I would like to thank everyone who read our entries and enjoyed the comics. I'm sure everyone of us competitors worked really hard to put out our best work and it means a lot for everyone to read and vote accordingly and honestly. I have also read all the critiques and I will try my best to make my adjustments to improve my comics. I always wanted to compete in the two big events here in Void and it still feels surreal that I got the chance to compete in Heavyweights so Early in my Void Career but now I can cross that off my list.
Once again thank you to Void for giving me a place to tell stories along with this grand Opportunity and thanks to you guys, the community for helping me along every inch of the way. And thanks to all the other Heavyweights for making Viro such an interesting character in their stories. I hope I did you guys justice and I hope that you all had fun reading my works
Heavyweight Royale 2021
Critiques & Comments
# 17
Posted:
Aug 21 2021, 07:41 AM
# 16
Posted:
Aug 20 2021, 10:51 PM
Thank you everyone. I had super fun with this event, always wanted to be in a Heavyweight match, it is a dream fulfilled
I enjoyed everyone’s comics here, this event offers a good range of stories to enjoy and behold.
I hope everyone enjoyed the Olympeggs that I didn’t have the full time to show, it was going to be Eggstra Eggy.
I timed Olympeggs to the irl olympics for max effect.
Once again, thank you all for this opportunity
I enjoyed everyone’s comics here, this event offers a good range of stories to enjoy and behold.
I hope everyone enjoyed the Olympeggs that I didn’t have the full time to show, it was going to be Eggstra Eggy.
I timed Olympeggs to the irl olympics for max effect.
Once again, thank you all for this opportunity
# 15
Posted:
Aug 19 2021, 11:41 AM
Gregly: I love how you introduce the characters. Each entrance gives the characters so much presence and personality. The silliness and crazy imagery made this a super fun trippy comic. I loved the dynamic between Iain and Itami. I felt like the sporadic aggression and lecturing between them was great. While I like the layouts of your panels, there were way too many panels on each page, and it made it difficult to read, especially with no help from color or a second tone of grey. I think this would have read much better if these panels were spaced out to about twice as many pages. I really like how wild your story got, but I think getting that wild has to be balanced with a little more space to breath and page layouts that are easier to follow.
Footini: Your layouts and silhouettes are stellar and I think your comic reads the clearest at the beginning. Excellent body language and great expressions, I'm never guessing what the characters are feeling or where they are in space. This isn't as neat after the first 10 or 11 pages, and the panels and expressions start looking rushed. You also made 47 pages... so I'm not sure what could have been done about that lol. Love the little bonus comic at the end too. I found myself getting really lost after the first 10 pages, and I think the middle part of the story needed to be more focused.
Boogi: The page turn from 13 to 14 was utter perfection. I enjoyed how wild and grotesque your comic was. It was a lot to take in at certain moments, and the wildness needed to be more grounded imo. Spacing out the weirdness a little would have made it both more impactful and more fun to read. Same thing with art style, I think having just a smidge less silliness and trippiness overall would have provided more contrast.
Rikkun: I think pages 12-17 were at a completely different quality than the first 11 pages. From page 12 on, the composition was more interesting, the characters looked more interested in what they were doing, and I felt like the story had more direction. The first 11 pages didn't give me much to work with, and it didn't feel like the dialogues told me anything about what the characters were feeling, they were just saying things that moved the plot. The tension just wasn't there at the beginning like it was in the last 3rd.
Platinum: Excellent job with this one! The story was very clear and easy to follow, and I got a clear sense of the main character's personalities very quickly. The flow from panel to panel wasn't always perfect, but you used clever tricks to guide the readers eye and I appreciate that (Page 17 is the best example of this, using the speech bubble to make the reader look at the panel below the first one, instead of reading horizontally). The biggest thing for you to work on from here is filling up some of the empty space and getting the backgrounds to lead the readers' eyes to important information. Right now the backgrounds are mostly blank, and while I know time was a factor, even having a line indicating a wall corner or floor would have gone a long way in grounding some of these panels. When time is short, go for silhouettes! Contrast is your friend, so start using more black if you don't have time to color! Some little fixes would include smaller type, fixing the tails of your speech balloons to make the narrower (they take up way too much space), and getting a better sense of how your characters heads rotate. You're getting good at expressions, but they start to fall apart when a character's head turns, and I think you can work on that and fix it fairly quickly. You've made leaps and bounds since joining void, and you should be super proud of this comic!
Chimaeric: Your comic is gorgeous! The imagery during the sex scene was absolutely beautiful, and throughout the comic I found myself getting distracted from the story because of how pretty the art is. There were definitely times I felt lost with lore, and I think it's because there was so much text in each word balloon and box sometimes that some pages were a bear to read. Wonderful work tho!
