ok so I lied, I really enjpyed this one as well.

Pocky! thanks for that- i totally agree-- i haven't done a full grayscale comic in a while so i'm a bit rusty NEXT ROUND I WILL FIX!

Damn these are so awesome I'm speechless I don't know what to say! Just kidding

Galvo: Quite an amusing comic. I like how your monologue wasn't boring like most are, and partly because of the color change--I will take note of that and steal that idea for the future for myself. I am not sure if it's my imagination, but the texture overlay on page two seems much more prominent from the other pages. Because most of this comic is in greyscale, you have to rely more on shades to indicate depth in the artwork. I notice that there isn't much contrast in the greys, and so they kind of blend between each other, and the only thing separating the shading of shapes apart is mostly the black outline. It would have been better if there were whiter whites and darker darks in this piece.

Diabolicol: Seems like you also have a similar problem with Galvo's comic, which is that there is a lack of contrast with greys. However, you made up for it a bit better by using more blacks in the piece. I know that white text with black outline is one of the best combos for prominent text, but I think it was what really took away from the comic the most on this thing. Your work definitely would have benefited if you just put speech bubbles instead. One other thing with the text was that it was very hard to tell who was speaking to who on first glance (the only thing indicating is the name of the character followed by a colon for every piece of text). Not sure if the radiating circles were necessary for every single panel either. A bit too distracting for me for some panels.

bobo: thaaaanks duuuude. i didnt take too much time on those yellow drop shadow- i shoulda gone with a different color but my brain was fried at that point. maybe just removing the yellow would be best? who knows. thnx duuude

Papa Gabo: To me, your comic was just about perfect. It's really interesting comparing this to the comic where you introduced Godopods (that one just sticks out in my mind the most because GODOPODS). I'm totally in love with the neo-noir vibe, and the way you've bent the fourth wall without quite breaking it. My biggest gripe with this comic is that stupid red box with a yellow shadow. What's that all about? It totally stands out from the comic and feels like you just discovered Photoshop. I don't know if you ran out of time or if you were trying to make it look separate from the comic (which, if that's the case, is actually an interesting method), but I'm personally not a fan of that design choice. Everything else you did with color in the comic was beautiful. I'd also say to work on your forms; Xia stands out the most to me as looking kind of wonky. On the other hand, your perspectives and just general camerawork in this comic made me blush. You sure know how to please a man, Gabe.

Diabolicol: First off, unrelated to this match at all, do you happen to have any images saved from your old comics? It looks like all of your Elemental: Water comics (and probably others) got broken when the site was hacked a while back, and I would love to get them back. Email them to Toast or to me (my email is bobojo@gmail.com).

Okay, now for actual critique: It was really hard to get into your comic because of how busy that first page was. It was hard to read the text and follow the dialogue. You had some fun interplay between Gabe and Toast, so it's a shame that you made it so hard to read. Oh... and now that I've read the rest of the comic, it turns out all of your text is hard to read. I know you ran out of time, so I guess the point is that you need to plan your time out a little better to make sure you can fit in those details. That hard to read text (and the circles, which have already been pointed out as well) really broke your comic for me. It was hard to follow the action when I had to focus so hard to read the dialogue. And I don't really understand what happened when Toku changed into lady form or whatever, or why galvo2304 said "What the fuck?" on the last page. I couldn't tell what was going on. On a more positive note, I enjoyed the detail you put into your art, the toning, and just the general sense of the comic actually being finished and not just rushed and sketchy. For whatever that's worth. It was nice to see you around, anyway.

All bad lettering was a necessity of time, sadly. I honestly didn't realize how big the letters were till I flattened the page and looked at it, but at that point I had no time to fix it.

And the circles I probably should have toned down a bit. But I also wanted to have it bouncing off of stuff and coming back at her to reflect real sonar. Which would make more sense in a future round where you see she has no eyes. Buuuut that round isn't gonna happen now. Just gonna have to take her to a short story at some point.

I don't think that is necessary, it looks fine, I think if you show it from the top or bottom, it will make sense instantly. Especially with the wings unfolded.

