You seem pretty capable artistically, but I dunno. Something about these pages is coming off as stilted & flat to me.
Firstly, real quick, it's a little weird that the balloons' cursors just kind of point in the general vicinity of the person & not their mouths. Like that third panel (which feels too tight compositionally &/or too big on the page if all you're trying to show is the choke), it's pointing at her knuckles/sternum. Just comes off as strange & makes things slightly less clear, especially in a panel where you're in so tight & cropping faces out.
But I dunno the whole staging of this situation feels strange. Like I saw the roughs & thought she was up against a wall getting attacked. But now it looks like this guy catches her & is just deadlifting her in a chokehold in the middle of this alley? Like her knees are then at face level, she can just bash him in the face with her knee cap or reel up for a boot. Why a singlehanded chokehold? He's angry at her? Then why not speed up the process with two hands? Beyond all that, it just seems like an awkward approach if he's concerned with getting his wallet back. Why does he need to lift her? Why isn't he just going for the wallet? So she's transforming (by apparently touching something but it's not clear what) & at the same time reeling in to do this Lei Wulong/Jackie Chan flip off his rib cage. That's fine. But she's grabbing the pony tail from behind his head, springboarding, & yet still able to rip the pony tail off all in one motion, throwing him backwards? Those physics don't feel like they line up. Or if they do, that guy's neck snaps at the same time. Or she pulls straight up & the guy's doubled over with his head down, not flung back like in that other panel. Like at the moment, the hair's in her right hand but his reeling in that same direction instead of reacting from the force of the pull. It doesn't make sense to me. Am I missing something?
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Colbitzer
@ 3:32 PM Apr 17th