jessiedoll: Hey, welcome to the site. Nice first battle.The cityscape you started us with looks good, I'm glad to see you tackling buildings right off the bat.
I think you could have done more greys and blacks in here. Many of the whites I saw could have worked out better being greys or blacks to make a more visually interesting battle. You've got a really nice grasp of anatomy and faces, but those lips on Lived Iblis are weirding me out. The eyelashes also makes him look really girly and while the kid's supposed to be a wimp, I think it's kind of weird.
Maryanne is really weird looking to me. Not in this comic but the design you've given her general. With her tiny face with no chin room, she doesn't look 16, she looks 6. And with the make-up on her face, she reminds me of one of those children that are entered into those child pageants. I would work a little on her face. Even if she's supposed to be short, I think she should look older.
Overall, this was a cute fire battle. I hope to see you do more soon.
Graten: I don't like your different fonts. It's unnecessary and gets old fast. Pick one good readable font you like and go with it. I recommend looking at www.blambot.com if you want to pick some nice ones besides the one that came default on your computer.
I thought the massive . . . was really obtrusive looking and took away from your art on that page. Also reusing the panels on the 4th page was lazy looking. Keep up work on your anatomy. It's looking good, but your hands are looking a little generalized in some spots. Your ending was nice and I don't think anyone would have known you had issues if you had ended it right then and there.
Hopefully next time works out better for you though.
Maryanne S. vs. Lived Iblis
Critiques & Comments
# 8
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Sep 30 2010, 12:44 PM
# 7
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Sep 29 2010, 08:37 AM
If you want to make your own thumbnails you can email them to me
http://entervoid.com/board/index.php?topic=10587.0
otherwise I just make them
http://entervoid.com/board/index.php?topic=10587.0
otherwise I just make them
# 6
Posted:
Sep 25 2010, 09:07 AM
Let's do it... remember the world will be watching... hahahah
# 5
Posted:
Sep 24 2010, 12:42 PM
jessiedoll: So I've been an idiot and neglecting this xD
It ain't gonna be very long (going with my shorter back up comic) but I will have it done when I'm supposed to!
Makes me darn nervous just thinking about it though!
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It can be 3 pages if you want, just make it your best!
Excited to see what you both pull out.
# 4
Posted:
Sep 10 2010, 01:23 PM
Well Let's see how this goes.
# 3
Posted:
Sep 1 2010, 10:18 PM
This should be fun.
# 2
Posted:
Sep 1 2010, 12:36 PM
I expect sex, drugs and Rock N' Roll.
# 1
Posted:
Sep 1 2010, 10:56 AM
haha you'll be fine! Good luck guys!
Regular Match
Drawing Time:
3 weeks + 1
Ended:
Oct 6th, 2010
Votes Cast:
14
Page Views:
2136
Winner:
graten
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