MrPr - Yo, i'm in love with this carnival master guy. Such a cool design! In terms of giving both characters love, this comic was great, especially by making Hecate responsible for Carnival Master's origin and ultimately his undoing. For the next round, I'd like to see more of this carnival-themed mayhem, and maybe go for some more complex colors/shading at the expense of page number
citron- The "two fave philosophers" line is hilarious, and going traditional was an ambitious choice, but it was definitely a bit confusing, and carnival's death felt a bit unceremonious. In a way, i almost feel this comic could've used less carnival master and more hecate.
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i feel like i got a lot more story and purpose in mrpr1993s comic. Citrons story didnt seem to have a lot of meaning as to why or how the carnival master became so weak.
Regardless, keep up the good work both of you. Lets see more comics!!
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Citron:
A traditional entry was definitely new, but I ended up really confused about the events that happened. With the paneling and lack of detail to a lot of backgrounds it was hard to keep track of what was going on. The ending came pretty quick and I think you could have benefitted from more interaction between the two characters. The humor was good, and I love the rhyme at the end!
Mr. Pr:
A very clever take on the round! I never would have thought to have Hecate bring the mad Carnie up from hell. That being said, the main little quip that's stuck with me is that I think you should really try to differentiate your female characters build-wise. I would also recommend trying to time Carnival Master's rhymes a bit better! The pacing for some of them was a bit awkward to read and it didn't translate well at the end between the last two pages. The line before he takes Hecate into the ticket was aces, though! More of that!
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@radji Didn't want to do more, no. It's supposed to be atmospheric. I saw these two as sort of forces of nature and felt like a grim dark lovecraftian twist would fit them well.
Also, I really don't feel like exposition is the best choice in any story, so I avoid it at all costs and will continue to do so.
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@citron: i had a bit of a hard time understanding what was going on, but i suppose that you wanted to do more.
but creepy n the funny way.
@MrPr: making hecate responsible for the master's rampage was a hellova good idea !! absolutly loves how you introduced us to the character ^^
Posted on Original Character Tournament, Round 1battle
MrPr I really enjoyed your work here. our stories took different tones. Mine more serious and horrific, yours more action oriented and comedic. I can't wait to see the critique but regardless, win or loose, this battle was a pleasure.
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