Video: I love  your linework! It's really nice to look at, and got such nice weight to it. Honestly even though it's supposedly not finished, the ending feels like a good ending to a chapter and a nice buildup to something else. The only thing that really detracted from the comic was, as Arts mentioned, the weirdly pixelated text in the first few pages.

G.Lo: God your inks are so gorgeous!! Honestly I can't even find anything to critique. There's just so many small details and everything looks so prettyyyyy.

long story short both of you need to give me your lineart skills!!

Video: I always enjoy the stories you put in your comics, they always feel like they're part of a grander world and scale. I like your line art it's thick and stylistic. There are some pages where the font looks oddly pixaleted and it's distracting in some of those pages. It's a shame you couldn't finish your story but I would love to see a full BB of the entire story and in general more of your stuff since you always make such grand enjoyable stories.

G.lo: You're lineart and inks are great and I think my favorite part is how you do faces. I also liked the story overall and the bit at the end was great. My favorite parts are the multiple panel small reactions, they add a fun little bit of light humor and use of simplification wonderfully. I only have some minor crits, some pages seem a bit large and the word bubbles seem a bit pixelated. Also while all the hands were well done, the small fire effects weren't obvious enough and on my first read through i didn't realize that was what they were doing with the glasses. Overall though this was a great comic.

Video320: It looks like you didn't finish the comic, but what you have is pretty exciting. It's a bit close up at times, like when they're in the street together. I think that tranquilizer dart action could have been scripted a little more cleanly. The staging and screen direction on page 2 also seem a little off to me. I do like that big full page, which is appropriate to how important Remus is.

G. Lo: That is a fantastic face to make at a dragon. Those are all some fantastic faces. I had to reread because I wasn't quite sure how May Wu went from being left out to being threatened, but it was nice to see a storyline about settling a conflict through talking in a rather sweet and interesting way.

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video- i love the way you draw and your big thick lines. the pages you were able to color look really great! If I had to nitpick something it'd be the text-- it looks oddly and distractingly pixelated on your colored pages and don't on your black and white ones. In the later pages the text is on those grey bubbles so maybe if each character had their own bubble color it'd cut back on that pixely weirdness? I'd like to see more of this story and just more may wu in general!

g.lo- really impressive art i like how you fill up your panels but the gutters being all sorts of different sizes is a bit distracting. there's a lot of close ups of hands in all sorts of interesting positions like during the wine making scene and holding may's face at the end and the motion is always easy to read which isn't easy because hands are dang hard to draw. this was a cute complete story. wine heals all wounds!

I know I haven't been here for a while but the both of you deserve comments.

Video320: I'm so flattered that Itami is a part of this! That aside, I can't wait so see how the rest of the story ends up. It certainly looks like you were building up to something!

G.Lo: You've got a gorgeous looking style, and the abrupt ending was pretty hilarious all things considering.

Can't wait to see more from the both of you!

Video320- Your art and writing has so much personality to it, I found this really easy and fun to read through as a result. Story wise, obviously it wasn't finished, but I felt it worked as a cool stand alone comic setting up a bigger adventure. The ending didn't feel apprupt...any plans to tell the bigger story?
(ALSO THAT BLUE AND RAE CAMEO AT THE START <3 I love how you drew them.)

G.Lo- your art honestly had me swooning, both the people and the background are so confidently drawn, beautiful work. The story was also really amusing, not being familiar with these characters at all, that ending really caught me offguard. Great job :3

G.Lo-- That ending had me laughing, it was such a nice shocking twist I enjoyed this tale of winery lol

and Video320- Man, that ending even if an abrupt ending was a nice cliffhanger, I could just hear the kill bill music start as they were about to kick some ass.

All in all, you both did great work here, kudos to the both of ya  :-)

also submitted. Ran out of time. i'll finish it later and upload it. Sorry G.Lo.

Submitted!

Don't think I'm *completely* ready for 2 weekers. One day I'll submit a colored battle, but not today lol.