"Knight Owl" Corry vs. Robosockmonkey
Critiques & Comments
# 20
Posted:
Nov 23 2009, 04:47 AM
Thanks again for the opportunity, Robo.
# 19
Posted:
Nov 17 2009, 12:03 PM
Knowing how much time Mrnoitaull put into this battle... at the sacrifice of classwork... I do feel its a little disappointing. Monkey's style is clean and mildly entertaining, but does seem to lack an equal amount of effort. I do like his depictions of both characters!
# 18
Posted:
Nov 17 2009, 12:01 PM
Mrnoitaull-I'm happy to see you work with watercolors, I think it works very well for your art. That's not to say you can't touch digital, but your traditional work seems to have a lot more depth and a better hold of form than your digital work which often looks flat. Now first things first I have to get on your for page 2 panel 1. Never ever use photographs for backgrounds, especially when working with traditionals since it stands out like a sore thumb. It's best to just draw the background out than depend on a photo to fill in the ground and the far away buildings. If you continue using watercolor I would like to see you push the darks a lot more. Overall most of your stuff is similar in tone so incorporating some black here and there would really help your work.
The pacing was fine in the comic with the exception of page 4 panel 1. That probably would have been a lot better had it been split into 3 separate panels. Since what you have at the moment is kind of one big wall of text panel with multiple characters talking so it hurts your pacing. You also still need to do something about your backgrounds, you started out fine but as the comic went along it gradually became a comic taking place in a big white empty void.
Robosockmonkey-I love Calvin and Hobbes so I did appreciate the homage here. But it would have been cool to actually use watercolors to try to better mimic Bill Watterson's style. I think the jokes were fun and the comic was cute. But if I remember right you had an extension so this is all you had after 5 weeks? Come on dude. It's fine to do 3 pages but you didn't even have backgrounds in 2/3 of the comic. I get the impression the extension was because you hadn't done anything on the comic/life got in the way until you saw the deadline come up and had an oh shit moment. Kind of a let down considering you had 5 weeks and this was a comeback comic for you.
The pacing was fine in the comic with the exception of page 4 panel 1. That probably would have been a lot better had it been split into 3 separate panels. Since what you have at the moment is kind of one big wall of text panel with multiple characters talking so it hurts your pacing. You also still need to do something about your backgrounds, you started out fine but as the comic went along it gradually became a comic taking place in a big white empty void.
Robosockmonkey-I love Calvin and Hobbes so I did appreciate the homage here. But it would have been cool to actually use watercolors to try to better mimic Bill Watterson's style. I think the jokes were fun and the comic was cute. But if I remember right you had an extension so this is all you had after 5 weeks? Come on dude. It's fine to do 3 pages but you didn't even have backgrounds in 2/3 of the comic. I get the impression the extension was because you hadn't done anything on the comic/life got in the way until you saw the deadline come up and had an oh shit moment. Kind of a let down considering you had 5 weeks and this was a comeback comic for you.
# 17
Posted:
Nov 17 2009, 10:20 AM
@Mrnoitaull: This is the best I've seen from you quality wise. I'm impressed with what you turned in, the washes look pretty nice and work well with your style. I do think you could have had more contrast and definition in some panels. The story was pretty decent and entertaining. I really hope you keep this kind of quality up for your next battles.
@Robo: this was really cute and funny. I really like your style and I think it worked well for this comic, but I do feel like you could have done more with the given time.
nice job guys~
@Robo: this was really cute and funny. I really like your style and I think it worked well for this comic, but I do feel like you could have done more with the given time.
nice job guys~
# 16
Posted:
Nov 17 2009, 05:45 AM
Mr. NO- I like the style but you really need more clarity and contrast between different items in the field of vision. For example on page 2, what is that thing coming out of his eye? I kinda thought it was fingers. The backgrounds seem to dissappear after a while as well. I would suggest a little more contrast it felt just a touch too high keyfor me, but I really enjoyed it and hope you continue doing this.
Robo- these were pretty funny but I was kinda hoping for more cause each one of these can't take more than an hour, two at the very most, and you had 4 weeks.
Robo- these were pretty funny but I was kinda hoping for more cause each one of these can't take more than an hour, two at the very most, and you had 4 weeks.
# 15
Posted:
Nov 17 2009, 03:20 AM
They aren't really moot, it's just left to the voter on how to vote comics that don't reach the minimum. Some voters care, some don't.
# 14
Posted:
Nov 16 2009, 05:33 PM
Page minimums are basically moot at this point in void history.
# 13
Posted:
Nov 16 2009, 05:16 PM
wasn't the battle a 4 page minimum?
# 12
Posted:
Nov 16 2009, 12:42 AM
MrNo - I love the full story you gave us here, and your design for Robosockmonkey was imaginative. I enjoy the shaded black and white look, but that image you used as the tile "cover" is striking, as well - I'd like to see more in that style.
