Doing a 24 hour scar match is crazy and i love that you both went for this.
Fluff: the expressions you do are great even under tight deadlines they still shine through. I also like the gray midtone you used here, it's working and on longer comics push with more with specific highlights and blackspots on characters. also the scar was gnarly.
Buggy: I love your time piece comics, there's something about your style and the sepia tone you use that captures the time piece perfectly. unfortunately the scar wasn't too clear but this was still a good one day comic.
24 HR Rave to the Grave / Sidae vs. Lucifer (Luci)
Critiques & Comments
# 11
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Feb 5 2021, 01:57 PM
# 10
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Feb 4 2021, 10:17 AM
Gosh, y'all mad lads doing a 24 hour battle and a scar match no top of it. I LOVE that level of YOLO and I think th time constraints and stakes made for some interesting directions.
I'll agree with the previous crits that the scar Luci netted in Fluffs side was gnarly. Way to give us the money shot of showing us exactly what was lost. Again, I don't wanna harp too much on overall style and theme due to the time crunch, but I was surprised to find Buggy brought that in spades. You had a vision and that was old school and you delivered. Aesthetically, I felt transported back in time. Unfortunately the results of the scar match are pretty unclear and are written out in a newspaper rather than shown.
I'll agree with the previous crits that the scar Luci netted in Fluffs side was gnarly. Way to give us the money shot of showing us exactly what was lost. Again, I don't wanna harp too much on overall style and theme due to the time crunch, but I was surprised to find Buggy brought that in spades. You had a vision and that was old school and you delivered. Aesthetically, I felt transported back in time. Unfortunately the results of the scar match are pretty unclear and are written out in a newspaper rather than shown.
# 9
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Feb 1 2021, 07:09 PM
i'll forgive the lack of spider children this time.
Fluff- Dang this was a gnarly scar, but i think the fingernails is what got me going "ooooo" Pacing issues what Don mentioned aside this was pretty effective in getting us to go "aaeaghuh"
Buggy- Really cool look going on here not just with the ye olde void au but the newspapery artstyle and look of the comic.
The 2nd page kind of lost me for a bit since much of the actual action taking place off screen with just text. Definitely could have used a lead in and out with the whole incident.
Fluff- Dang this was a gnarly scar, but i think the fingernails is what got me going "ooooo" Pacing issues what Don mentioned aside this was pretty effective in getting us to go "aaeaghuh"
Buggy- Really cool look going on here not just with the ye olde void au but the newspapery artstyle and look of the comic.
The 2nd page kind of lost me for a bit since much of the actual action taking place off screen with just text. Definitely could have used a lead in and out with the whole incident.
# 8
Posted:
Jan 30 2021, 03:09 PM
Holy hell you both have so much guts to pull a 24-hour scar match, hats off! The results were pretty good too!
FLUFFS - Your sense of humor is always on point- that shining easter egg made me lose it. Luci's fate makes me shudder, that shot with the nails sent shivers down my spine, well done!! I really adore Sidae, reading anything involving him is always such a treat!
BUGGY - I'm a sucker for Luci, so seeing her in action was again was very nice! I got a little confused over what happened- we get an idea in the last page, but it left me wondering how Sidae fared. The art is very very nice and newspaper-y!
FLUFFS - Your sense of humor is always on point- that shining easter egg made me lose it. Luci's fate makes me shudder, that shot with the nails sent shivers down my spine, well done!! I really adore Sidae, reading anything involving him is always such a treat!
BUGGY - I'm a sucker for Luci, so seeing her in action was again was very nice! I got a little confused over what happened- we get an idea in the last page, but it left me wondering how Sidae fared. The art is very very nice and newspaper-y!
# 7
Posted:
Jan 29 2021, 07:06 PM
Gonna be hard to wield that scythe effectively with three less fingers, shoulda tried harder mate
# 6
Posted:
Jan 29 2021, 08:58 AM
I think both comics were too short. Felt like something was missing after I was finished reading.
Luci seems like an interesting character, though. She was my favourite of the two in both comics. However, Fluff's comic was a bit harder to follow.
Luci seems like an interesting character, though. She was my favourite of the two in both comics. However, Fluff's comic was a bit harder to follow.
