time:
1 week
Ended:
Feb 4th, 2020
Votes Cast:
25
Page Views:
1499
Winner:
Symon_says
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