As for the blood and the death scene, I loved how that looked. I'll take that over drawn blood any day. Yours looks three dimensional and like it is... chunky, which was appropriate both times. Plus, the second one was mixed with a bucket of puke, so again, to me, I could tell what it was instantly, and thought it looked more gruesome than had it been flatly drawn. That's just personal opinion though.

sheldon: my drawn blood is shit- i need to work on that. i just havent seen a lot of people do it well- it always looks like someone is getting spooged on with a bloody rotten dick.

kevin: HA. PLEASE, I CAN'T TOUCH YOU. i dont know what i'm doing here, i just do it. i'm stumbling gracefully haha

nina- void is my daughter- and if i came back with a 5$ mcdonalds gift card and a pack of cigarettes after not seeing her for years, well that would be shitty.
had to put as much as i could into this <3

dan: jackson pollock hahaha yes. yah i think if i had removed those antennas in the front it would have made more sense- i'll have to address that in the next battle, if i make it.

gabe!! I'll be real and say that I wasn't sure how much we'd get out of you, what with your big boy comics. but it's super nice and I hope it keeps up!

diabolical, you snuck in a bit more "content" with that copy pasted first page and pinup title page haha, but it looks good. the cirlces over everything is a lil distracting though, I might say to just keep something like that to a few certain panels for emphasis. and yea I hate that text too :c

Haha Awesome!

Gabe - Best comic you've done for Void. Wasn't expecting something with quality rivaling "The Life After," So that was an awesome surprise. Your writing has leveled up a lot, and the pacing and flow of the story were great. I think the only thing that confused me a little was the ship Toku arrives in, which I definitely thought was a giant Sting Ray, and not a bat, though I imagine a different angle would help that a lot when seen later. I definitely loved the more mature, thoughtful Galvo. When he turned Jork into a Jackson Pollock painting in the diner, I was like..... whoa, this is a different Galvo for sure. And I like it.

Travis - Again, I think you know where this one fell down. That lettering REALLY made this a hard comic to want to finish. I am not sure why you made it so large. If you were going to put the outline around it, you could have made is smaller, and not covered up your characters with it, especially on page 1. Some of the action too, I think better choices could have been made. Both times Toku hits Toast, I think we should have seen that hit, not Toku standing still and a foot flying off frame. Made it hard to tell what was happening. Some of the other panels were like that too, with action happening, but it is so zoomed out that you can't really tell what's going on. That said, these are a level up art-wise from the last pages we've seen from you, and hopefully we'll see some more comic pages from you in the future to go along with all of the pin-ups.

Missed you guys.

Gabo: Awesome dude. Really good. Best I've seen from you in forever. Death panels would be better if they were illustrated rather than spazzedouttexturetard but that's a nitpick.

Travis: I hate reading your stupid fucking comic the way it is URGH. Do this, LETTER IT FIRST. Then you don't have to draw/colour any of the shit underneath the balloons AND you can make the dialouge part of the composition rather than an afterthought. So bummed.

Jesus, Gabe.  I need to level up my writing in response to this.

Travis, it sounds like you already know what would have helped.  As I said before, I think you nailed the dialogue for Galvo.  Unfortunately, time is never a friend during SDT.  Hope to see more sequentials from you.

Yeah.... friggin needed like 2 more hours so the letters wouldnt have gotten just slapped on the page like that.  Wouldnt have minded more time to clean up the tones, either.  

I appreciate you giving Toku some respect with the whole "will be a legend" thing and whatnot.  Nice touch.  And I like that you went for a similar thing with the grayscale with red.  All in all, nice work as I expected.  I wish I could have gotten in a more completed thing, cuz I knew I need my A game against you.  guh.   Perhaps another day.

travis- i wasn't expecting you to capture galvo so well- but more so i wasn't expecting him to still be the same galvo- but thats just in my mind- i sorta created him as a more mature galvo- BUT YOU DID WELL DUDE. great job. i know you were pressed for time, but for sure what boxes on this would have made the reading a helluva lot easier.
good show.

Trav if you lose you're out of the family.

¯\_(ツ)_/¯
people gonna die.

actually I'm younger than all of you so I'd be in the 'grandchildren' category.

Children?  He's barely older than me.  And I've been on this site just as long as him.  Clearly I need to murder more people to make my mark.  Gabe will just have to be the first.

Screw the greater good.

haha Travis, your a child

The godfather of void vs. the children of void
Now this will be interesting

Happy bday, Gabe.  You know I must slaughter you to face Dan.  It has been foretold.  So it must be.

Gabe, kick Travis' ass!

Travis, kick Gabe's ass!

Awesome ,Gabo in the house !

:-)