Intro Story / Oleander
Critiques & Comments
Zephyr
9 comments
# 11
Posted:
May 8 2021, 09:17 PM
WOW! I am hooked! GORGEOUS colors! No idea who the protagonist is in this universe but what a compelling motivation.
# 10
Posted:
May 4 2021, 08:55 PM
Had to ruminate on this a few days before I could comment properly. It’s a truly gorgeous comic. I love the warm yellows and greens on the first page, so inviting, and then the plunge into the more somber purple later on, with the red accents hinting at possible danger and then completely overtaking. I norice on the very last panel of page 1, Oleander is wearing red and literally walks from the yellow-green into the purple, it’s so cool. Panel 2 page 4 absolutely slapped with that broken lighting from the window. The flowers and greenery in general are drawn in a lovely way, I especially love panels 2 and 4 on the first page, every individual flower is given such care. Oleander has a great design, both their human form and true form, and her reasoning.. I love how they’ve taken the gesture of laying flowers at a grave and twisted it, in a way they truly think is helping people. It’s pretty tasty. Your contributions blended together excellently.
Few minor crits from me! The light source/s weren’t very clear in the interior shots, and the characters often seemed illuminated in places where there should have been shadows. On page 3 for instance, Oleander’s partner is lit with red from below, but there are no light sources on the floor. It’s really clear on the last panel, when she’s lying on the floor and has spot black shadows, while still glowing with this light. The room itself also seemed to shift in design quite a bit, by extension the characters positions did too, which I found distracting. Page 2 starts off with what seems to be a breakfast bar, a wall decorated with plants behind behind. On page 3 it seems to be a lone table surrounded by bare brick. The wallpaper changes, and the fairly standard “4-square” windows become a single, grander one. It helps to have a rough floor plan of interiors and character placement that you can move the “camera” around, I know a couple of people who use that technique to help with consistency.
This is still an amazing comic though, and I’m extremely hype for the battles that come out of this (and the thought of joining myself, hehe)!
Few minor crits from me! The light source/s weren’t very clear in the interior shots, and the characters often seemed illuminated in places where there should have been shadows. On page 3 for instance, Oleander’s partner is lit with red from below, but there are no light sources on the floor. It’s really clear on the last panel, when she’s lying on the floor and has spot black shadows, while still glowing with this light. The room itself also seemed to shift in design quite a bit, by extension the characters positions did too, which I found distracting. Page 2 starts off with what seems to be a breakfast bar, a wall decorated with plants behind behind. On page 3 it seems to be a lone table surrounded by bare brick. The wallpaper changes, and the fairly standard “4-square” windows become a single, grander one. It helps to have a rough floor plan of interiors and character placement that you can move the “camera” around, I know a couple of people who use that technique to help with consistency.
This is still an amazing comic though, and I’m extremely hype for the battles that come out of this (and the thought of joining myself, hehe)!
# 9
Posted:
May 4 2021, 10:38 AM
Haha I love it!
# 8
Posted:
May 4 2021, 09:33 AM
Agree with Footini, this is basically the juiciest comic I've ever ever seen. Can't wait to see who gets a bite of Oleander first. I know I want to take a whack myself!
# 7
Posted:
May 3 2021, 04:12 PM
This was like a 10 in quality from me.
Immaculate art on display.
Can't wait to fight the final boss of void.
The Prophet of the Extinction foretells it!
Immaculate art on display.
Can't wait to fight the final boss of void.
The Prophet of the Extinction foretells it!
# 6
Posted:
May 3 2021, 04:06 PM
oh man this is gorgeous, cant wait to see how this turns out
# 5
Posted:
May 3 2021, 01:47 PM
This collabed so nicely! It's got me hyped to fight the boss!
# 4
Posted:
May 3 2021, 12:13 PM
yoooo this is sick!! just an excellent combination of talents, very delish to look at.
# 3
Posted:
May 3 2021, 08:04 AM
Very neat, great use of color and the character itself is quite interesting. I have a lot of hope for this event and it seems like a real blast.
can't wait to see what happens next! Great Job Everyone!
can't wait to see what happens next! Great Job Everyone!
# 2
Posted:
May 3 2021, 07:14 AM
I thought this was very well done, and I am quite interested in seeing what happens next! Great job, everyone!
# 1
Posted:
May 3 2021, 05:00 AM
Character Design - Petrichor
Pencils - Deji
Inks - Red
Colors - Puzzlething
Script - Red & William Duel
Pencils - Deji
Inks - Red
Colors - Puzzlething
Script - Red & William Duel
Beyond Battle
Drawing Time:
1 week
Ended:
May 9th, 2021
Votes Cast:
16
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