The two of you are honestly neck and neck on your linework construction, so this is a super strong match-up I was glad to read!
Cyber: The plot here was very simple but doofy and I kinda loved it, going friggin' no holds barred on arm wrestling. Just very enjoyable!
Robin: They're real small stuff, but they honestly made it hard for me to get into this, so I've got to note them anyway: The unresized pages makes it a pain to scroll and read, and the fact that the first letter of every word is bolded is very confusing - I keep reading them as capital letters and everyone's in Kanaya case. Still, I really love your composition and action!
Invitational Tournament 2019: Round 2 / Koop & El Cuervo JR. vs. Hajire Cloud and Beam
Critiques & Comments
# 9
Posted:
Jul 2 2019, 07:55 PM
# 8
Posted:
Jun 30 2019, 12:22 PM
Cybermannon, your comic was super cool! Hajire and Beam really are too friendly to envision a fight, so arm wrestling was a Genius move! This was adorable and fun, with some good ole friendly competition getting some action in! I did feel like you could push the action even more, like when Hajire head butted, have Koop's head snap back more to be like "Whoa, sudden hit!!" But anyways, the backgrounds and action lines were hardcore; I was mouth agape in awe! I seriously love how Hajire and Koop were such powerhouses, they made a hole in the ground!
Robin, I PROMISE I'M GETTING THE SCANNER TO YOU WHEN YOU COME BAAACK! Aaah, I ended up scrolling way back out in order to read the pages due to their massive size..! But anywho, panelling, sound effects, and page organization were top notch as always! Adorable ending too! Although, gotta say, I thought you had a secret message at first with the first letters being emphasized--
Robin, I PROMISE I'M GETTING THE SCANNER TO YOU WHEN YOU COME BAAACK! Aaah, I ended up scrolling way back out in order to read the pages due to their massive size..! But anywho, panelling, sound effects, and page organization were top notch as always! Adorable ending too! Although, gotta say, I thought you had a secret message at first with the first letters being emphasized--
# 7
Posted:
Jun 29 2019, 05:49 PM
Cybermannon: That was a fun way to make armwrestling over the top and epic. I especially liked the ending.
Brobin-Dragon: The pages are a big oversized and hard to read, but the art is still good enough to shine through. I hope you can get a good scanner/photo setup someday.
Brobin-Dragon: The pages are a big oversized and hard to read, but the art is still good enough to shine through. I hope you can get a good scanner/photo setup someday.
# 6
Posted:
Jun 29 2019, 01:42 AM
CYBERMANANON- You got some fantastical environments and backgrounds that're really your own. Like that underground city? Fabulous. These characters feel like they're existing and interacting with a real world and I doff my hat to you for keeping that up page to page. The action and moves in this outright ridiculous arm wrestling match was radical. These two are crazy powerhouses. I also dig you didnt need to make them mortal enemies in order for them to really go all out on one another.
I gotta say, round one I took Koops face as the steely veneer of confidence, but now that we've reached round 2 its becoming really apparent there really isn't anything there by way of expressions. Throughout he's really wall eyed and in such an epic arm wrestling match the only indication its affecting him is a slight frown. I highly recommend pushing the emotes because for such a cool and adventurous romp Koop feels pretty wooden.
BY BROBIN_DRAGON- Whoa dang these pages were huge. Took a whole mess of scrolling round to fully read and see everything, but I think I got it. XD While I feel the discord conversations affected the narrative of your opponent, I still think you were loyal to the bio. It wasn't until I went to Koops profile that I realized he's underhanded and an opportunist which you portrayed well. I think Koop usurping the intended challenger was a clever idea, but I think it would've been more of a impact if Beams opponent wasn't too intimidating, or maybe even an even looking match before a beefy tanuki comes to take the spot.
I'm confused as to the intention of why all the first letters of each word in your word bubbles are not only bolded but capitalized. I don't see what purpose it serves and only serves to be really confusing as I keep thinking you missed a period and are starting a new sentence. XD
I gotta say, round one I took Koops face as the steely veneer of confidence, but now that we've reached round 2 its becoming really apparent there really isn't anything there by way of expressions. Throughout he's really wall eyed and in such an epic arm wrestling match the only indication its affecting him is a slight frown. I highly recommend pushing the emotes because for such a cool and adventurous romp Koop feels pretty wooden.
