it could've more dynamic shots to spice up things a little, if you'd like to keep the pace, just to make it more interesting.Try to pull back a little, drawing maybe crowds from afar, or just play up your sense of scale and angle so not everything is roughly the same size on every page. Otherwise, good job.tin: I really enjoy your usage of blacks, also your typography is great, but a bit of breathing space around the words (inside the baloons) would probably help a lot with your stark black and white comics! I was a bit confused on the flow on page 4 but the rest of your pagers are marvelous, albeit unfinished on some parts but it was no problem for me. Even though it's different in pacing and caricature style, your overal comic feel reminds me of corto maltese era. I also enjoy the dialogues, it really sets the toro joe character. I think one of the good points I find from the way you've drawn things is you're not afraid on drawing different scales- everything is dynamic, which is always a good thing. great job.
clappings times 20 for both of you
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Soth!
That first page really made me reevaluate your abilitity, it was quite above what you've been putting out before.
Did Del Toro have a hole through his chest? From a bull horn? Because that is awesome.
I wasn't too fond of your panelling on the first, the odd angles didn't feel right.
You pick it up well though, when Dr Flan emerges from the cage you have some awesome layouts. Especially the red cloth thing, that was cool.
Oh man his hair! So cruel. That entire page was pretty solid, but then when he runs you have ti as a far out side on shot, which you could have certainly done better.
You tend to neglect your backgrounds in big scenes, which is they're needed most! Throw some more details in there, they serve to subtly direct the eyes and direct the character of the scene.
Your flat's are simple but effective, you've got a good eye for picking out good colour combinations. I do think you could have pushed those a bit mire, but hey! A weeks a week.
Sorry to see you bow out of the tournament, hope to see you battling around soon!
TinWoodsman!
That opening cover was incredible, but I think you could have used your time a bit better. This would have been a great thing to add in the voting week, but it kinda ate up your time for the rest of the comic. It is beautiful and I love it but it doesn't really help your comic besides going "LOOK HOW AWESOME I CAN BE" before continuing into your comic, which sadly doesn't fare as well next to it.
It looks like your pages area little skewiff, as if they were scanned in at a slightly odd angle. Which is a shame, that drew attention away from the pages themselves.
Oh wow, it's obvious you're using the fill tool on these pages, page 3 has been done a little sloppily in that upper left corner. A ToroJoe was half filled in, and the darkness on the other side of the lowest one is not darkened.
This problem shows up on later pages, and it really detracts when it's spotted.
The panelling is fantastic, imaginative and not standard at all. Your action benefits really well from it, and you've got some excellent movement.
I really enjoy the characterful dialogue, it can be a bit roundabout at times but it gets the point across.
Unlike Slothvert, you really make good use of your backgrounds, although he certainly beat you in time management.
Those unfinished pages make me sad.
Sadly not up to par with your previous rounds due to being unfinished, and sloppily filled, but certainly a great entry.
Good luck in the next round!