Cab: I always admire your ambitious stories that wind up with an ensemble cast beyond the featured duo. I really love how you rendered "this brickhouse!" Your comics are just so dense with information: Here we have multiple running gags, backstory, "meanwhile," lore for multiple weapons, a sequel hook.... Part of me wants to suggest trimming some of the fat and distilling the comic down a little. You do wind up pulling it off, though.
Wait, how big is Connor if he's filling up that couch?
Durian: I'm really loving some of these facial expressions, in particular the villain's smarmy smile, and those CUTE DOGS. I love how you went all the way for that full, action-packed battle scene that you kept clear and suspenseful even when you coudn't include everything. I get the idea that you realized partway through that you could fit in more per page. I suppose it's better that you went for fewer panels per page rather than more smaller panels, in general, but there were some parts where it slowed down the pacing to have so few, big panels for things like conversation. I hope to see more Bruno in the future!
Both: So, uh... how is Bruno's mask staying up?
The Lion and The Knight / Veruca Chance vs. Bruno Ledoux
Critiques & Comments
# 18
Posted:
Jan 31 2021, 04:38 PM
# 17
Posted:
Jan 31 2021, 06:33 AM
Cab- Your comics are always light-hearted and fun, I can see why the Saturday morning cartoon comment comes up so much. I especially feel it when I read Veruca comics, I think its the unlocking magical artefacts angle as well as the spunky female protag and her loveable male sidekick. It's like the lovechild of Kim possible and Xiaolin showdown- aka I would've watched the crap out of this as a kid. Its a lot of fun.
I've also gotta commend you for how well you drew Bruno- he looks very at home in your style and the anatomy looks on point.
Durian- 27 pages! You came out swinging! This was a fantastic first showing. Your art had some strong expressions and the fight scene flowed very well, also those early grayscale pages were really well balanced and easy on the eyes. Story-wise, whilst this was mostly a big fight scene, I enjoyed the wholesome interaction on page 12. Bruno seems like a truly good, pure character and I can't wait to see what he gets up to in the future, considering how chaotic a lot of the citizens of void are.
I do have some further thoughts on writing but they might edge a little too close to crit, so if you ever want to chit chat about stories and characters my inbox is always open!
I've also gotta commend you for how well you drew Bruno- he looks very at home in your style and the anatomy looks on point.
Durian- 27 pages! You came out swinging! This was a fantastic first showing. Your art had some strong expressions and the fight scene flowed very well, also those early grayscale pages were really well balanced and easy on the eyes. Story-wise, whilst this was mostly a big fight scene, I enjoyed the wholesome interaction on page 12. Bruno seems like a truly good, pure character and I can't wait to see what he gets up to in the future, considering how chaotic a lot of the citizens of void are.
I do have some further thoughts on writing but they might edge a little too close to crit, so if you ever want to chit chat about stories and characters my inbox is always open!
# 16
Posted:
Jan 30 2021, 12:33 PM
Cab: I remember seeing this in progress especially when cooking up the BurgerMeister. I'm glad to see Veruca get some more development and how you're painting the Phoenix Coalition thus far, and seeing Bruno in your style is pretty great as well. Keep up your worldbuilding man!
Durian: The sheer amount of pages alone for your first battle is impressive, and it's a hell of a way to make a first impression! I love seeing how expressive everyone is, and you have a knack for dynamic action. Hopefully you keep drawing more in the future, and know that you'll always be welcome in Void should you ever decide to take another crack at the whole comic thing.
Durian: The sheer amount of pages alone for your first battle is impressive, and it's a hell of a way to make a first impression! I love seeing how expressive everyone is, and you have a knack for dynamic action. Hopefully you keep drawing more in the future, and know that you'll always be welcome in Void should you ever decide to take another crack at the whole comic thing.
# 15
Posted:
Jan 30 2021, 06:34 AM
What a wholesome battle! Reminds me of Saturday morning cartoons growing up! Full-pledged hero meets reluctant young heroine and a wacky sidekick. These three write themselves 
Cab - love the details you put in every comic. Bruno in your style is just [chefkiss]. Astounding amount of work for the time you were given. Wow
Durian - Hey! I know you've got some challenges while working on this but you should be proud of what you delivered! Such a strong showing for your first battle and I love that you did not skimp on the fight scenes! Bruno is such a lovable guy and we need more of him in Void.
Cab - love the details you put in every comic. Bruno in your style is just [chefkiss]. Astounding amount of work for the time you were given. Wow
Durian - Hey! I know you've got some challenges while working on this but you should be proud of what you delivered! Such a strong showing for your first battle and I love that you did not skimp on the fight scenes! Bruno is such a lovable guy and we need more of him in Void.
# 14
Posted:
Jan 29 2021, 09:20 AM
Man! Cab's comic was a great read!
# 13
Posted:
Jan 27 2021, 07:25 PM
The interactions between these two was very very charming!
Bruno is so sweet and charming! His personality works really well with Veruca's, great job you two!
This was very sweet and wholesome
Bruno is so sweet and charming! His personality works really well with Veruca's, great job you two!
