Gregly: It pains me to say this because I always love your comics but on the artistic level it feels like you might be plateauing. Visually this work doesn't feel too different at all from many past battles. When it comes to storytelling forget about it you're a champ, now I think it would benefit you to find some ways to break your mold (maybe starting with lights and shadows, and color choices)
Swag: I feel like the backgrounds are a bit too clean in these, especially for the buildings, would love to see some texture, dirt, grime, cracks, etc. that would have really filled up the pages. Action-wise I think you would benefit more from pulling the camera out more often so we get the full scope of some of the actions and you get to play with more powerful poses/anatomy.
GREGLY- This was charming. Like, wholesome made for kids caliber cute. This is the type of madcap antics I would expect to see in something like those Disney afternoon timeslots. It was just...really fun. Your opponents intro comic sets the stage for such an unsettling pair, but you fashion them to fit your 'universe' effortlessly and keep the violence and action within your usual theme of clean and whimsical.
THE MAN WHO PLANTED SWAG- Its neat to see Maree throwing her weight around and her brother sullenly following after. Granted, he does chime in when needed, which for me made for the interesting bits of the story. When it comes ot action, your side of the battle definitely felt more real (or as real as child witch police officer vs lizard alien siblings can get, lol), which, for me made for my votes leaning on this side. I definitely wanna see more. Heck, I wanna battle these two after reading this, and I think that's a perfect aim-if unintentional. Great comic!
I love how flat the aesthetic of moths these comics is! Swag's has a more nuance, particularly in its line and coloring, but it's still very bold and graphic. I feel like Gregly's needs something (perhaps in the color palette), but the look of the comic seems to know exactly what it's going for. I feel like I read comics that looked like this in Nickelodeon magazine way back when.
i ship gwen and sunder now WHOOPS I'LL SEE MYSELF OUT
gregly: i felt like the palette was a little TOO green with that being the background and the antagonists colours. also the coldness of the last page might have been sold better with more blues rather than the warm purple. it might have been a bit funnier if Sunder had stayed a little more reluctant while he was fighting since he didnt seem to want to start in the first place. But! The action looked great, and the dialogue was funny! I always love Gwen and Regi comics!
Swag: you draw Gwen so unbelievably cute i could die. I liked the pale blue and yellow palette. sometimes your dialogue feels a bit out of order- the balloons are placed so i keep reading them in the wrong order so you'll wanna watch your flow. The action is good but the fight may have been more exciting if it was a bit more even since Gwen and Regi got trounced pretty easily. i know i dont have to mention the page sizes lol. Glad to see them finally in a proper battle!
These were so fun! Gregly, your comic felt so alive! Gwen's lack of interest until she got pushed to her breaking point really added a lot to the story for me. I felt like all of the characters were real people with real motivations and unique personalities. Your storytelling has always been great, but I think it's improved even more since you joined VOID! And your coloring has gotten really good, too! So much fun to read, and I can't wait to battle and/or collab with you again! ;)
TMWPS, you had so many cute gags and faces in your comic, and really smooth art. I think you could have benefitted from adding a bit more detail/refinement to some of your backgrounds, although the fact that you even HAD backgrounds is already a step up from where most VOID artists have been historically hahah. I love seeing Sunder and Maree's dynamic together, and look forward to more from them!
@Gregly: Man, I really like the way your panels are subtly off-horizontal! Adds a real sense of dynamics to them. I'm really impressed with how you can keep a sense of action going on in your seemingly simple stylization! However, I don't think it really works to give Sunder and Maree almost the same degree of lankiness that Gwen does, since they do have some pretty notable muscle mass, afaik. I'd make them at least a bit more broad-shouldered. Also, I don't really understand why Sunder got involved? The bit about being cold wasn't much of an insult if that's what he's talking about, and he seemed to agree. All the action was very fun, though.
@Swag: It's a small thing, but I really like how you composed the buildings in the few panels we can see them! They're super dense and city-y. One big problem with the comic though is your handling of dialogue. Most obviously, there's a number of typos and grammar mistakes that *really* draw me away—worst of all are the lines in page 10 that are obviously meant to be rhetorical impactful and full of pathos, but they just repeat the wrong "you're," which is super distracting. I wish it wasn't, because it's such a superficial thing, but I just can't see past it! Also to do with dialogue, the entire sequence of events in page 3 is very confusing to me. "Sleeping" doesn't at all feel interpretable as a valid concession that they stole the car, and "You can't steal something if that person is out of the car" sounds meaningless and random to the extent of total cheesiness (and in said page, I also feel like the cuffs come out of nowhere, and it's almost like he was wearing them the entire time).
This is less of a huge thing, but I also feel, at least in comparison to Gregly, your comic's palette is really consistently desaturated. Maybe something about those gradients? Some nice deep shading tones would probably alleviate that as well.
gregly: bacon is the sourceof all conflicts. but, lmao, seling off lizardpeople in cold chambers? dick move.
Swag: lololololol Sunder is so done with everything ! guess they'll need to hide from police now...
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