Gray vs. GraveKeeper

Gray vs. GraveKeeper

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by Puddle

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Thresher
Artist
166 comments
# 14   Posted: May 27 2012, 03:09 PM
Shen:
This was a fun comic, it made me chuckle. You've got some good expressions but you tend to get carried away with them. Your backgrounds can also tend to be rather formless at times.
The dialogue is fun and really makes this comic work. You got the characters across well, and I could even see this being done well as a radio drama.
That last page only really needed one beat panel. Two was a bit much.
Some of your colours are abit intense and saturated, but if you're going for that go for it.

Puddle:
There's really not much to say here, not enough of a finished product to look at sadly.
It looked like you were going somewhere interesting, but then it just peters out. I'd keep an eye on your figures, that old man looks a bit odd in the first few pages.
You have an interesting character and premise, and I'd really like to see you utilise them more. I hope you can make a more finished product next time!

TINMAN
Artist
140 comments
# 13   Posted: May 24 2012, 08:57 PM
Animeshen: Dang girl- you've got it going on all fronts. Nice effects, color schemes, dialogue, expressions- very impressive round. I like how you're building Lady Gray up here, a perfect match against Dante. Its a sweet little tale that I can't wait to see more of. Its hard for me to tell you what to improve on as this comic is fantastic. If anything- line variation. Your color shading is grand but its masking the line weights.

Puddle: Dante's such a cool concept for a character I just wish you could finish a comic with him so we could get to know him. Give yourself more time. Also for a digital black and white artist, and a story set in a graveyard there is FAR TOO MUCH white in your pages. You've got a good style, some nice pacing and ideas- slap SOME FAT BLACKS ON them. Playing up your contrast and making the most out of the environments will help your comics loads. Black skies, black hair, dark shadows. Make it so.

bl00chikin
Artist
54 comments
# 12   Posted: May 20 2012, 09:16 PM
Oh boy lol sarcasm all around from the GraveKeeper.

Animeshen, That was funny. I lol'ed quite a few times. Your timing was spot on. Gahaha when he closed that book :'D I could feel his frustration.  

Puddle, shame you couldn't finish up at the end there, but you had some nice quality going in the first three pages. And nice job with you pacing as well! One thing I would like to critique on however is the size of your panels. They're all relatively the same size and shape. Some of them are appropriate for the scene like the very first panel as a wide establishing shot and the very last one on the last page but others, while still working just fine, would help create more impact if they were expended bit more, like the panel where Gray starts wailing, or when the old man dies in the beginning. Just something to think about.  


Puddle
Artist
10 comments
# 11   Posted: May 17 2012, 10:46 PM
Shen: This made me laugh. you did a great job on your comic, and you did a great job with Dante I can definitely see him reacting that way. We definitely had the same mind set starting out our stories. I hope portrayed gray okay. This obviously wasn't as polished as I would've liked, but I hope you found some entertainment out of what I had to show.

Fed: Thanks for the compliment, personally I don't think I've shown a particular good foot forward, but hey I'm working on it. And I promise that I will be doing more with Dante the GraveKeeper

One of the first things I plan on doing this coming summer break is to actually finish a comic for void!

Fed
Artist
162 comments
# 10   Posted: May 17 2012, 07:17 PM
Oh man, I've had a huge crush on The Gravekeeper since he arrived, and this is just a perfect way of observing him at work. The match-up between a girl who thinks she's dead and Voids keeper of the peace is just great, and you both deliver

Puddle: Nice seeing some more pages from you, you're a good artist for real! I like your scenery and dialogue, shame you didn't have time to complete it, but eh, that happens. Hope you continue giving the Gravekeeper a good run before he goes to his (heh) grave..

Animeshen:  This is just beautiful from end to end.. and made me laugh quite a few times. The expressions and acting are just suberb. The colors are wonderfully chosen and gives a real sense of mood. As previously mentioned I LOVE the character the Gravedigger and I LOVE the way you've portrayed him here - Just awesome, you've made a great battle here!

Animeshen
Artist
1490 comments
# 9   Posted: May 17 2012, 07:00 PM
AH MY GAHD its workin! Thank you to whoever was able to fix it! Puddle it looks like we had some of the same ideas lol!Thats so awesome! Did Gray just kill that old man? hahaha whoops! Great comic! Thanks for fighting me!

Animeshen
Artist
1490 comments
# 8   Posted: May 17 2012, 05:15 PM
shoot I'm so sorry, I guess I don't know what I'm supposed to do with the thumbnails. I'm at work now so I won't be able to do it for a few hours. I'm so sorry.

Angie
Council
1937 comments
# 7   Posted: May 17 2012, 10:39 AM
Animeshin could you reupload your comic? Because you tried to upload your own thumbnails it broke the comic. I'm going to see if you reuploading fixes it, otherwise toast will have to do it.

Animeshen
Artist
1490 comments
# 6   Posted: May 15 2012, 11:08 PM
for some reason I could have SWORN this was due today, so I'm done early I guess. I hope I did Gravekeeper allright, it was sort of hard to get a grasp on his character. I hope you like it! I'm quite pleased with it!

Puddle
Artist
10 comments
# 5   Posted: May 15 2012, 12:22 AM
I feel your pain, I'm in the same boat  XC

Animeshen
Artist
1490 comments
# 4   Posted: May 15 2012, 12:13 AM
ugh god why did I schedule this to end right during finals, I did NOT think that through

Qyzex
Artist
670 comments
# 3   Posted: Apr 30 2012, 12:55 PM
radtastic right hurr

DelBarrio
Artist
426 comments
# 2   Posted: Apr 30 2012, 12:24 PM
Awww yea, NICE!

E.W. Schneider
Artist
1070 comments
# 1   Posted: Apr 28 2012, 06:23 PM
Awesome match up! Good luck you guys!

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Regular Match
Drawing Time: 3 weeks
Ended: May 24th, 2012
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Winner: Animeshen
 

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