Footini: Your layouts and silhouettes are stellar and I think your comic reads the clearest at the beginning. Excellent body language and great expressions, I'm never guessing what the characters are feeling or where they are in space. This isn't as neat after the first 10 or 11 pages, and the panels and expressions start looking rushed. You also made 47 pages... so I'm not sure what could have been done about that lol. Love the little bonus comic at the end too. I found myself getting really lost after the first 10 pages, and I think the middle part of the story needed to be more focused.
Boogi: The page turn from 13 to 14 was utter perfection. I enjoyed how wild and grotesque your comic was. It was a lot to take in at certain moments, and the wildness needed to be more grounded imo. Spacing out the weirdness a little would have made it both more impactful and more fun to read. Same thing with art style, I think having just a smidge less silliness and trippiness overall would have provided more contrast.
Rikkun: I think pages 12-17 were at a completely different quality than the first 11 pages. From page 12 on, the composition was more interesting, the characters looked more interested in what they were doing, and I felt like the story had more direction. The first 11 pages didn't give me much to work with, and it didn't feel like the dialogues told me anything about what the characters were feeling, they were just saying things that moved the plot. The tension just wasn't there at the beginning like it was in the last 3rd.
Platinum: Excellent job with this one! The story was very clear and easy to follow, and I got a clear sense of the main character's personalities very quickly. The flow from panel to panel wasn't always perfect, but you used clever tricks to guide the readers eye and I appreciate that (Page 17 is the best example of this, using the speech bubble to make the reader look at the panel below the first one, instead of reading horizontally). The biggest thing for you to work on from here is filling up some of the empty space and getting the backgrounds to lead the readers' eyes to important information. Right now the backgrounds are mostly blank, and while I know time was a factor, even having a line indicating a wall corner or floor would have gone a long way in grounding some of these panels. When time is short, go for silhouettes! Contrast is your friend, so start using more black if you don't have time to color! Some little fixes would include smaller type, fixing the tails of your speech balloons to make the narrower (they take up way too much space), and getting a better sense of how your characters heads rotate. You're getting good at expressions, but they start to fall apart when a character's head turns, and I think you can work on that and fix it fairly quickly. You've made leaps and bounds since joining void, and you should be super proud of this comic!
Chimaeric: Your comic is gorgeous! The imagery during the sex scene was absolutely beautiful, and throughout the comic I found myself getting distracted from the story because of how pretty the art is. There were definitely times I felt lost with lore, and I think it's because there was so much text in each word balloon and box sometimes that some pages were a bear to read. Wonderful work tho!
# 14
Posted:
Aug 14 2021, 10:30 AM
snager would you mind... not insulting the majority of the site whenever you write a comment? Thanks.
Quote from: TheCydork
Cy, we’ve been warned before not to critique each other’s critiques so I’m going to direct you to this forum post instead.
https://entervoid.com/index.php/topic,13607.0.html
# 13
Posted:
Aug 12 2021, 11:26 PM
I t's a shame your art looks so unfinished, but seeing so many poor showings this past year from so many artists, I'm personally happy with what you got.
Quote from: snager
snager would you mind... not insulting the majority of the site whenever you write a comment? Thanks.
Chimera - Writing up a separate Big comment for you since you asked for in-depth crit! Sorry for the wait!
ONE MORE THING THOUGH and this is for all of you.
# 12
Posted:
Aug 9 2021, 12:39 AM
Gregly: you did such a good job of including everyone.
Radji: everyone did Chica so much justice in their renditions, she was almost not missed. but she WAS missed.
footini: you always go whacky when you don't know what to do and honestly, is there even any other way to BE? It's what I would have done.
Boodigi: it's the raw egg being slurped from a 7-11 big gulp, for me.
Rikun: I like the idea of meshing everyone together in a movie.
Platinum! ,_, why are you so good at drawing dinosaur feet....
Iain:
anteres:
grab a bucket and a friend, that's a ten out of ten
10 / 10 / 10 that's a ten out of ten
edit: sorry I wrote about comparing the competitors' strengths and weaknesses. and sorry I said Saal wasn't my favorite anymore. I think what I meant was Saal and Anteres would make a great battle.
Radji: everyone did Chica so much justice in their renditions, she was almost not missed. but she WAS missed.
footini: you always go whacky when you don't know what to do and honestly, is there even any other way to BE? It's what I would have done.
Boodigi: it's the raw egg being slurped from a 7-11 big gulp, for me.
Rikun: I like the idea of meshing everyone together in a movie.
Platinum! ,_, why are you so good at drawing dinosaur feet....
Iain:
anteres:
grab a bucket and a friend, that's a ten out of ten
10 / 10 / 10 that's a ten out of ten
edit: sorry I wrote about comparing the competitors' strengths and weaknesses. and sorry I said Saal wasn't my favorite anymore. I think what I meant was Saal and Anteres would make a great battle.
