Hope stuff eases up soon. Also, the style you used to draw yourself on the last page was super cute and I’ve never seen it before? Would honestly be interested in seeing you try a comic in that style!Brabbit - Aw, this was a sweet comic. I especially enjoyed Jade’s adorable expressions and the montage on page 4 - I didn’t notice on my first read, but I really liked the subtle changes such as more notes on the pinboard in the background as the days went on! Speaking of backgrounds, I personally liked how you did them and didn’t feel they were too minimal. You had the right balance of the occasional very detailed panel, then a couple of lines in other panels to imply the scenes we’ve seen before. There were only a few times where I thought “hm, too plain”.
I second Flytee with the proportions though, and I also feel the story was a bit shallow. On page 11 Kit says he hopes they help with “whatever’s hurting his heart so much” but Iain doesn’t seem all that hurt throughout the comic. He’s very willing to help, not grumpy and never really appears troubled outside his internal monologue. You show a lot of Jade’s eagerness to learn, maybe one of those moments, the focus could have been on Iain seeming down. The audience knows Iain has some emotional baggage, but since it’s not really shown here, it seems a bit of a jump for Kit to interpret a vaguely pessimistic conversation as Iain’s heart “hurting so much”. Additionally, the wording of the monologue on that page doesn’t flow well and lessens the emotional impact. “I guess it seems like not much to you... but to me it means so much” might read better if written as “I guess it doesn't seem like much to you... but it means so much to me”.
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Brabbit: I love your stories and how sweet you make them. it's really special just how pure you're characters and really refreshing honestly. I do like the backgrounds here there are there enough to give a good sense of location and have some details. I will disagree with the proportion crit at least for this comic, since this primarily contains 3 characters and the older character being an elf him looking young is fine for me, however this is something you should think about moving forward when they come across varied characters with more body types.
My main crit would be with shading. You do some nice pencil shading on Iain's under coat on page 5 and 7 and i wish that was present in more parts of the characters to help add some more depth to them, like on Iain's collar. Beyond that good job with the comic and I look forward to seeing more Kit and Jade as beams of Hope Void kind of needs.