Currently, my knowledge about Raven comes mostly from RPs rather than VOID comics, which is something I need to correct. I love this tragic battle between her nature and her desire to be good and not hurt others, and I can't wait to see the struggle in future comics!

ahh great job Riv, this was a good slice of character development for Raven. It was really interesting seeing her show this level of post-kill remorse, it felt like an important character beat.
I also love the fame angle you've started here- its sucha good direction to go in after the vcv comic, Raven has some famous friends now and I love that you've written some consequences to this.

It's been cool seeing you adjust your painterly style into something less punishing for comics, I think it works more and more with each comic I see from you! You've got some handy crits bellow so I'll just leave it there, great job!

Bonus random artist suggestion.

 

Thanks for the comments so far! Really learning so much good pointers already and I super appreciate it. I normally do my thank you post at the end  but I just want  to address one thing that Cy said


The choices of characters for this scene is not as insignificant as it seem actually. This is a chunk of text so I am spoilering it but if anyone is curious about how I picked these cameos and what they symbolized. Read on:



All in all, I do not intend for anyone to recognize those ideas in my head when I picked those scenes/cameos but yes I have my own reasons for them. I like putting elements in my story that I feel like I can revert back to or enjoy the symbolism of even though I am the only one who understood them.



I can explain to you my thought process in these past cameos too since I already started it:



All in all, anyone can put whatever cameos they wish in their comic (naturally people will pick characters and personalities that had the most impact to them at the time) and I certainly am not afraid to put more varied cameos/npcs in the future. It's just for me, I tend to give reasons to them in my head even though I am the only one who understood them. It makes it feel more personal to me. And as I have already shown, I also use them as story telling tool  for current and future comics (sometimes the type that ppl may miss and that is okay. It's just bonus points for ppl who would put the puzzle pieces together later on - ie an Easter Egg)

Of course if I had the space (and time lol) and the scene demands it, I'd gladly put more random characters in the scene.

@elyan

I read this over several times and never noticed that Raven was disguised as Doc Sic.
I just did not pick up on that.

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holy hell. this is pretty well done! Its packed with detailand lots of cameos and original showups. i really like the actual vibe you set here for the world/voidcity. The detail though is maybe even a little too much. I was pretty distracted often trying to see what you packed in there. but at the same time i wasnt paying too much attention to what was actually happening so i only realized in a reread Raven was camouflaging as Doc-Sic and lost her illusion in page transition.
Artwise this is all very beautfil. So layout and panel composition and usage of props and detail to help the readers eye direction is probably something work working on more.
other than that i see very cool and beautiful scenes resulting in a entertaining read!

I agree with Putrid, your covers always look great! It’s also really cool to see a follow up of the Arma collab so soon afterwards. The streets have a nice gritty feel to them that definitely suits the post-Arma vibe, but it was nice to see the kids trick-or-treating too, like Void is just going on as usual after the chaos.

I feel like you haven’t quite decided whether you’re going to stick to your illustration style or lean more into this looser style. I see elements of both in this comic in a somewhat clashing way. The problem is most obvious to me on page 5: you have this beautifully rendered closeup of Raven’s face in the third panel, and then these rather cartoonish, thickly lined fingers next to her that lack the same kind of rendering. The bird below suffers a similar treatment. Speaking of birds, if this new character you’re introducing works with them a lot, you might want to practice them more. The birds here look kind of formless and the anatomy is pretty off. On page 5 again, its head looks completely twisted. It might be helpful to pick a specific species or at least group to study. For instance, even within birds of prey, eagles look very different to falcons. With their short beaks and small size, I would guess these birds are more inspired by falcons or kites. Both of these birds have different wing and tail shapes though, so it’s worth having a look at both to see which fits the vibe more.

Also, this isn’t really a crit, just something I noticed and personally found weird... The scene on page 1. We’ve got Kubo and Miller chatting, and then kids dressed up as Xia and Wizzie for Halloween. It’s really weird to see characters, or likenesses of characters, who’ve all been significantly involved in a Arma just hanging out in the same space by coincidence. You’ve populated your other comics with big names before - Remy, Kubo and Swan among others have repeatedly shown up or been mentioned in the background. But there are more people than those in Void. The city feels oddly small when you often cameo the same people, or cameo people who’ve been in previous comics of yours but don’t have a part in this one (like Miller and the kids dressed as Valkyries). Don’t be afraid to make NPCs like you did here with Luca! Making up random designs is hard, but in the longrun it’ll help make the world feel bigger and more lived in.

