TOFU- Definitely the colored lines was a nice touch. Gave your comic that psychedelic look that really fits with your character.

DRAGONHEART- Highly detailed work! Though, your inks got to the point where some scenes got a tad muddled. Still though, its great to see someone working in this medium who ain't afraid of using lotsa ink

Tofu: Omg love the colored lines! And also the lettering of the song. Cuuuuteeee!

Dragon: oooo love the blacks! ANd your writing goes neat with the art style, thought it's kinda messy at times.

TOFU: As people have said I think the strangulation could've been clearer - I think having Floyd come in front of Ushaku in that panel where it starts rather than behind would have helped but Iiiiii got it. Love your use of colours in this! Also while the composition/reading flow is a bit unclear sometimes that last page with the diagonal was really well done and had you a bit more time to spare to refine it, this could have been great. Definitely keep working on floating panels cos I think they will eventually work out for you. Things definitely got a bit lost on page two (it's hard to consistently make out Ushaku at first in that first panel especially because of the way his head is toned to match the rock) but I really liked this comic.

JOE: Really nice detailed work and I love the direction you're taking with the story. The design choice with Rem was a really interesting direction to go and I liked the poetry/lyrics even if it was difficult to read at times. I think some toning in places like that first panel, or at least some hatching to soften the big vast white would have helped break up elements a lot more... At the moment, some of the composition is really hard to follow without it. As others have noted, your story also suffers with the unclear handwriting. A really good basis here and it's just a pity that your ambitions were perhaps a bit bigger than the time limit allowed.

Nice work from booooothhhh!!!

TofuBeast,
I loved your last comic that was in Monster Mash. This ones even better.
I've tried making a limited colour pallete plus grayscale combinagtion and know its dastardly hard but you pull it off.

I would just say on your next comic, make sure you think about what are the most important story points within the comic, and decide to enlarge those panels a bit so that the audience has much less of a chance to miss it happening. The whole strangulation thing could have had the potential to be a gesticulatingly epic panel with all sorts of clawing body parts, sound effects, spit, who knows!?

But ye, loved the way you drew Ushaku and Floyd!

Thanks for all the critiques guys!

This was truly a lightspeed Tournament for me and its taught me a lot. I did this whole comic in twelve hours total, by waking up at 2 oclock and 5 oclock on two morings, as I just moved city staring a new full-time job. I've never done a comic on such a lack of sleep, but its gave me an insight into how crazy ass no sleep Manga Artists work!

I will definitely start spending more time and do some research into nice handwriting skills. I use my own just because I feel it just feels so much more personable in Comics.

I am using nibs and brushes yes. Obviously lots of practice helps but do you have any advice on improving Underwood, Tutorials, tecnhniques or your own insight?

I would have intended to do a full colour comic with iks and watercolours over the blacks if I would have been able to spend the full 4 days on it. So that may have added some clarity. But more detail and variation to foreground elements is certainly something I need to concentrate my efforts onto.

Tofu, the death by internal hemorrhaging was a deft and humorous touch to the comic. The leap from your previous entries on the site, is to be lauded. I think our colleagues already has reiterate many points so I'll just say: Keep at it and onward and upwards to new heights. Jolly good show.

Joe, I assume your are using nibs, so I'll just say that you ought to learn more control over your chosen weapon. Speaking from your earlier works, you already have made bounds in your style so kudos to you and I hope you grind the hatchet more. Variate between backgrounds and foreground so as to not let the two be lost in the panel. Add more details if necessary. Jolly good show of force on this round.

Keep it at it chaps and chapettes and onward to victory!

TOFU - your stuff is heaps better than the last time you did a comic on the site, you should be pretty proud of that! I think your inking has gotten a lot stronger and things in general feel better - but you gotta watch the forms. Your characters can easily get cramped up in the panels and then the anatomy all just goes sideways. Don't be afraid to zoom out and let the characters breath a bit. Page one I feel was the strongest page and then it started to lose that quality when you hit page 2 and 3. HoweverrrrrrRR like I said I really enjoy seeing where your work is heading to now! I hope this didn't come across as hard.

JOE- Nice heavy black inks but you suffer from the same problem I find myself in sometimes and thats a lack of clarity when in a pinch. I feel if you had the time to, you could keep everything clear, but in a tight deadline it suffers because things get too muddy. Unfortunately when using the heavy black inks, while a very striking style when used right, there is a lot of potential for it to go wrong too. I think having cleaner word bubbles and text would help you out too. I have seen you do some really crazy stuff so I think this is more a result of the harsh deadline - but still I like your character .

@lefred + @otakutaylor: Thank you so much for the feedback! This is probably my weakest composition work I've ever done (floating panels didn't quite work out as planned here), so I'll be sure to tighten that up if I move on.

The song lyrics/text def need to be filled in, now that I look at them. I'll work on making stuff clearer as well!

@Joe: Lots of detail! It ends rather abruptly, though, and digital text/clearer handwriting would be a huge benefit to your work.

Light Speed Critique: Tofu, a little straining to read white on white text, and I got a little lost on what was taking place at the end, and didn't get it till the last panel. JoeNeary, a lot of different similarly textured elements means a lot of the action gets blended together, even with the black backgrounds. I think working on silhouettes and separating a character from the background with line width might help.

Tofu - Man, your art has gone up a notch or two since you were last around. Nice. Although the composition aspect of it is still a mess, there's just stuff all over the place, especially in the first page, and the only thing keeping it from being diffcult to read is the emptiness. Also not sure how the hell your opponent died. (okay, reading it again, is it because of the 'cant breathe' because that's two words lost in there without any special attention put to them)

Joe - I dig your style man, I really do, but it's so busy everywhere it's hard to follow or distinguish elements from it, making the comic hard to read. The narration I'm sure helps, but then your handwriting is also a bit hard to read...

Yay! Uploaded mine too! I sent REM hundreds of thousands of years into the future and macabre'd her up!

Well done man!

How about that, I finished on schedule! Good luck, can't wait to see your side, Neary!

https://youtu.be/kfqToOh7MVA

AHHHH HERE WE GO