Bartin vs. Latem
Critiques & Comments
# 9
Posted:
Aug 26 2010, 07:18 PM
I liked it except the placing on the time stamps made it seem like he fell for 7 full minutes before crashing through some glass. Which would be very very cool, except that he didn't leave a crater and somehow walked away. Maybe a frame of him crawling on a rooftop or something between the one of him falling and the one of him crashing through glass 7 minutes later would clear it up just a little more.
# 8
Posted:
Aug 25 2010, 09:45 AM
My comic tonight is gonna be playing with time too
The last page's bubbles are confusing, which is surprising because that's normally an easy setup.
What happened is that you scrunched the bubbles too close to each other. I thought each character was saying one big paragraph of information at first, I had to take a step back and realize it was supposed to be read back and forth.
The last page's bubbles are confusing, which is surprising because that's normally an easy setup.
What happened is that you scrunched the bubbles too close to each other. I thought each character was saying one big paragraph of information at first, I had to take a step back and realize it was supposed to be read back and forth.
# 7
Posted:
Aug 24 2010, 04:39 PM
angieness: Glad to see you both back!
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PSYCH!
seems to be a trend for (somewhat) old heads.
# 6
Posted:
Aug 17 2010, 01:47 PM
LATEM LATEM LATEM
# 5
Posted:
Aug 17 2010, 11:44 AM
I'm gonna be cuttin this one close, family problems and such but if it isn't completely coloured the way I like, half will be submitted in inks
# 4
Posted:
Aug 14 2010, 10:02 AM
Glad to see you both back!
# 3
Posted:
Aug 9 2010, 07:11 AM
Oldschoolers brawl!
# 2
Posted:
Aug 6 2010, 01:22 PM
Woo, go Molotov!
Can't wait to see what you two bring to the table.
Can't wait to see what you two bring to the table.
# 1
Posted:
Jul 28 2010, 01:05 AM
LATEMS BACK HELL YEAH
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Aug 30th, 2010
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What I like less is the placement of the dialogues, they don't feel natural to me in their pacing. You should allow for the characters to breath sometimes, take into acount pauses in speech, lenght of said pauses, ect. and convey that trough how you dispose of your text.
For example, the second page, "He's escaping!! Open fire!!!" seems to come just a bit to soon after the preceding line, we dont feel the surprise of the officer because of that, like he knew his line and said it before he actually needed, especially since we dont see Bartin escaping at that moment.