Dayum. You've got some nice shots and solid inkwork, but holy balls that panel layout is a nightmare. It's a good thing you haven't drawn on the whole page yet, because that bottom half needs to go. With good enough shots, you can convey what is happening with as few panels as possible, so that clusterfuck of panels in the bottom is only going to complicate things both for yourself and the reader. Also, try to avoid unnecessarily "fancy" panels like your circular panel and your curved panel borders; keeping things simple enhances readability, which is the most important thing. It would be a shame to cramp your artwork into those tiny panels, because your wide shot looks fantastic. Don't try too hard to block out a sequence of events, because a choice few panels can tell the story for you. Let the art do the talking!
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Colbitzer
@ 3:32 PM Apr 17th