Heh, Lenia is a like a guy the way she walks and talks except she has a smoking hot bod.
Pretty cool showing so far. I think those grey tones work with your style.

Thats just what I was thinking Berlin.
Beyond Battle it is.

So that means I want a gilly? Lenia is fine looking girl, she could get a man with it being a man gilly.

Comments taking in stride, good man. I\'d challenge you, but I can\'t think of a good reason to. And if you can\'t think of a good reason, why do it.

Why not do a beyond the battle then? I\'m working on one now and one after my first fight.

I do tend to uderstate things a bit, so that will be my next challenge won\'t it? To spice things up. I sappose when I challenge, or get challenged by more colorful/flamboyient personalities, or perhaps more action oriented characters, I\'ll step it up a notch to do them justice.

Overall story was a concern of mine, and initially, I needed to establish where Lenia was going to sleep every night, so that was the reason for the down tempo first \'battle\'.

I do look forward to flexing Lenia\'s muscles a bit, as long as I can work it in to the bigger storyline I had in mind for her. No fights for the fights sake, there has got to be a reason.

So if there\'s anybody out there who thinks our characters should bump into eachother, give me a holler, and we\'ll work it out.

A \"Man Gilly\" is an old western term for a man-whore. Remember, Lenia is from the west where they do things different. She meant it quite bluntly. She\'s been on the road a long time.

Aaaw usako, i was hoping to see more of Sid and her T.I.T.S.
Well, these things happen.

Mit, i really like your interior drawing. Especially the small futuristic elements.
The calm and simplistic shading you use has this sunday nite cartoony feel. You can draw cars. *jealous*
I like the perspective you used on the last page where you see the chick\'s rear.
Keep it up! My vote\'s in;)

Oh yes, Miticis though very entertaining, I found this to not be terribly creative. I think I want to see something a bit more off the wall from you the next time maybe. I\'m not saying it\'s the blandest thing I\'ve ever read, it\'s not, but compared to a lot of what is posted on Void City...well I mean Deyla ended a fight by shouting Aids and poking a bloody finger into someone\'s eye. Gotta work hard to stand out \'round here.

There, something to work on, but really not very creative isn\'t the worst thing you could do. Hope to see more soon.

-BP

You did too mean to yell.

Hello, BP here, giving you a critque. *cracks neck* Okay, let me pop these open and I\'ll give you a page by page.

Page one: What is a man Gilly? Aside from that, I like the use of minimal background. Just the desk. You could have put in a buncha white noise bull crap like a lot of people do, but you didn\'t. I\'m not super excited about your style, that\'s just me. But this doesn\'t stop my enjoyment of this piece so far. Great costume details and that car, nice. It\'d be more impressive if it was a drifferant car I think. Like a PT Cruiser or something not so typical for comics.

Page two: Great background. Holy shit. That earns your quality A right there. I love the belt in the bottom panel, is that weird? I like your use of grey far more than your use of black. Your blacks could be blacker? More solid. More marvel I suppose. Great angles here.

Page three: Good expresions in this page and perfect panel use, I\"m a big fan of telling stories like this. I love the angles in the first three panels. It\'s the same place, but never feels like a comic strip character in an elevator. Mine would. Hopefully though, I\'d make a joke about it lookign so shitty. I love your elevator scene the best so far. Even more than the girl butt.

Page four: Perfect punchline. I kinda wanted a fight in this one, but I\'m not disappointed by the outcome. That\'s allI have to say on four, work on those blacks.

Overveiw: Very good piece here. You are pro material if I ever saw it. You have a fairly standard comic style. That puts me off, but it won\'t put off someone trying to write a story that doesn\'t need any flash. Also not one \"WTF\" so there is a plus. Funny and no to be continues.

I want to say mean shit so. . .

Usako fer sheezy? Three weeks and nothing? Damn. How bout you work on that for next time.

-BP

Something to consider:
More than half the comics printed are printed with ALL CAPS so to make them esier to read. Granted, I could have used a different font, and this is the internet, but I was coming from a comic illustraitors mentality when \'texting\' my pages, not a chater or internet mentality.

I didn\'t mean to YELL.

Thanks for all the wonderful comments,
Damn...Tough crowd!

What\'s up with people being out of it for quite a while, challenging someone at random; and then defaulting?

Whenever I see a battle involving a relatively old member, I can bet on it that he or she will default, It makes me a sad Neo really.


Also, I assumed Lenia Conrad was a dude, until the nude panels came.

Wtf, 3 weeks drawing time and a default?!

AND MITICIS, ATLEAST USE SMALL CAPS OR SOMETHING, BECAUSE IT LOOKED LIKE THEY WERE YELLING THE WHOLE TIME.

Oh man... Im getting pumped. Time minus 3 days left, whoo-yeah. Its fun cranking out these pages on a deadline let me tell you.

Usako, I hope you\'re doing well, I am eager to see how you interprited my character.

Cool.

This is gonna be hot.

OMG! Holly has returned!!

This is gonna be some hot ass shit ! looking forward to Conrad\'s debut- and sidney\'s comeback !