Page 1 Really love those first two opening panels, really enjoyed that use of shadows on panel 2. If I really had to pick at the second panel it’d be that if this is taking place during arma, a few more background demons to the mix would’ve really sold the chaotic factor of the situation. Panel three leads to some confusion I can’t really see where the hand is supposed to be sticking out of and the imagery next to it is a little too clustered for me to understand what I’m seeing. The transition is mostly solid again it’s just one thing where the repeated line felt like it could’ve used some variation beyond the last panels speech bubble being a little more jagged. Maybe have the first two speech bubbles be slightly blurry and the final one normal as Cain snaps back into reality. Dang that car interior tho making me jelly.

Page 2 Others have pointed it out and I just wrote an essay to Don about sfx so I won’t bug you too much on those but they definitely stick out in this comic and are a little more distracting than I expected them to be. At first I thought the car interior was too big but after seeing page 3 I think it’s about right? Anyways that’s a well made interior! I especially like the small details you put into showing this car has seen some shit and the scratched out sticker on the dash is a small detail I appreciate (having one on my car as well). The choice to have no background on panel 2 was an odd to me and I think it adds some confusion to the panel as it doesn’t look like Cain is really looking at Gold. That being said the same thing isn’t out of place on panel 4 it works fine there. I originally thought the hands on panel 4 were too small but I think they're fine. (And they really good hands too!)

Page 3 This isn’t really a crit and more of a personal preference I can’t get over but since the first panel continues onto the second I think it looks way better when the speech bubbles remain separate. When I see the top panel I personally just end up attributing all the text to the first panel and enter the second panel with no text to read. Weird Pizzaman hangups aside, I find the way you drew Cain snapping his fingers interesting. I tried it out myself and it does work and I think it works here now, I just never considered that a way to snap fingers until now. ( I lied about leaving my hangups out of the rest of this sorry :V) The cityscape in the background of the final panel is considerably flat looking which normally wouldn’t get to me but I think it got to me in this case because everything around it looks so much more well made. (Now for the nitpicks) one of the streetlight’s lighting is a little off center and it’s missing the side bar that the other streetlights have but I just chalked that last one up to this city breaking apart every other year it’s not like the streetlights would be untouched XD (small note love Gold’s expression on this page!)

Page 4 The top row of panels works for the most part but for some reason the final one having phantom hands not being attached to a body really throws me off. Cutting off Gold’s body at the torso in panel5 was a bit of an odd choice to me I think it might’ve worked more if there was a border or if the body continued to the bottom panel. The space between the two in the bottom panel seems just a bit too far seeing how close they are on the next page. It might be because Cain is shrouded in the dark so it’s hard to determine his size but he seems to be a little too small for how close he should be for the perspective.

Page 5 A pretty solid page for the most part. The only things that I find off are the areas around the torso and the legs are a bit thin, Gold’s right hand is at a strange angle that I’m not sure is possible with the position of his arm. I found the movement lines on this page to be unnecessary as the actions are perfectly conveyed by your art on their own. Gold does kind of shrink on panel 2, but its only really noticeable because there’s a similar panel next to it.

Page 6 I like the minor touch on the second panel where the hand is digging into Gold’s shoulder a little more. I like the swiping motion of the third panel though the hair is accurate I think it would’ve conveyed Gold’s anger more if we saw at least both his eyes. Cain looks like he’s staring off in the fourth panel and not at Gold or the wound. I love the expressions you have for this one. The last panel is really good though I don’t know if I’ve ever seen your style allow for the mouth to hang off the edges of the face like that.

Page 7 The first panel is great though it has a large amount of unused space in the left that could be used for a hiss from Gold or maybe just the quiet humming of the car. I find the last two expressions to be a little muted considering what had just happened it’s hard to read how Gold feels. Gold’s position confuses me in this page because it kind of looks like he’s standing up. This page does have my favorite dialogue on it.

Page 8 I’m not sure if the car had at all moved during this talk but I was sure it hadn’t. The road they’re on looks somewhat different than the one on page three. The sidewalk is gone there’s a cliff that could have been there before but the angle didn’t show it. Gold’s pose on the last panel is fine though I think having a more dejected pose that wasn’t so close to the last one would work better for a final panel. Nitpick time there is one streetlight on the final panel that looks like it’s about to fall off the cliff.

Normally I'd have a nice comment to top this whole thing off with but that'll be in part 2 ;u;