dreaming the past? / Huesitos the Warrior
Critiques & Comments
# 7
Posted:
Mar 26 2009, 10:10 AM
nice backgrounds. good to see some love given in that department. but the characters felt a little lacking to me. i can't put my finger on what but they just felt a little rushed to me. also, crush those blacks more to get rid of the strokes. when you use big black digital text bubbles but we stlll see black strokes in the line work, it comes off as looking a bit sloppy. and the spacing didn't feel optimized. the balloons were HUGE & some pages felt cramped. be mindful in the future. otherwise nice.
# 6
Posted:
Mar 25 2009, 06:57 PM
This was flashback, although Huesitos does not know it, he thinks that it was a dream. Thanks for the comments people!(sorry for my english)
# 5
Posted:
Mar 24 2009, 09:20 PM
While I understand this was a dream, it may have helped to give us a little more introduction instead of throwing us kind of into the middle of the story. It took me a few reads to totally comprehend what all this comic was about. It probably would have worked better to not treat it as a dream, but as a flashback. If you'd done that, it would have given you a little more room to breath and to explain things better. Artistically I had no complaints aside from the black levels issue. Other than that nice job dude
# 4
Posted:
Mar 24 2009, 04:42 PM
Ledes: good job here man! The levels did hurt your quality a lot, another thing that hurt the quality was the MEGA-THICK word balloons. maybe play with not so thick lines on them next time. Other than these 2 things, some really solid art.
Story was cool, adds some depth to Huesito's character, keep it up!
Story was cool, adds some depth to Huesito's character, keep it up!
# 3
Posted:
Mar 23 2009, 05:48 PM
Ja! Yes,I forgot to retouch the levels...
# 2
Posted:
Mar 22 2009, 10:20 PM
The story wasn't half bad actually, but I think you should of done a lot more, like show this whole "god testing" thing, and the previous relationship between Bako and his sister in law. But it's nice to learn more about a character like this I'll admit. I do have gripes though that can be fixed rather quickly and easily.
First off, you gotta fix up those inks, and I don't mean by simply touching up white spots with the pencil tool. you gotta fix up the levels after you scan an image, this is the key tool in making inks look top notch and professional. I won't get into detail about how to work the levels, but I know there's an awesome tutorial Lysol Jones made that covers it. Second is faces, I think I understand that the two blonds were brothers and were quite alike, but I kinda feel that they looked too similar and I didn't realize that there was another character until the second read through.
Anywho, not bad, story has a few kinks and your inking needs fine tuning, but not bad.
First off, you gotta fix up those inks, and I don't mean by simply touching up white spots with the pencil tool. you gotta fix up the levels after you scan an image, this is the key tool in making inks look top notch and professional. I won't get into detail about how to work the levels, but I know there's an awesome tutorial Lysol Jones made that covers it. Second is faces, I think I understand that the two blonds were brothers and were quite alike, but I kinda feel that they looked too similar and I didn't realize that there was another character until the second read through.
Anywho, not bad, story has a few kinks and your inking needs fine tuning, but not bad.
# 1
Posted:
Mar 22 2009, 09:47 PM
Dude this came out of nowhere, and boy am I glad to see it. I like Huesitos. Es muy chevere! And boy does this bring up a lot of implications for your character which is awesome. And since there isn't anything about Bako before hand, well there we go, old Bako! The only thing I see wrong here is that there seems to be an opacity issue. IF you have photoshop or Gimp you can play with the levels to make black black and white white, because I see odd pure black scribbles over the lighter black stuff. I have nothing helpful to say about your art except that I like your style very much. I hope to see more of your character in the future.
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