Anthony, most of the stuff has been said already, I just want to reiterate... The textures are a bit overwhelming in places and draw attention to themselves rather than becoming part of the background. The colors are fun, but they are Lisa Frank vibrant. Watch out for big head syndrome, like the panel where Casimir is washing a dish, her head is kinda huge. The story was easy to follow and enjoyable. Excellent attention to backgrounds. Yup... just keep working on Anatomy and perspective...
Casimir vs. Martín Rivera
Critiques & Comments
# 27
Posted:
Dec 2 2009, 01:38 PM
# 26
Posted:
Dec 1 2009, 11:11 AM
It's cool Betito, I'm sorry for that to have happen. I was so looking forward to seeing your illustration of Casimir.
I would rather have lost in a fare match than to win by default. But we'll get another chance With Hebe. Only when we're both ready.
I would rather have lost in a fare match than to win by default. But we'll get another chance With Hebe. Only when we're both ready.
# 25
Posted:
Dec 1 2009, 11:02 AM
First of all, SORRY Anthony! I'm really sorry, I had finished drawing my pages in the first two weeks but i waited until the last minute to ask for a translation ... How stupid! :O
On Thursday I had to travel by surprise for personal problems but when i return from the trip it was too late ...
I promise not to fail you if we have a rematch, sorry! ._.
I loved your comic! When you want to battle Hebe i'll accept!
On Thursday I had to travel by surprise for personal problems but when i return from the trip it was too late ...
I promise not to fail you if we have a rematch, sorry! ._.
I loved your comic! When you want to battle Hebe i'll accept!
# 24
Posted:
Nov 30 2009, 08:30 AM
thanks Thomas Tan, I think thats a good idea and just go full black and white next time. I need to practice on my details and hand controls.
Mrnoitaull: i'm trying to get some cameo's in my battles and you were a great inspiration to that. I'm planning on finding more people to add to Casimir's Universe in Void.
Mrnoitaull: i'm trying to get some cameo's in my battles and you were a great inspiration to that. I'm planning on finding more people to add to Casimir's Universe in Void.
# 23
Posted:
Nov 30 2009, 07:15 AM
DOPE DOPE DOPE! Sucks that betito didn't get to respond.
Cameo FTW!
Cameo FTW!
# 22
Posted:
Nov 29 2009, 08:35 PM
Anthony, I'm really impressed by how much you keep improving. However, I think that you're relying too much on the colors for your art. Lay off them and do some strict black and white stuff for a bit to tighten up your inks for a while.
Can't wait to see the next comic,
TT
Can't wait to see the next comic,
TT
# 21
Posted:
Nov 29 2009, 07:00 PM
Dang man. you have me blushing, I'm glad you mentioned the panel thing, i'm trying to find a creative way to show a dynamic panels. I'll find a way for that. I was going for a Hip Hop'ish color theme but...i don't know. I really see where your coming from on the texture tip, i just watch a bunch of "Good" Kung Fu Action movies to help me on the choreography, but i'd love to do something though.
# 20
Posted:
Nov 29 2009, 12:29 PM
Tony: this is leaps and bounds above your last battle. The story was much crisper I thought how she used her powers in this one was great, I'm glad you didn't go into lengthy explanations of what she was doing. Simply "I'm using my powers to view your memories" was succinct and perfect. I think that shows signs of a good storyteller, not under estimating your audiences intelligence. Artwise this was stronger in some ways, but there are still things you need to improve. Firstly Your paneling and pacing need lots and lots of work. I'd really work on how you lay your panels out, the flow of the panels is not poor, follwoing the action is easy just the general design of your page is not pleasing, I think you are using too much space on the page..your gutters are almost non existent, It feels like every panel is butted right up against the adjacent one. This is visually unappealing also what you are telling your viewers is there is no pause here...so on pages with no dialogue or you just speed through each panel. Gutters show pauses in time, they also allow for visual and chronological space between panels. Negative space is okay...All of your panels are just full of STUFF! Stuff is good, but like everything else you need moderation. Some panels can be super detailed and have crazy amounts of information, others should be a solid color, empty, quiet, this visual ebb and flow is what makes excellent storytellers. Colour wasn't realy my bag, I think you were going for a palette inspired by graffiti, everything was really really really saturated. Neons and super vibrant. And there was an over abundance of textures, textures textures everywhere but not a drawn item to see...When something is obviously a photoshopped texture you haven't done your artist as a job. The brcks, streets, dance floor, etc. etc. they just scream photoshop. All of these components mixed together make it so that what I think is generally a strong comic seem a little blah. Too much is going on. I'd say be a little choosier with what you include in your comics. like "Okay on the energy beams and fight scenes I will use really bright colors and neons, Only on backgrounds will I use subdued textures, only on...etc etc etc etc" I think that could take your artwork right now from okay to Awesome. MODERATION MODERATION!! Keep working on anatomy. What works the best and you continue to amaze me is your fight choreography...I'd liek you to choreograph my fights. I can't choreograph a fight to save my life so when people come up with interesting ways for characters to battle I get excited. I think this is hte first itme I could consider Martin a formidable character I've always found him to be portrayed as some kind of pussy but yeah he was kind of bad ass in this one. I think most people already touched on the proofreading. Work on that...have a friend read through everything before you submit...and either make larger text bubbles or use smaller type because they were super super crowded.