Waffle best new Void character 2020!!!  #Waffle4life

I can see you're getting better at expressions and the acting of  your characters.  One of your strengths with your figures is the face. Though some of the other parts of the bodies need some work; mostly with forshortening and the hands.  Your hands are for the most part the right shape but when the fingers bend they look off slightly bent wrong somewhat.  Some of the linework looks a little messy at the start (pg. 4 looks a bit rough) but it gets cleaner as you go.  It looks like you're going with a different style of art with your last few comics but I think when you were doing the Rocio and Jerin battle your art looked it's best.  I'd say maybe go with thinner, cleaner, lines maybe and work with your style of shading you have now.  The way you do lighting works well and I like this backgrounds that are more painterly looking what with big silhouettes with some details and textures added in.  It's a good less is more look that gives the city a noir like gritty feel.  I'd think that giving yourself more time to really polish this style before going with shorter deadlines to rush through would help with the look.

Your visual storytelling is getting strong.  You work well with just showing what's going on with little dialogue.  The shot compositions and blocking are strong enough you might be able to have gotten away with less dialogue altogether.  
On that note your speech is getting better at sounding more natural though Raven still as extra as ever.

Overall i'd say that this comic shows a lot of growth for you as a storyteller and an interesting developing art style for your comics just the before and after of VCV shows you've learned a lot in the past year.
You're on your way to being a top comic artist and writer.

#Wafflethebest

I am a biiiig fan of that last page. The dialogue of it flows really well and honestly, the writing overall is the comics strong part.

Artwise, I did not expect such a loose approach to the inks and a lot of the lightweight felt lacking, and the sketchiness of it made certain parts suffer. I think your facial expressions and overall body language is improving, but I certainly see a bit of stiffness and awkward foreshortening when your characters do more dramatic gestures. Paneling and flow and the angles were strong. You do a good job at making each panel move into the next and I could always feel the scenes "Moving" as it were. V.good job there.

I look forward to more!

Wow! What a gorgeous comic! This is a really tidy, intriguing continuation for Raven. I hope Crikey helps her!!

One little consideration you could take on for next time is to think about panel layout with the speech bubbles as a part of the composition. Sometimes they overlap characters and other important art elements. While this can be an effective tool from time to time, a nice clearance between your characters and the bubbles can give a stronger experience of the art for your reader. I want to see as much of your lovely drawings as possible! it didn't take away any enjoyment of this comic for me, but I hope you find it a helpful idea for future.

Can't wait for your next installation - I'm so invested in your characters arc!

It looks like you've been improving on your backgrounds and have been experimenting with textures, and to that I say good job! As always your anatomy is great and your expressions are improving, but I do feel like they could be pushed a bit more.

It also appears you were leaning heavily into the "Monster" part and less on the "Popular" part. I'm intrigued to see how much the demon blood is going to affect how Raven acts from this point on but I'm a bit unclear about where you're going with the VCPD on her tail.

Overall I'm glad to see more Raven and I'm hoping to see more development in the future.

I DON'T KNOW WHERE TO START. The cover is so classy and GOOD!
Love how texturized everything looks, and the harsh shadows in the background look very nice! Really liked the panel where Luca snapped his fingers when recalling the Valkyries. Poor guy, I felt really bad for him. BUT!!
Seeing Raven be super scary was SUCH A DELIGHT! the shots of the bird flying through the whole comic and then going back to their master were really sweet too
Loved the ending! I'm on the edge of my seat, can't wait to see what happens next!
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Don’t have much to say but impressive.

Submitted. Got hit by an art rut at the beginning of this but thankfully got over it and finished in time. I tried all sorts of new stuff here, I hope it doesn't look too bad and you guys like it anyhow

Super hyped to see how this turns out!!!

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But for real though can't wait to see all these VCV stories coming out.

YEEEEEEEEEEEEEES!!!

Consider me HYPED!