Meredith's Story Tavern Vol.1 / Craven, Juniper Steelestring, Stein, and Flower Power
Critiques & Comments
# 4
Posted:
Nov 15 2019, 02:46 PM
I've been eager for more Meredith, and more style experiments... which makes it a little hard to critique, since you're deliberately going in different visual directions for each one, pushing yourself into territory you might not normally do. The first story's look started out a little busy, but then evened out.. but the thick lines on page 5 really look out of place, and not in a "I meant to do it and it's symbolic" way. Second story is perfect because it features my baby in a bittersweet little ghost story. It's nice to think they managed to get a grave. I'm not sure I really get the dialog, though ("Can you help me remember" "I can, but I need you to remember'). The third is a nice horror reveal. Since the garrote is a play on "thread" the part where she actually brings it out probably could have been a bit bigger and more dynamically pose, I think.
# 3
Posted:
Nov 14 2019, 03:05 AM
Well done everyone! I really enjoyed all of these stories
I also love how Mereditch strings them together, its a really smart concept and I'm excited to see more collabs like this.
I also love how Mereditch strings them together, its a really smart concept and I'm excited to see more collabs like this.
# 2
Posted:
Nov 13 2019, 01:09 PM
A great bundle of short stories from some really skilled and passionate folks!
Great work everyone!
Great work everyone!
# 1
Posted:
Nov 11 2019, 03:02 PM
For this my collab part was only Junipers story. I did the writting and colors for it and can did all the lineart. also it looks like the first page the lighint layers got messed up, sorry about that.
Beyond Battle
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1 week
Ended:
Nov 18th, 2019
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einsam
Colbitzer
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Birthright
Saal, Louise Ambre-Aliona, and Llaana
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Help Needed
Theakon
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The Great Switcheroo
Louise Ambre-Aliona vs. Luniel Gekka
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The Great Switcheroo
Colbitzer vs. Veruca Chance
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Onto crits:
One More For The Road - Sketchiness as a stylistic choice is all well and good but this was so sketchy it felt messy, and I have no idea what was happening on page 5. It felt like someone’s sketchbook page slapped into the middle of the story. The dialogue seemed very rushed. In the first few pages there were already two typos and one pretty clunky sentence - “quite” instead of “quiet”, “defiantly” instead of “definitely” , and the sentence “exorcise this town’s ghost problems” which just doesn’t make sense. You exorcise ghosts, there’s no need to add “problems”. I also agree with Astro in that there didn’t seem to be a conclusion.
The Lost Garden - The blurred lines were super obvious here next to the crisp speech bubbles in some panels. And yeah the standard text on the gravestone really threw me, I feel like handwritten words would have been more effective.
Loose Threads - I actually don’t have much crit except that there were only 3 fullbodies in the whole comic and I feel more space could have been used to make things more impactful.