This was very sweet and wholesome
# 12
Posted:
Jan 25 2021, 09:11 PM
Heeeeey these were some fun comics
Cab: thank you for creating the burgermeister meme. Best one since found cake.
Durian: I really dig Bruno as a character and hope you can find your footing to make more stories with him in the future.
Cab: thank you for creating the burgermeister meme. Best one since found cake.
Durian: I really dig Bruno as a character and hope you can find your footing to make more stories with him in the future.
# 11
Posted:
Jan 25 2021, 06:17 PM
Damn, you both went absolutely ham on these!!!
Cab: I missed the little guy's name (I think Veruca said Birdseed, but I'm not sure if that's a nickname), but I absolutely adore him and how he's portrayed. You draw that little troublemaker so cute! The story was fun to follow, the variety in the character designs and costumes was engaging, and you wrote the characters wonderfully. Excellent work, I really enjoyed!
Durian: This was a super ambitious comic, and I'm reading other comments saying that this is your first one?? I love the creature designs, and the bloody violence was a breath of fresh air. The combat was handled very well, and I'm seeing explicit choices for the variety in the panel shapes that really helped the action. I think the only thing holding you back is being new to procreate, and seriously, that's the most relatable thing. Using a new program for your art feels like painting a mural with a toothbrush, and you managed to make something really cool with it!
Cab: I missed the little guy's name (I think Veruca said Birdseed, but I'm not sure if that's a nickname), but I absolutely adore him and how he's portrayed. You draw that little troublemaker so cute! The story was fun to follow, the variety in the character designs and costumes was engaging, and you wrote the characters wonderfully. Excellent work, I really enjoyed!
Durian: This was a super ambitious comic, and I'm reading other comments saying that this is your first one?? I love the creature designs, and the bloody violence was a breath of fresh air. The combat was handled very well, and I'm seeing explicit choices for the variety in the panel shapes that really helped the action. I think the only thing holding you back is being new to procreate, and seriously, that's the most relatable thing. Using a new program for your art feels like painting a mural with a toothbrush, and you managed to make something really cool with it!
# 10
Posted:
Jan 24 2021, 07:43 PM
Cab - Great action scenes, and you drew Bruno’s beefy physique really well!
Durian - This was a great first battle! To say you’re inexperienced with an iPad, the actions and expressions are still very clear and lively. I love the design of the monster too!
Durian - This was a great first battle! To say you’re inexperienced with an iPad, the actions and expressions are still very clear and lively. I love the design of the monster too!
# 9
Posted:
Jan 24 2021, 11:50 AM
Damn Durian! You went all out! Both sides were fantastic! Loved the monster designs!
# 8
Posted:
Jan 24 2021, 10:55 AM
Like I said in our Dms, it was an honor fighting you Durian, you did an amazing job for your first comic, this was totally fun my friend
# 7
Posted:
Jan 24 2021, 09:36 AM
CAB! Your comic is so cool! I loved it! You're so good with expressions and poses!!! Thank you so much for battling me!!!^^
# 6
Posted:
Jan 12 2021, 01:30 AM
Durianknuckle: Omg I'll make apologies in advance but my lineart, comic borders, panels, camera angles anatomy errors, everything and all of the flaws are awful and terrible.
I'm aware of the flaws and I'd like to not have harsh critics on my comic! I KNOW IT'S TERRIBLE LOL I did my best! I'm struggling with the Ipad LOL
It was better with traditional media but I needed effects with Procreate!
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Don't sweat it! I'm sure we will love what ever you bring to the table. When you submit your comic there will be a spot where you can request what type of critique you want if at all. Void is a place to experiment and progress with your artwork. Nothing will ever be perfect and that's totally alright. I'm looking forward to your comic, I really enjoyed your intro! Good Luck and have fun!
# 5
Posted:
Jan 6 2021, 03:31 AM
Omg I'll make apologies in advance but my lineart, comic borders, panels, camera angles anatomy errors, everything and all of the flaws are awful and terrible.
I'm aware of the flaws and I'd like to not have harsh critics on my comic! I KNOW IT'S TERRIBLE LOL I did my best! I'm struggling with the Ipad LOL
It was better with traditional media but I needed effects with Procreate!
I'm aware of the flaws and I'd like to not have harsh critics on my comic! I KNOW IT'S TERRIBLE LOL I did my best! I'm struggling with the Ipad LOL
It was better with traditional media but I needed effects with Procreate!
# 4
Posted:
Jan 3 2021, 04:22 AM
Oho!!
# 3
Posted:
Jan 3 2021, 02:29 AM
Excite!!! Eeee!
# 2
Posted:
Jan 2 2021, 05:34 PM
Beef is back on the menu folks!!!
# 1
Posted:
Jan 2 2021, 12:03 PM
YES! Bruno and Veruca in action!!
Comic Details
Regular Match
Drawing Time:
3 weeks
Ended:
Jan 31st, 2021
Votes Cast:
16
Page Views:
1475
Winner:
Cab
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Thanks for the comment! Bruno's mask is worn like a normal surgical mask over the ears! It's just that sometimes the earbands of the mask doesn't show lol XD