Robo - That was a cute idea, and I like your rendition of Corry. If you did several more of these strips, I'd love it. It felt like reading a Calvin & Hobbes collection.
Robo - That was a cute idea, and I like your rendition of Corry. If you did several more of these strips, I'd love it. It felt like reading a Calvin & Hobbes collection.
# 11
Posted:
Nov 15 2009, 10:03 PM
Awesome ink wash style MRN!! We deff. have to find time to battle, I really like this one.
Cool comic Robo. I like the Bill Waterson type comic srtip, but it reeked of 4 hrs worth of work rather that 4 weeks. You didint even go the required 4 pages. I understand when time gets away from ya though.
Good work guys, but MRN has this one for me.
Cool comic Robo. I like the Bill Waterson type comic srtip, but it reeked of 4 hrs worth of work rather that 4 weeks. You didint even go the required 4 pages. I understand when time gets away from ya though.
Good work guys, but MRN has this one for me.
# 10
Posted:
Nov 15 2009, 08:41 PM
Wow guys,
Robosockmonkey: i liked your entry. The joke was funny, and i love how you illustrated Corry.
Mrnoitaull : Dude....seriously.....this was the best I've see you done and i'm real impressed. I loved the wash and your use of lighting and shading in a lot of the panels. I could honestly feel the love in this battle. Hope to see more like this. The only thing i would have to say is that it got a little light in detailed in towards the end. and there were some panels that had some obvious digital Mods but i'm not complaining. The story and Plot was great and i feel well feed.
Robosockmonkey: i liked your entry. The joke was funny, and i love how you illustrated Corry.
Mrnoitaull : Dude....seriously.....this was the best I've see you done and i'm real impressed. I loved the wash and your use of lighting and shading in a lot of the panels. I could honestly feel the love in this battle. Hope to see more like this. The only thing i would have to say is that it got a little light in detailed in towards the end. and there were some panels that had some obvious digital Mods but i'm not complaining. The story and Plot was great and i feel well feed.
# 9
Posted:
Nov 15 2009, 05:24 PM
ahahahahahahhahaha RSM: I very much enjoyed this strip. Feels very muhc like a weekly strip webcomic. The jokes weren't stale and the delivery was well done. The was well done as well, I can't really find anything wrong with it. I would have perhaps enjoyed a few more strips. Good go of it.
MrNo: I like that you are stretching yourself, I think you are definitely getting better with every entry. I think the hand written text is much clearer than in your former battles, also some of the images are a bit confusing. The angles and perspectives you choose aren't descriptive enough to pull me into the action of what is going on( like panel 3 of pg 2 I had no idea he was looking through a scope until the next page). I would suggest not sacrificing some of your finer details for the style. contour and line is okay...this is comics yo. I felt where this style succeeded most ironically is on pg2 the first 2 panels I felt had a lot of contrast and good info to define the setting. Although the copy and pasted buildings bugged me. Keep up the good work I imagine with your excellent story telling skills you will become a formidable opponent on Void.
MrNo: I like that you are stretching yourself, I think you are definitely getting better with every entry. I think the hand written text is much clearer than in your former battles, also some of the images are a bit confusing. The angles and perspectives you choose aren't descriptive enough to pull me into the action of what is going on( like panel 3 of pg 2 I had no idea he was looking through a scope until the next page). I would suggest not sacrificing some of your finer details for the style. contour and line is okay...this is comics yo. I felt where this style succeeded most ironically is on pg2 the first 2 panels I felt had a lot of contrast and good info to define the setting. Although the copy and pasted buildings bugged me. Keep up the good work I imagine with your excellent story telling skills you will become a formidable opponent on Void.
# 8
Posted:
Nov 13 2009, 04:17 PM
I'm loaded up.
# 7
Posted:
Oct 30 2009, 03:31 PM
WB Robosock
# 6
Posted:
Oct 30 2009, 03:28 PM
Trying new things is DANGEROUS and unforgiving.
Can't spell conformity without comfort...
Can't spell conformity without comfort...
# 5
Posted:
Oct 21 2009, 10:56 AM
sweet robosock!
# 4
Posted:
Oct 16 2009, 01:41 PM
This is gonna be GREAT!!!!
# 3
Posted:
Oct 14 2009, 05:48 AM
Nice to see you again Robosock, you should really consider making a new character or challenging people to artist matches. Good luck to the both of you.
# 2
Posted:
Oct 10 2009, 10:46 AM
RoflQu: Oh yeah. I can almost taste the maple syrup.
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is this gonna be a Canada battle?
# 1
Posted:
Oct 10 2009, 04:22 AM
Oh yeah. I can almost taste the maple syrup.
Regular Match
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Ended:
Nov 22nd, 2009
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