I always wondered if the shared history between Dolly and Hot Chick (one of my fav on Void) would one day come back in the spotlight... and i loved it. The afterlife is full of Drama in Void. PEETS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Hey guys, great job, these are both great entries with lots of great quality and storytelling. These characters are naturally cute so it's fun that they work together well. Pita: So first thing I noticed was the squiggly grass. Now I'm not gonna say you have to draw every blade of grass or something ridiculous but considering how much detail there is otherwise in your comic, I'd say you could take the time to give it a little more form. There's definitely ways to imply shapes or draw enough of the grass to imply that's whats in the background. I think the handwritten looking font is fine. It's whimsical for a whimsical story. What I do take issue with is how oddly it's placed in the word balloons. Just try to make sure it's centered and not so close to the edges of the balloon. I'd prefer word balloons with borders but that's a style thing in this case. I think it would work better with borders but it looks ok. Your panel borders are a little too thick. Unless it's for some sort of experimental emphasis I'd be wary of making panels that thick. Overall the coloring and art was nice. I'd definitely like to see you do a bit more in terms of perspective, dynamic composition and backgrounds. There's enough to say, ok it's the bare minimum, but I'd focus on doing more work there. Jackster: Excellent work, your stuff is always pretty polished and your linework is super solid. My problem here is how much of an exposition piece this is. Like you do a good job of going through Dolly's history and her feelings, but it's very, very wordy with little action involved. It's less a story that has much to do with Zoey as it is an exposition dump for Dolly. Like page 5, should have probably been more of a flashback sequence so we'd get a little bit more going on visually. Page 4, while nicely done, is just a huge dump. And for like three pages that's all we really get, is someone talking with very little happening. I'm not against wordy comics, but you can still be wordy and visually interesting at the same time. I just really think there are plenty of ways you could have pushed this and made Zoey more impactful on your story.

Pita: i could not figure out what Sally was doing licking his hands on page 1, maybe you should have made that flute thing a different colour than his tongue, or more magic effects or music notes or something because i was at a loss for a minute there. I also want a huge fan of "heres my situation... (cut) ...and thats the plan", i know youre writing a sequential narrative that unfolds through several battles which is very cool but each battle should also be treated as its own story an you'll wanna fill in details like that. But of course the art is adorable, i like the soft colours and the Zoey Peets were the cutest thing. Jackster: WHY YOU GOTTA MAKE ME CRY LIKE THAT BRO!! aaaaa I want to hug Dolly!! on page 6 in profile I think you made her snoot too long, she looks older just before talking about how she cant age. Seeing Dolly's death match again from her perspective gutted me. Im actually not a huge fan of the way you did the colours... I think maybe they were too bright? it was a bit stark against the otherwise monochromatic comic. still, this comic was heart wrenching and i loved it. bonus, thanks for the cameo!

Nice stuff from both of you, two really different halves to a sweet interesting backstory for both characters. Pita: Nice colours and cute style for your characters and suggested backgrounds like grass etc. The title page felt a little superfluous, as it's just hand written copy on a blank background. More interesting fonts or some simple imagery would have added more context and warmed your reader up to the story more. Although your handwriting is neat enough to read it's not easy-going and does affect the overall flow and pace your readers can go at, plus jumping around in size and style a lot. Just something to keep in mind as your go forward. The lack of backgrounds was pretty distracting overall. Backgrounds are such a great way to build atmosphere and add context, so next time it would be good to see more of them in more detail. Jackster: Dolly is a really interesting character and although this got quite text heavy in places you did carry it off really well. I know they're sat by the fire in the dark but a little bit of flavour in the inky blackness would have helped, too. Your expressions and clever dialogue do make for a heartfelt read, and a lovely gooey ending. Thanks for the great reads guys!

Pita! It's very cutesy! You got your peets focus! I want to agree with what camel said about the colors changing, and how it could have been expanded on story-wise. I know there was some trouble with timing, but it was kinda confusing to just jump directly into this. I'm looking forward to the connecting pieces after MotD. Jackster - OW MY HEART. Pain from personal choices and times where there were no choices. Just... Ow. Very good, and just. I love black and white, and you're VERY good at it. I see that all the happy memories were colored! I thought that was a neat effect.

