Do you have any pencil sketches to post, Monday? I'd really like to see 'em. Forgive me, again, for criticizng style, I guess, but I'd like to see them without the inks or colors. By the way, the noir type dude is super cool, great expression, but yeah, the text looks outta place. I would go with a different font, and clean up the layout of that text. I'm sure you can find one that looks as sly as your own handwriting. Heh, sorry, I can be a neatfreak sometimes. The other dude has bad proportions, I think. I mean, his eyes are different sizes, his legs are short, and the pose is pretty stiff. Eeeeg, I don't like to crit, but I want to see you improve and yaddayaddaydadda.

Monday, I don't mean to bring ya down, 'cause you really do make some exciting comics with great scripts, but...they always look sloppy to me.  Sorry!
The inks are messy, the handwritten text is often lopsided or out of the speech bubbles/boxes, and the panels are rarely straight. I think it just needs more planning. Do you start with pencil lines first, or jump right into the inks? Again, not trying to be mean! I'm just a freak for clean comics.