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Fluff’s side be like





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snowy: you have leveled up since our roomates match, probably due to being in Arma lol. Your instinct with Romance seems to be to keep everyone appealing and clean looking at all times  in both writing and visuals. but for me personally, this makes it harder to glom on to the characters and feel attachment to them (can't have a tumblr sexyman if he's classically conventionally attractive ya know). your Ideal Rickter stands in stark contrast to your Villainous Gus. Gus here is depicted like this fairy tail gremlin or witch, putting the characters through conflict just to test their resolve. that does make the story more interesting- or it would, if either of Rickter or Dairyu DISLIKED what Gus had done to them without their consent. maybe I should feel like I'm missing something here, like when you read old fairy tails that built off older stories still, but the oldest stories have been lost so the context is missing.

anyway, it's so nice to get a comic artist so well rounded that one can get down to nit picking the story and characterization because we actually know exactly what you were going for and you illustrated it so well! I can tell you care ALOT about THIS BATTLE in particular and this was a gift for Fluff and something very personal to yourself. it looks so polished and refined and clearly it is just how you want it to be and you should be proud of that!

Also, The sex scene poses are really dynamic and very hentai.
And the back-matter comics at the end to explain the scars are great. Giving Rickter a canon age range is a gnarly extra scar, he deserves it. Also it’s cute to think he’s middle-aged and Dairyu is a middle-aged demigod, so they match kinda?

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fluff: I feel like I can see influence from our roomates match, from the way you illustrate Gus' freaky little bird paws coming out of Rickter's neck and grabbing stuff, esp. And I adore how you included Tikka. and Long Cat baby Yamato made me laugh. I forgot that meme, I'm glad it's back. And all your cameos help ground the characters and humanize them. Page 2 is funny, but I thought Nagore was stuck to the ceiling. Very on-brand Nagore, either way.

I got a little confused when Yamato burst out of Rickter’s neck. First of all, I couldn’t remember who that was and couldn’t put it together that ‘oh it has antlers, but they’re smaller than Dairyu’s antlers and therefore it’s Dairyu’s baby with Gus because it’s coming out of Rickter and looks kind of like Gus yeah that tracks.’ and I couldn’t put together why she had to jump up and fight the new dragon X,D I had to read it a couple times before I put together that the Yam was the big monster she was fighting one page prior. It would have been nice to see some illustration that explained how babby is formed. How Gus get gregnant. ,_, sorry to get kinky but what if it showed Gus and Rickter orgasmed at the same time Dairyu did that would make sense idk idk maybe he got her DNA from eating her hair? That’s cute I like that.

It’s a really nice kind of fairytale element to have the mother have to fight the son as soon as it’s born. I have heard some where the baby is born as a wild animal and the father has to skin it so the baby can come out. But I didn’t put together that that was what was happening. Then after the fight,  I thought Dairyu being exhausted meant she had literally been the one in labor. But now i see fighting the babby is a metaphor for giving birth lel.

It was nice to see Yamato’s origin story and see some of his early babyhood and even how he interacts with the other characters. De-kink-a-fies the story, overall. Ends on a sweet innocent note, like this is the story they can actually tell him when he’s older.

You also have such a nice way of turning everyone into trashy bois and I do love trashy bois.such sloppy mouths and eyes makes everyone look more alive. kissable, even. who know.

 you're really good at making multiple appointments on time, too! continue to stay hype, FlufF~