ink: nice little comic. Tight story haha. Everythings really sketchy though and your characters aren't in the right perspective in pg1 panel 2 jumping over that building. Pg 3 panel 4 looks like wisk of gold. Choose your fonts carefully. KMART: tight comic, though again your use of tones are incredibly overbearing. Please "tone" it down hohoho. Pg 4 why is her father Zedan Dromer is that canon?

@inksword; I quite enjoy this fleeting meeting between the two characters and Serephinas casualness defiantly got a good chuckle out of me. @KMart; I really like your take on these two having met in the past. Your screen tones are still overshadowing your linework and make reading distracting. In your next comic I'd really like if you challenged yourself to not use screen tones and trying out a different coloring method even if it just means gray tones. And if you're really deadset on using screen tones I'd do some more research, or even try and look at some hatching or stipling.

Inksworld: That was a fun little lecture and scolding contained in a short comic. Well done on that front. Even though it's rough, there's a good dynamic contained in there. Kmart: Your tones are still very distracting. I suppose using them in matches is the best way to figure out how to to properly pick and apply them so they don't distract or go moire, but, personally, I'd just go for greyscale and make life easier (which is what I did). It's not like you're going to actually print this in something that requires halftone, after all, at least not for Void. Story-wise... it's an interesting connection for them to have. It begs for a follow up someday.

Inksworld: I really love the dynamic movement of all the characters, regardless of this being a polished comic or not, and enjoy the dialouge between the duo. The expressions are very solid as well and help tell the story. I do wish there was a bit more 'randomness' in the apartment to make it feel more homie if you catch my drift. I'm sure in a finished product this would be easier but, even a bean bag chair or a left out cereal bowl could fill in the background nicely! Hopefully Rorrin and Serephina can interact more in future battle or run ins. All in all super awesome start! Kmart: I'l ignore whats already been said cause I know redundancy only slows the progress you're making. I think some of your expressions and body movements show strong foundations then other times I can see real life took over (which is more important and always focus on real world first and foremost!) I also really enjoyed seeing more backstory of Rorrin for why she became a teacher and how she gained her powers with touches of your opponent, I think finding a balance of background characters and the main characters is important! Another thing, I'm loving all your side characters and little comedy littered through out which make a more enjoyable read!

KMart: I feel like your story wasn't centric on the two characters versing eachother, but I really enjoyed the cameos. While I understand it was to open the reader to the world of magical girls, I think you could have given them less screentime and focused on the two character's that are versing eachother. All in all, it was still a creative way to introduce character dynamics. Even with that said, I like that there is an emotional touch to your story, that both characters are related to eachother instead of strangers as opposed to Inkswords. I did enjoy the screentones, but I agree with the others, it felt like some panels weren't easy on the eyes. In your next comic, I would try to vary with the opacity of your screentones to help add subtle touches of your figures and environments. I am not so experienced on screen tones myself, but I would say screentones are like frosting to a cake, and not the cake itself. Inksword: You have a good sense of compositional flow with your comic panels, I think your strong suit here was your panel flow and a nice diversity in perspective angles. How the two characters met weren't anything special, but you did a great job with dialogue and I loved your sense of humour in here. The dialogue was easy and flowed naturally while making sure that vital information was said. I agree with Pyras that it's a shame you couldn't finish, because the groundwork is there and nice. I would love to see more complete works from you in the future :).

Inksword: A shame you couldn't finish, you had an interesting story here. Regardless of the outcome, hope to see you continue to play with us here in void! KMart: This is better screentones then last time for sure, but not by much. These tones are often extremely distracting. If you're deadset on using them you need to brush up on some tutorials for making nice looking screentones. Ask around to to see if any artists have experimented with it so you can see what theyve done with it.

Inksword: A step down in quality from your first fight, but I do really enjoy your comic layouts and the facial expressions and body language of your characters. This could have potentially really good if you had more time, I bet. Kmart: I like screen tones but dang bro, these hurt my eyes a little. Honestly, I think you're relying on the tones too often to fill in blank space and hide lack of backgrounds. Your lines are pretty good, but I think you're taking away from them by dumping tones all over the place. Next time, make sure your comic can hold it's own with just the lines. Then, use the tones sparingly. I think maybe my issue with them is that they are too large? Like, a smaller dot would be more pleasing to the eye? Your very first panel is alright, but then the same dark tone used on the building is used on the chalkboard, and it's much less successful in that panel. It all depends on how you're using these. Try using more solid black and sticking to two different tones. I think you've got potential, you just need to reel those tones back and focus on line work instead. Both of you guys did a pretty good job despite not being very polished :)

Another incomplete comic from me. I SWEAR this was due tomorrow but I'm glad I checked in after I got home from work and could throw the word bubbles up on this OTL Doing two tournaments at once is KILLER...

Yes!! This was one of my wish-list matches!! Witch versus magical girl GO!