Just checking in, Sweetie / Abigail Lynnhaven

Just checking in, Sweetie / Abigail Lynnhaven

Just checking in, Sweetie — Abigail Lynnhaven

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zee
Artist
132 comments
# 7   Posted: Dec 27 2016, 05:16 PM
Poor Abigail. Hopefully better luck finds her in future comics. D:
Awesome job with improving so far, can't wait to see even more!

PyrasTerran
Global Moderator
1493 comments
# 6   Posted: Dec 27 2016, 02:44 PM
This is a good story to lay the foundation for Abigail's trials and tribulations to come and a step in the right direction for your art, which does need the most attention aside from your lettering. Keep studying, keep practicing, keep drawing, look at the pages of others and ask for help whenever you feel you need it, and you'll find 2017 to be a great year for you art-wise.

Julz
Artist
378 comments
# 5   Posted: Dec 27 2016, 01:00 PM
Looking great! Lovely improvement! Some little things to watch out for: page 2 panel 2 Ozzman looks too short for the desk. You could have put the desk lower to give her more room for her body, or tried a lower angle to fit it all in. And secondly, watch for "tangents", in this case there is a nasty distracting corner tangent bullying your pg 3 panel 1 where the word bubble's tail ends at the line of the laptop and continues into her hair.
your comic runs smoothly and the plot flows well. characters faces and anatomy look alot better, but dont slack on that progress, you know we want to see your best every submission. Keep up the great work!

JCee
Artist
392 comments
# 4   Posted: Dec 24 2016, 08:35 PM
Poor Abby! I wonder how she'll deal with this situation?

Your angles and lineart have definitely gotten better compared to your last entries, but I'd like to see some backgrounds for next time. Give us a solid idea of where Abby actually is and not just empty white space all around. I know backgrounds are not fun and can be hard work, even I'm not big on drawing them, but it is important to illustrate the environment in which your character lives or else it wouldn't be as interesting to keep on reading. One last thing, I recommend using a different font style for dialogue. I'm not really digging the font you used here. Blambot, Dafont to name a few sites have some really good font styles you could get for free.

Other than that, I can't wait to see what's in store for Miss Lynnhaven next. Keep it up!

Radji
Artist
577 comments
# 3   Posted: Dec 24 2016, 04:38 PM
things are not looking good for abby...

Ish
Artist
79 comments
# 2   Posted: Dec 24 2016, 07:37 AM
Hon! It is so great to see how much you have improved! The angles look much better and the lines look so clean! That said, poor Abby. I really hope she doesn't end up losing her job...

Nana-Banana
Artist
19 comments
# 1   Posted: Dec 23 2016, 09:12 PM
Super excited to be doing some Abby character development. That being said just a heads up that I did have to cut a page due to travel issues as well as family matters so things between page 2 and 3 are a bit wonky. If you need any clarification I can do my best to fill in the blanks!

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Drawing Time: 4 weeks
Ended: Dec 30th, 2016
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