@1993: the stylization of the faces you draw are so wild and crazy- they give a lot of energy and life in your art. Your faces are probably one of the most appealing aspects of your art. However, the energy of your line art doesn't translate well as its evenly dispersed in nearly every part of your composition. A geometric shape you draw has the same crispy clarity as what your focal point should be, and this high voltageness mainly comes from your use of line thickness. Every part of your art is drowning in these hard lines.
Speaking of drowning, your use of burn tool effects with blurry brush is killing your art- completely. I'd rather see just flat colors only than see another page with burn tools effects again. I would recommend you practicing with color values and start incorporating greys more to balance your colors.
@pokemoss: you're a master already, you don't need critiques. You need to get paid. I would recommend you start focusing on writing shorts or stories with greater emotional stakes. Try looking into ways to get readers to be more emotionally invested in the narrative.
I don't think there's much more I can add than anyone else here, but...
MrPr1993: This was a fun little adventure, the pacing was really great and it felt really fulfilling from a storytelling standpoint. I'm going to agree with everyone's comments regarding the "rainbow soup" but I will offer that I had a lot of trouble with colour theory until I heard the term "Greying your colours" there's lots of material out there in regards to that theory and it doesn't require you to lose your bright colour pallet. hopefully that can help out.
Pocketmouse: What is this? this is so good. but I don't want to gush. I just don't have much to say, you're on another level from me.
such great work! I'm learning from both of you just by reading. :)
POCKETMOUSE- I never would've pegged Merrik for someone who was so great with kids. He has such a playful attitude, but at the same time allows a respect for Cassidy which is really charming. I usually go into battles with 'ok, what can be helped? critique hat on!' but I found myself engrossed in this little slice of life tale, I was more focused on how I was entertained than what might be wrong or off kilter- not to say that there was. This was a lovely looking comic. I especially dig the watercolor feel of your backgrounds. Your opponent draws Cassidy so ambiguously, so its great to see you fully embrace their character design and make them an outright kid.
MRPR1993- I'll be the first to say that cartoony antics, exaggerated expressions and just good ol' Saturday morning cartoon slapstick is my bread and butter. Love that stuff. You had this, there's no doubt about that, but I'll definitely echo the previous comments you've gotten here in that it needs a bit of spit shine.
I'd love to see you review a bit of color theory. You work in such clashing primaries, or oversaturations of color that it kind of all muddles together in a Lisa Frank hued rainbow soup. I can't tell the characters apart from the backgrounds, tech devices, robot bits and what have you. Petarvee makes a great point- when you're done, switch your comic page to grayscale. That's a great way of seeing if you have enough distinction between elements on your page.
I certainly hope you take this all to heart with the good nature that it's been given. I totally love Cassidy and always look forward to seeing her in battles now. She's quite the character!
Mr P: Like Pete said, your characters blend in with the background. I like that you do so much background but you dont want the action to get lost in it: you'll wanna differentiate the background with the foreground. I also wouldnt recommend that soft black brush for shading: i would mix some soft and hard shading to better indicate form, and possibly not in black, its often more appealing to shade in colour: like use a multiply layer on 50% in blue or purple. I LOVE how over the top cassidy is and how expressive the characters are, and i confess, I was cracking up at "GET HIM!" Great job! cant wait to see more from you!
PoMo like how do I even critique this its basically perfect. Merrick and Cassidy are SO CUTE and i LOVE the pastel green and yellow colour palette Great to see you battling again!!
@MrPR1993: I gotta admit, that was pretty hilarious. You chose a goofy tone and stuck with it through the whole thing. Righteous! Now, for the crit! Watch your color choices; they aren't bad, they're just really saturated and more or less the same value. Like, if you were to make your pages greyscale, I'd bet most of the pages would be the same shade of grey. So change that up a bit! Some lights, some darks, some less-saturated colors, stuff like that. I got a very animation-vibe from the comic, and an Easy Animation Tip is that the backgrounds are always less saturated or less colorful than the characters so it doesnt pull attention. And I feel that the blackish fuzzy-halos around stuff was to direct the readers eye to the focus of the panel, which, while technically correct, come off a bit more like an afterthought that dulls down a panel. But overall, I really dug it!
@Pocketmouse: Totally lovin the art. It's got that really, really, nice tactility to it where the texture compliments the style and color choices so well, and just adds a nice warmth to it all. I think my only crit is that I wish there was more of it! But I totally understand, Life Happens.
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