# 5
Posted:
Jan 28 2021, 09:58 PM
You mad lads, 24 hr scar match crew rise uP
Fluff - Ohhhhh we getting some Sidae Lore (TM)? I lovee that imagery when Luci sees his soul, very creepy and dramatic. Pretty gruesome scar too, and that last shot of the fingernails scraping on the coffin *shudders* finger stuff always gets to me haha. On the crit side, Luci's accent was understandable but didn't really read as Cockney to me and was pretty exaggerated. If anything it brought to mind Harley Quinn's accent with the "mista". This was a 24 hour match though, so I can't really fault you for not being able to get reference.
Buggy - I too, love Victorian Sidae! With those sideburns and the suspenders, it kinda works for him tbh XD This is also some really great script, I thought it was a font at first! It fits the vibe really well and definitely evokes Victorian-era text, as does the pencil-y texture. Idk, it just really felt like I was reading an old sketchbook and I love that. The story was a little lost on me though, and I had to reread it a few times to figure out what had happened. Since we don't see Sidae and Luci amongst the looms, or the accident occur, they're kinda disconnected from the incident. I'm also not sure what Luci produced that led to the accident. I'mmm gonna assume that la'e is latte, and that the flask was filled with alcohol? And that being drunk, they did something wrong with the machinery and that caused the accident? There's a few too many blanks the reader has to fill in mentally, imo. Still a pretty good turnout for a 24hr battle though!
Fluff - Ohhhhh we getting some Sidae Lore (TM)? I lovee that imagery when Luci sees his soul, very creepy and dramatic. Pretty gruesome scar too, and that last shot of the fingernails scraping on the coffin *shudders* finger stuff always gets to me haha. On the crit side, Luci's accent was understandable but didn't really read as Cockney to me and was pretty exaggerated. If anything it brought to mind Harley Quinn's accent with the "mista". This was a 24 hour match though, so I can't really fault you for not being able to get reference.
Buggy - I too, love Victorian Sidae! With those sideburns and the suspenders, it kinda works for him tbh XD This is also some really great script, I thought it was a font at first! It fits the vibe really well and definitely evokes Victorian-era text, as does the pencil-y texture. Idk, it just really felt like I was reading an old sketchbook and I love that. The story was a little lost on me though, and I had to reread it a few times to figure out what had happened. Since we don't see Sidae and Luci amongst the looms, or the accident occur, they're kinda disconnected from the incident. I'm also not sure what Luci produced that led to the accident. I'mmm gonna assume that la'e is latte, and that the flask was filled with alcohol? And that being drunk, they did something wrong with the machinery and that caused the accident? There's a few too many blanks the reader has to fill in mentally, imo. Still a pretty good turnout for a 24hr battle though!
# 4
Posted:
Jan 28 2021, 09:30 PM
I LAUGHED SO LOUD IT SCARED MY CATS!
I love his face at the end!
Buggy! I finally got to fight you and I'm so happy!
This was a blast to do today!
I love Sidae in ye ol victorian times!
I love his face at the end!
Buggy! I finally got to fight you and I'm so happy!
This was a blast to do today!
I love Sidae in ye ol victorian times!
# 3
Posted:
Jan 28 2021, 03:08 PM
Footini: Loser gets pregnant
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# 2
Posted:
Jan 28 2021, 08:07 AM
BRUHHHHHH
# 1
Posted:
Jan 28 2021, 07:34 AM
Loser gets pregnant
Scar Match
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Feb 5th, 2021
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For a 24-hour match, I think the art and attention to detail are super solid in this battle. Even though I have some crits, I think you both tackled the deadline/scar challenge decently.
Fluff- I loved the Shinning Reference panel, (great thumbnail choice) I also adored the scar, it felt brutal without being a total gorefest- though honestly, the bit with the fingernails made me shiver more than the actual finger chopping. As usual, your expressions are wonderfully animated.
Bit of a nitpick- Sidae suddenly appearing at the start felt too sudden and jarring.
I would have cut the throwaway exposition panel in the middle & replaced it with one at the start actually showing what Sidae was up to. It would have set the scene nicely- in fact, his shadowy figure could have been stalking the background on that first panel.
Buggy- I love your choice of brushes and pallet, it gives the comic an old-timey feel which matches Luci's Au nicely- whether you intended it too or not, the art feels like a creative, conscious style change, which I found very cool. I also enjoyed your handwritten font & I think generally you've improved at writing Luci's dialogue in a less distracting manner.
Crit wise, I think its a shame that the corners were cut on what is arguably the point of the comic (the scar occurring and the reveal) the choice to leave these out visually felt strange for such a short story- you probably would've gotten away with that fade to black if you'd have more pages showing the aftermath, in fact, it may have been very effective. But in a short comic with very little meat on it, to begin with, that middle page fell flat for me.