ArtsandGoodies:
Inkybrain: Your art is amazing, In particular love the way you drew Kiteria's face in this. All the details you put in were amazing and all the pages are a treat. The only part i don't think works too well is in page 6 where he throws the restrainer, we don't quite see the motion of him throwing and the way he was holding it in panel 3 doesn't seem to be a good way to throw an object, but this is a minor art nitpick in an otherwise great comic artwise.
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Thanks for your critique! I actually meant to go for more of a toss/flick motion, as if the device needs to land the correct way, but I do agree the setup wasn't enough to make that clear. As for the dialogue- I know I've got a lot of work to do on that, but at least I didn't get any comments annoyed with the font itself this time! LOL. Anywho, aside from rushing it near the end there, I tried to pack too much into a single page. I don't really like a lot of open, empty space but as a result I left little room to breathe AND the dialogue got mashed together.
I will however, have to disagree with you regarding Ozias's speak of demons and the puns that followed- they are demons, a trait I hope I made obvious from the very beginning of the comic. That being said, I wish I'd added some of the original dialogue regarding how he'd arrived at being chased by the Gerecht in the first place; he sold them the "dud" weapons. I think that might've made the story a little more clear, but I opted to end it with his offer as I really wanted to show that kind of gray area in Ozias's neutral status.
For everyone else so far:
Thank you for all the comments and critiques! I'm definitely going to work on variations of my lines, as to not lose the focal point while still applying the amount of detail I genuinely like for my art and comics. In addition, I'll be fiercely studying a lot of indie comics for that dialogue and sound effect use, to prepare myself for the next comic/battle!
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Yarn, every time I see you're art, I'm like, "This is so dang good, it can't possibly get any better," AND THEN IT DOES. You are an unstoppable tsunami of improvement!!!
Inky, I really love your particular realistic and illustrate-y style, and you've pumped out so much of it in this comic!! The thriller-ness of it is super fun, even if it ends a smidgen suddenly, and some of the compositions don't really give any empty space for the eye to rest.