# 11
Posted:
Aug 7 2021, 10:13 AM
😳
# 10
Posted:
Aug 6 2021, 05:14 PM
Buggy & Radji: I hope things get better for you both soon, your health is far more important than a comic!
First, congrats to all the participants on finishing Heavyweight!
Gregly: Your art is always charming to look at, and I thought you utilized everyone's characters really well! I think you could have done with more backgrounds, but that's really my only crit for this comic.
Boogi: Your comics are always such an interesting experience, and the different personalities do really well with your writing style. I really like how you express the eggs individually, and the painterly style you used at the beginning. It does look like you ran out of time, but I liked what you got completed.
Footini: I enjoyed how you portrayed the characters, and they were cute in your style. I think you could have had KJQ more prevalent in your entry, but it was still a fun story. I'll echo what I said with Gregly, that I feel like you could have had more backgrounds, the ones you had were nice.
Rikun: I know you weren't able to utilize all the time you were given due to irl circumstances. Some of the shots looked really nice, but overall it feels like you ran out of time on most of the panels and story. I think it was an interesting move and in character for Itami for the entire event to have been a movie, so that was a good choice.
Platinum: I wish you'd asked someone about how Iain's accent sounds, you did really well with Chica's and it feels like his kind of got ignored, despite being a strong one. I liked how you portrayed the characters otherwise, and think you did really well with the page count and how long you had to make the comic. The backgrounds could have done with a bit more 'life,' but I'm glad to see you drawing them!
Jong: I adore Antares, and her personality in this is great. Your art is always such a treat to see, and I loved how you portrayed the characters. I agree with Jade on this, that a few concepts flew over my head, but I still really enjoyed the comic!
First, congrats to all the participants on finishing Heavyweight!
Gregly: Your art is always charming to look at, and I thought you utilized everyone's characters really well! I think you could have done with more backgrounds, but that's really my only crit for this comic.
Boogi: Your comics are always such an interesting experience, and the different personalities do really well with your writing style. I really like how you express the eggs individually, and the painterly style you used at the beginning. It does look like you ran out of time, but I liked what you got completed.
Footini: I enjoyed how you portrayed the characters, and they were cute in your style. I think you could have had KJQ more prevalent in your entry, but it was still a fun story. I'll echo what I said with Gregly, that I feel like you could have had more backgrounds, the ones you had were nice.
Rikun: I know you weren't able to utilize all the time you were given due to irl circumstances. Some of the shots looked really nice, but overall it feels like you ran out of time on most of the panels and story. I think it was an interesting move and in character for Itami for the entire event to have been a movie, so that was a good choice.
Platinum: I wish you'd asked someone about how Iain's accent sounds, you did really well with Chica's and it feels like his kind of got ignored, despite being a strong one. I liked how you portrayed the characters otherwise, and think you did really well with the page count and how long you had to make the comic. The backgrounds could have done with a bit more 'life,' but I'm glad to see you drawing them!
Jong: I adore Antares, and her personality in this is great. Your art is always such a treat to see, and I loved how you portrayed the characters. I agree with Jade on this, that a few concepts flew over my head, but I still really enjoyed the comic!
# 9
Posted:
Aug 6 2021, 12:44 PM
PS—Buggy and Radji, I wish you the best in dealing with and overcoming everything that's going on in your lives right now. I hope that wrist heals quickly! Much love to both of you and I look forward to whatever you make in the future! 💖
# 8
Posted:
Aug 5 2021, 09:13 PM
And submitted! I hope everyone had fun making their comics! Can't wait to read them!!!
# 7
Posted:
Aug 5 2021, 10:03 AM
unfortunately, I will be forced to default. My wrist is hurt badly, and I have to go to the hospital.
I might post my entry as a BB later, but my health takes priority.
I might post my entry as a BB later, but my health takes priority.
# 6
Posted:
Jun 30 2021, 03:42 PM
Let the eggs roll!!
# 5
Posted:
Jun 30 2021, 02:50 PM
lets resolve this years heavyweight peacefully instead of resorting to mindless violence, how about a healing collaborative dance number?
Quote from: Camel
Jack will dance on their graves.
# 4
Posted:
Jun 30 2021, 02:49 PM
I have returned
Heavier than ever.
For real tho I gained like 15 pounds last year.
Heavier than ever.
For real tho I gained like 15 pounds last year.
# 3
Posted:
Jun 30 2021, 02:46 PM
lets resolve this years heavyweight peacefully instead of resorting to mindless violence, how about a healing collaborative dance number?
# 2
Posted:
Jun 30 2021, 02:22 PM
Let's go! Hurt each other!
# 1
Posted:
Jun 30 2021, 02:04 PM
Battle Royale
Drawing Time:
5 weeks
Ended:
Aug 20th, 2021
Votes Cast:
16
Page Views:
2787
Winner:
Chimaeric
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