Dance to the bananaphone!

Nanna: I don\'t have much to say about the story, since it\'s based on a song, though I can say the pacing goes well along with the song rhythm!
As for the lines, I think you could just take more time on your lines! some times it looks like you just did them nonstop in single attemps and no sketching. I might be wrong though! (the tip is still valid, anyway)

Neile: Yet a new style I see! I liked the colors with highlights, it was cool! The lineart is looking good, you could try developing in there to get a more deep configuration, maybe?
The story gets kind of out of flow towards the end, it kind of displugged me, because there was too many things happening in a few panels.

It\'s a good match, I kinda got the scores near, though neile gets from quality and anna, from entertainment!

hahaha doodle for the win. way to accomplish what i couldn\'t & get a song in your battle! show off. nah it was good though. funny! when it suddenly went to grayscale i thought it was supposed to maybe be some sort of like \'old-timey\' remix quality like an old looney tune. maybe if you did something with more saturation like yellow? i dunno. just straight grey was a little offputting.

neile, i didn\'t dig your new style in comparison to your stuff in the past. vary up your shots some too & use your poses to push the emotion rather than just \'bleh whatever\' also, when you combine pages, doing it horizontally throws people off a bit. i would look at those & start to try & read them horizontally, like a two page layout, just because i\'m used to looking at pages like that. next time maybe lay them out vertically?

-J

doodlegirl:

funny! I never heard of the bannanaphone song, but I laughed my ass off at this madness you\'ve created!
I like how you drew the characters,  funny expressions too.
Maybe go all color or no color?
practice drawing cityscapes, or at least spend more time on them.


Neile:

Nice colors, some good quality panels like the robo-dog fight scene. Your \"rendering\" is good.
Some panels the drawings of characters looked kinda weak. loosen up and draw your guy all kinda ways doing the things he does, then polish that with the rendering.
story was ok, but too many waist up shots, mix it up some more. Could\'ve made it more exciting to read.

thedoodlegirl-I think this was cute and all, but I would have liked to see more from you since I know you\'re capable of more. In the future you should try slowing down on your lineart since this as well as your previous battles have looked pretty rushed. Try varying your linewidths as well. It would be great to see you really push the more cartoony style you have and do great things with your lineart.

Neille-I liked the coloring style you chose and your backgrounds are improving. You need to be careful with your anatomy though, it\'s really kind of inconsistent in this. Also keep pushing your backgrounds to be more detailed. I also had a difficult time telling this was your character since he looks significantly different than he has in the past here.

Anna: Excellent display of showmanship and usage of the legendary Bananaphone song. It was sad to see that everything wasn\'t in full color, but the presentation was still fun to read.
I don\'t have any real critiques for this but you might want to be careful with the high contrasts on the inks. You kept losing some of the pen quality in a few panels ( like the small floating head shots. )
Neile: I\'m happy for you dude. This was also a good simple story from start to finish. I liked the colors of choice as they set the mood well for the story. Only thing i could point out is the last panel on the last page. The dude\'s arms looked unhinged a bit, and i couldn\'t tell they were his arms at first.

good job guys, good job. <3

Thnx you too Doodlegirl!

you did an awesome job neilie! :3

pages submitted!
 sorry for the hold up guys. @__@

pinn asked for an extension and got one a day or two ago

Yo Neile, have those new moves hit us with high impact, you got that : )

Make daddy proud, Anna!
And best of luck to you too Neile!

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My life has just been given meaning.

It\'s business time...

Pinn is back in action! Do awesome in this battle Doodle!

Good luck to you too, Neile!

Pants are for pussies!!

Bloody Bananas, Bat-girl!