Pita: The Arc continues! I really enjoy both palettes you used in this comic, they're so pleasant and complimentary to one another, and do a good job at portraying the environment and mood of both settings. Although I already am well aware of Dolly, had I been a new user the characterization would've captured my heart only in a few panels. Sally's characterization was a bit weaker, but considering the odd schedule due to october, I get that. Some things - Zoey's revelation as being an imaginary friend feels natural, however there could've been a tad bit more information about what being a figment entails, maybe what it means for Zoey (Does she have a living host/creator?). Also, one thing I think needs beefing up is your backgrounds. Page one, for example, is a barren hill, and it's not very interesting - You're telling a story in an underworld, it should feel otherworldly. That doesn't mean every panel should be macabre, but an establishing shot really benefits from small details. Also in the end, at Mama Perdi's house, the coloring suggests warmth and safety, which is great, but it feels a bit disconnected from the surrounding underground. Had there been inklings of the darkness that exist outside of this sphere of safety, it could foreshadow the adversity that Zoey may have to face in the future, but also that even in a scary situation there are friends to be made. With all that said, this is still a heartwarming addition to this story and I can't wait to see what happens next. Jackster - Damn! I'm all giddy from Pita's lighthearted romp and then you sideline us with sadness! I love your expressions, even with a cartoony character like Dolly, her emotions are so clear and heart wrenching, sometimes subtle, sometimes very overt. When working in greyscale, things like composition and linework are far more pronounced, and those are characteristically great here. The use of color is good as a tool to distinguish Dolly against the very similar silhouette of her brother, and to make the exposition feel light and ethereal, as if it's being dreamt up in the mind of the listener, however I think your sparing use of color could've been pushed a tad more to give certain panels more oomph, like the shot of Void City, or her execution at the stadium - if you're gonna have color in a primarily black and white comic, why not flex it a little more. My only real gripe with this entry is the writing - i'm not against exposition to tell something like a backstory(it's usually far more necessary than some people give it credit) but it feels very one sided - Zoey has basically nothing to do. Engaging her more in Dolly's story, IE having Zoey give a piece of her backstory, maybe interject with a bit of commentary between the two, would've have made this feel more like a conversation between friends rather than just a big statement. With the art as well, had there been shots that illustrate their similarities by framing both characters, there needed to be more involvement on Zoey's part aside from being just sympathetic.

I've been trying to formulate my thoughts about this for a while. Pita: That galaxy palette really worked wonders. I felt that the shift to the sunny yellow was a bit to jarring after that and I would personally had preffered the entire comic with the purple. That said, it was incredibly warm and cute and I think I enjoyed it the most of all your zoey comics. Jackster: You are a monster for killing my heart like that. Great bit of storytelling. I will have to agree with Desi however, the colors actually lestened the impact of the comics feel. I feel I get the purpose of it, I just don't think it panned out as intended for me. You guys are pretty fucking great though. Keep knocking out these adorable, heart wrenching stories.

@ Pita I thought your comic was really cute, and the coloring was really nice, especially nearer to the end when things looked much softer, though something that broke that softness was the fact that Zoey had these really nice colored lines, but everyone else was lined with very dark colors in comparison. I feel like if you softened them up with some lighter lines, those pages would've looked more cheerful and soft, but regardless you had some really nice palettes in this comic! I thought it was pretty amusing that Zoey had peets, though I felt if you gave that a bit more buildup, it would have worked nicer, in terms of humor, because it felt like that joke went quickly with not as much impact as could be put into it. Regardless though, I thought your story was really fun to read, and I hope them kiddos had a fun little adventure! ^^ @Jackster Might I just say, the way you use black and whites gives everything such a nice high contrast, which plays well into the overall feel of your comic, but when you started to add in color on my page 3 and 4, I felt it made the pages lose some impact, because the bright colors didn't seem to fit the feel, and I feel like they weren't that necessary. Regardless though I really like your linework, and the way you made there be so much black, it was really nice looking! I think the only thing in the story that took me out of immersion, was the massive amount of exposition in page 4. It did very much serve a purpose, but I feel like a more condensed version could've worked better, simply because how much there was. Overall though, I really enjoyed the story, I liked the sad feel you pulled through it, and it worked really well! I enjoyed reading it a lot! ^^

Pita: I really enjoyed how the story went in this. Simple, funny, and a bit heartwarming in just nine pages. If I could say any improvements needed: pages six transition could have used a background or a visual clue of: "Hey we're going to a different place", so that it'd be easier to read. Other than that, this was a good read and good work. Jackster: This really opens up Dolly to Zoey, and giving backstory to her to those who aren't familiar to her. (Such as myself.) I like how you were able to approach the visuals in this since they are in a campfire, you wouldn't really have much to "see" in the background and the focus is on the characters and light source. Though it would be nice to see a bit of a visual clue as to where exactly they are. If it was a forest, maybe an opening to the sky while keeping the trees solid black and showing the night sky. Other than that: I really liked this read and how these two were able to talk to each other about what's been happening.

As for my entry, it will take place after Zoey and Dolly go on their adventure. There will be a disclaimer in the first page that will tell you to read Pita's comic first. Also, Dolly tells her origin story in my comic and will be super depressing.

OK because this happens after a part that is currently missing, here are the things you will need to know beforehand since I'm pretty much dropping you in without in-comic exposition-- - Zoey has taken residence in the home of Nana Perdi and her husband Oscar. In exchange for room and board, she has been doing chores around the house. - The most straightforward route to the Styx, and by proxy the Surface/Land of the Living, is closed off due to some illicit activities going on in the area. - Sally came over as a dinner guest and offers to contact Dolly, since angels are capable of traversing between the realms with minimum effort and would know another route to the Styx I still got a few days before I need to submit this bit, but I hope this helps clear up the confusion.

Good luck you guys! >w</// I bet whatever you guys make will be super mega awesome! :D

ITS COMING The Cutening

Quick note about this one-- This comic happens chronologically after Underground II but will be released before the aforementioned comic. With a week after the first one and having been on vacation for the past few days, I only had 2 of 10 pages sketched out and want to give you the best quality version of this story. It will be posted once the MotD battles are done and will be arranged into a playlist linked to Zoey's profile. Thank you for your understanding.

Dolly and Zoey's Adventures in the Underground. There be monsters up ahead.