BY BROBIN_DRAGON- Whoa dang these pages were huge. Took a whole mess of scrolling round to fully read and see everything, but I think I got it. XD While I feel the discord conversations affected the narrative of your opponent, I still think you were loyal to the bio. It wasn't until I went to Koops profile that I realized he's underhanded and an opportunist which you portrayed well. I think Koop usurping the intended challenger was a clever idea, but I think it would've been more of a impact if Beams opponent wasn't too intimidating, or maybe even an even looking match before a beefy tanuki comes to take the spot.
I'm confused as to the intention of why all the first letters of each word in your word bubbles are not only bolded but capitalized. I don't see what purpose it serves and only serves to be really confusing as I keep thinking you missed a period and are starting a new sentence. XD
# 5
Posted:
Jun 26 2019, 08:57 AM
@w@
**sweats nervously**
I can hardly bear the wait
DUUUUUDE this looks awesome! I was giggling to myself the whole time- I really liked the chill outset, how the tension(believably) rose, and the cute ending on top! Really, I think my only nitpick was a few design inconsistencies, but it's not even noticeable. Nicely done!
Definitely a baseline polished look to aim for in future comics. I might challenge you again when I get better!
**sweats nervously**
I can hardly bear the wait
Cybermananon: Hahaha! Koop's ultimate technique is kissing! If it ain't broken why fix it right? That was fun to read!
I'm still trying to get my bearings when it comes to the process of drawing a comic,.but I think I have a farily decent spreadsheet, not optimal, but something to work with and improve. Either way I'm having lots of fun doing these, and having a deadline makes it even more fun!
PS So far 2 artist have drawn my character shirtless oh my! ^w^
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DUUUUUDE this looks awesome! I was giggling to myself the whole time- I really liked the chill outset, how the tension(believably) rose, and the cute ending on top! Really, I think my only nitpick was a few design inconsistencies, but it's not even noticeable. Nicely done!
Definitely a baseline polished look to aim for in future comics. I might challenge you again when I get better!
# 4
Posted:
Jun 26 2019, 08:16 AM
Hahaha! Koop's ultimate technique is kissing! If it ain't broken why fix it right? That was fun to read!
I'm still trying to get my bearings when it comes to the process of drawing a comic,.but I think I have a farily decent spreadsheet, not optimal, but something to work with and improve. Either way I'm having lots of fun doing these, and having a deadline makes it even more fun!
PS So far 2 artist have drawn my character shirtless oh my! ^w^
I'm still trying to get my bearings when it comes to the process of drawing a comic,.but I think I have a farily decent spreadsheet, not optimal, but something to work with and improve. Either way I'm having lots of fun doing these, and having a deadline makes it even more fun!
PS So far 2 artist have drawn my character shirtless oh my! ^w^
# 3
Posted:
Jun 25 2019, 11:30 PM
Heyo! I'm gonna be super AFK over the next week, starting in... 6 hours when I got to wake up for a flight (OOF)
So, I won't be able to reply back to comments or anything too often, but I will check back here!.... eventually. Before the next week for sure.
TO CYBERMANANONANANANNananannaa batmaaaaaan! (ugly laugh)
Looking forward to the comic, dude! :D:D I hope you like Koop in mine, too!!
So, I won't be able to reply back to comments or anything too often, but I will check back here!.... eventually. Before the next week for sure.
TO CYBERMANANONANANANNananannaa batmaaaaaan! (ugly laugh)
Looking forward to the comic, dude! :D:D I hope you like Koop in mine, too!!
# 2
Posted:
Jun 18 2019, 03:58 PM
Toons and dragons?? I can hardly contain myself over the fantasticalness of this match up
# 1
Posted:
Jun 18 2019, 09:42 AM
@~@
**sweats nervously**
I can hardly bear the wait
**sweats nervously**
I can hardly bear the wait
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Jul 2nd, 2019
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Brobin: Your layouts are fantastic and I want to learn more about you how decide to break up a scene because you do amazing layouts. I would agree with others that you should take a little more time to figure out the resolution and cropping on whatever you're taking the pictures of your pages with. If it's on your phone there should also be a grayscale option or something like "Noir" which is grayscale but emphasizes the inks. Also with longer deadlines I would be interested to see how you color stuff.