I think you are getting loads and loads better very quickly so keep up the good work homie I hope to see a lot from Casimir in the future.
I think you are getting loads and loads better very quickly so keep up the good work homie I hope to see a lot from Casimir in the future.
# 19
Posted:
Nov 29 2009, 09:40 AM
Coldstream: thanks man
Mister Kent: i was playing with some coloring techniques and still looking for something that i can feel. I"m getting closer but not there yet.
Fox24: I'm so working on my dialoge, man. I'm trying not to be so corny with my writing......
Mister Kent: i was playing with some coloring techniques and still looking for something that i can feel. I"m getting closer but not there yet.
Fox24: I'm so working on my dialoge, man. I'm trying not to be so corny with my writing......
# 18
Posted:
Nov 29 2009, 09:37 AM
Fox24: who's mark?
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# 17
Posted:
Nov 28 2009, 11:27 PM
I was going to say "over-the-top Lisa Frank folder" but your style is in no danger of that -it was just a caution.
# 16
Posted:
Nov 28 2009, 11:25 PM
Boxing for Jesus! Boxing for
Dammit Dog got that stuck in me head
Serious review time:
Sir Baiz, I really enjoyed your comic this time. The opening pages with the dancing were actually my favorite - the colors and shading worked best in those scenes, I feel. However, I have two notes for you to consider. Firstly, while I think the colors were pretty, they were pretty highly saturated from start to finish. The candy coloring is an attractive style, just be careful that it doesn't become some over-the-top.
Also, your shading could benefit from less fuzz. I'm not saying you have to cell-shade, as that's not for everyone's style, but some tighter areas of shade would work well with your animated style.
Even though there were some proportion issues (sometimes the head to body ratio was out of sync), I think your body language is great. That's a large part of the success to the dance scene. Keep up the good work in all areas!
Dammit Dog got that stuck in me head
Serious review time:
Sir Baiz, I really enjoyed your comic this time. The opening pages with the dancing were actually my favorite - the colors and shading worked best in those scenes, I feel. However, I have two notes for you to consider. Firstly, while I think the colors were pretty, they were pretty highly saturated from start to finish. The candy coloring is an attractive style, just be careful that it doesn't become some over-the-top.
Also, your shading could benefit from less fuzz. I'm not saying you have to cell-shade, as that's not for everyone's style, but some tighter areas of shade would work well with your animated style.
Even though there were some proportion issues (sometimes the head to body ratio was out of sync), I think your body language is great. That's a large part of the success to the dance scene. Keep up the good work in all areas!
# 15
Posted:
Nov 28 2009, 10:19 PM
who's mark?
# 14
Posted:
Nov 28 2009, 09:33 PM
Looks good Mark... def getting better!!
# 13
Posted:
Nov 28 2009, 09:17 PM
Anthony, I love your back grounds and colors, but something has to be done about your dialog. It seems very basic and it lacks a little color. Like when he says casimir what are you doing? you could have went with, this is not your fight girl stay back! it adds more drama too it and intensity. But other than that It was very beautifully done. O and your word balloons, better placement. Good stuff. Corry is everywhere I tell ya!
# 12
Posted:
Nov 28 2009, 08:45 PM
Aw man that sucks to the max
# 11
Posted:
Nov 28 2009, 08:34 PM
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
# 10
Posted:
Nov 28 2009, 12:03 AM
last second,but Uploaded
# 9
Posted:
Nov 26 2009, 07:08 PM
Boxing for Jesus! Boxing for Jesus! Boxing for Jesus!
# 8
Posted:
Nov 26 2009, 05:41 AM
HAPPY TURKEYDAY!!!!!!
# 7
Posted:
Nov 23 2009, 06:29 PM
Well i Hyped the Battle.......yep.....
# 6
Posted:
Nov 16 2009, 11:38 AM
man i'm cutting it tight. I hope i can finish....
# 5
Posted:
Nov 1 2009, 01:17 PM
no prob Betito, I'm glad we could do this, homie.
# 4
Posted:
Nov 1 2009, 01:01 AM
Good luck to you too Anthony! Thanks for the challenge n_n
# 3
Posted:
Oct 31 2009, 11:33 PM
lol
# 2
Posted:
Oct 31 2009, 08:24 PM
Yay angel boxing.
# 1
Posted:
Oct 30 2009, 04:44 PM
OK OK OK good luck Betito,
Regular Match
Drawing Time:
3 weeks + 1
Ended:
Dec 5th, 2009
Votes Cast:
21
Page Views:
2307
Winner:
anthonybaiz
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