Thresher: Couldn't tell what was going on for most of the comic because of the rough pages. Mags: Holy-- Maybe it's a good thing I didn't join Heavyweight after all after seeing what Mammon did to Edge.

Thresher - Aww man I wish this was finished, after a certain point it becomes very hard to follow so I couldn't actually finish it. I also like that you have a sketchier style but I wish it was just a smidge tighter - enough to accurately get a good sense of the place and details in any given area. As it stands things tend to get very flat and/or skew towards feeling very unfinished even on your finished pages. Watch the word bubble placements too - there are often times where they are rubbing up against a panel (bottom of page 2 has a panel like this for example). What I really like about your comics though are that you have a very strong grasp on pacing, it feels almost cinematic in many ways. I have noticed this through a lot of your comics is that you have a good sense of the timing that you are going for with your stories. Mags - I really liked this, the heavier inks really work for you (and as a reader who is into those, they definitely work for me too). However the dark gradient backgrounds in the gutters aren't working for me. I know why you are doing those to keep your comic in a darker vibe but things start blending together because there are a few panels where the red gradients take up most of the panel and they somewhat bleed into the back. Also watch those backgrounds a bit. We get enough to know where they are but they still feel very lifeless, straight lines with some gradients - don't be afraid to add some grit or some details! Doesn't have to go overboard but just enough to give the place they are in some personality too. Granted on a two week deadline this can be very hard to do. Most of this is just nitpicking anyway, this is a cool comic and Mammon is an awesome character.

Thresher: I do rather like the story you were aiming to tell. It was a great way to lead into it. Props for all those panels with lots of guys, that can really slow down comic progress, but it really helps. Mags: the establishing shot of the mansion's perspective feels off. There, found something to crit. HOLY COW mags, you magic. And by magic I mean worked incredibly hard to hone your skills. hehe.

Thresher: As people have mentioned, the roughness and incoherence of the sketches, and the general incompletion, led to this comic being downright unreadable. If it was life or time management that got the best of you, gauge your time and aim for a more condensed story, so you can deliver something short and sweet over big-ambitions-but-not-completing. Nothing's wrong with ambition, though! Mags: GOD PLEASE KEEP DOING THOSE HEAVY INKS they are doing so well for you. I'd say the backgroudns kind of blend in together after a certain point it feels like, but otherwise I don't have any notable complaints.

Thresher. I really was digging the story, the flow of was pretty good. too bad you didn't get to finish it. Magistelle. The colors look so very cool and dramatic it has a feel animated feel to it. the story was well paced. I enjoyed it very much especially the cool fight scene.

thresher: i liked the 'all serious' atmosphere, a bit disapointing that you didn't finish but i enjoyed it nonetheless magistelle: mammon' comeback is batman begins grade !! the red and green contrast ambience is peculiar but strangely, it's very cool with your style Do i make any sense?

THRESHER: Focusing on your first four pages - your backgrounds & panelling are still a highlight of your work and faces still need a bit of improvement (though in a lot of panels they're showing a lot of improvement already). I think on the first page you have a bit of flow issue because I for some reason thought Mammon was in the car and wondered while he was off model - would have been good to have a shot far enough to clearly see the full car but also identify Mammon in the back and more clearly seeing that he is talking to people in the front. The story was going in a really great direction and -you better- finish it off. MAGS: First of all I just really like the cover and the way that whole composition, use of galaxy pattern etc was pulled together along with the colour use and action others have already gushed over haha. Would like to see a bit more care given to stuff like the boxes in the first panel of page 3 (the connecting tail between the first two is looking a bit odd, as does the way one of the boxes touches onto the edge of the panel) and often with dark background, having black borders with so little gutter between them crowds the page a bit or bubble borders get a bit lost. I'd really say as well it would be super cool if you could draw the bubbles yourself, because you have such a dynamic style and it would be cool to see you do more with other elements within your comic knowing that. Some great humour though and PRETTY MANS which I like. Such a cool re-introduction for Mammon. Gimme more :D

Thresher: It was getting really good, I was keen on seeing where this would lead until we got to the red pages. But everyone's already touched up on it being a little difficult to read and comprehend, so I won't repeat it here. Nevertheless, you did pretty great. Mags: I recall seeing your awesome work in the hangouts and just being amazed by your ink work. Damn, I do wish my inks were as good as yours! I'm having a hard time trying to find anything critical to say about yours, save for the nearly non-existent backgrounds in some areas. But your colour scheme kind of made up for it in the end, and overall you made a heck of a great return comic for Mammon!

I'm trying really hard to be critical mags but I can't think past this raging lady boner.

Thresher: I could not... 100%... follow this.... maybe thats my fault because dystopian sci fi thrillers and political intrigue arent really my bag but also the rough art made it hard to tell whose talking and what action was happening in some places... i guess i dont have to tell you its pretty incomplete. I like your first couple pages and the re-imagining of mammon, but then it sort of falls apart. Mags: oh my god i need to fight you so much. ok first YES MAMMON IS BACK HOLY SHIT. right from the fucking cover you got us, and then aaa, i like those rich colours, gorgeous greens and reds. The action is fantastic, the hits all look really impactful but theres a lot of spots where its all action and no background, and sometimes that works but theres enough of it that it starts to look a little empty. The heavy blacks you use help cover that up a lot though. I Dig the leglock to gunshot on page 13 too lol. I dont even know what to critique, its a great re-introduction to Mammon, welcome back!

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Thresher: interesting setup but when we get to the red sketches I can barely tell what's happening visually with means the dialogue is hard to follow :( Watch your heads, the catman on panel 2 page 2 has a case of deflated skull~ Magistelle: Frick man why are we critiquing you after LSDT you should be critiquing our critiques! I'm really invested in your story already, but I would like to see you do more work with backgrounds since they often take a backseat, having them all in the same color makes them hide even more. As an artist who also gets all gushy about action and neglects background, I know the struggle! but if anyone can pull if off, you can

MAMMON SAID KNOCK YOU OUT I'M GONNA KNOCK YOU OUT 2 CAN PLAY AT THIS GAME, THRESH

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