Puzzle, this entire comic is so beautiful ;o; looks like you've put a great amount of effort and work in this and it totally paid off, EVERYTHING IS SO PRETTYYYY
I don't know what to crit so I will just say I absolutely adore your colours and the amount of detail you've put into this, I love how you've coloured the lineart according to the lighting and colour scheme, and it's not just one colour too! it works so well with everything as a whole and you seem to know exactly what colours compliment each other <3
[quote]Field Marshal Lionel Forsythe W. Underwood XIII, GBE
Ahhh geez, thanks Underwood, I'm totally not worth it! I have no idea if I'll write another Samandiriel story, even though I really love the little jerk. I had this script lying around because I wrote it for one of the Void character anthologies, and never drew it. I just needed something to practice digital, because I had no idea what I was doing.
I'm so glad you like it!
[quote]Kozispoon
Ahhhhh, how can you apologize for saying something as wonderful as all that!!! You're ridiculous! You're gonna make me die T-T
Thanks so much, I get super lost in tiny details. Even when I'm trying desperately to reign it back I feel like I end up make things too busy to look at, and it can get so tedious I want to die. Knowing someone else noticed and enjoyed it means the world to me.
I don't imagine alot of people would be familiar with the char. She was in the ridiculous 64 person SDT and the comics weren't very good. First SDT is a nightmare ;_;
I'm so glad I inspired you dude! If one thing I wanna do more than anything else with my mediocre art is make people wanna make stuff!
[quote]Bobo
Business is one of those words I always misspell for some reason. I had a friend proofread it afterwards, and fixed it up before I threw it up in other spots :/.
Thanks for reading it dude, you don't need to feel like you need to do more than that! It's just the best when people read your stories, and even better when they like it. Thaaaannnkk yooooouuuu.
Is "bussiness" a misspelling, or does everyone in Hell just have their own word for business that sounds like "bus-E-nuss"? Because I really want it to be canon that demons learned how to pronounce words by reading things out phonetically and just never learning the correct pronunciation :D
I don't know how to critique your comic though, because it's seriously just a joy to read. I love the movement in EVERYTHING; even the most static things just feel alive! And Moa looks awesome in your style! I just
I took so long to comment on this one because wow. WOOOW Puzzlethang. This was epic. I mean, yes, I admit some pages were a tad hard to read, but not because of any technical thing. Least I don't think. This comic was just so RICH so there was so much to see in one panel to the next. I think that can hurt as well as enhance. Everything from the characters to even things as insignificant as the cobblestones or the freakin' grass was a joy to look at. the world as well as hell utter dessert for the eyes. I mean, I know I'm focusing on the very things that you may not find pertinent to your tale, but page one and your interpretation of the traffic of the city as a series of lights and even the sky. You had a really rad graffiti look to it all that really tickled me.
Oh man Moa in your style is supah rad. Her hair igniting when she's pissed was spellbinding! Not to mention the crazy morphing she does when she gets further enraged. Really, my takeaway from all this if you haven't already noticed were your details. I'm sorry i'm going on about them. ts just really cool to see someone take the time out to really put in that extra effort yanno?
I don't know much about this character, so I came in cold, but really your story pretty much sums it up and gives us a beautiful intro into who she is and why she's at where she's at. It totally had me reading her previous battles and marveling at how freakin' far you've come with your art. JUST WOW :D
Thank you so much for sharing this. Feeling totally inspired. This is what Void comics are all about!
I'll be brief, as I'm still collecting pieces of my jaw from the floor.
This is what orgasm is, in comic form.
Each page comes alive like an animated feature. The story piqued my fancy and I was not disappointed.
I want to read more. Please? I can't throw money on the screen but if you need a butler for the weekends I'm your man. That's how much I adore reading this.
Puzzlething:
It's so hard for me to see all these nice comments and not just believe you guys are the nicest people ever, thank you so much everybody!
I can fix that. Like I can't wrap my head around how Samandiriel took off her diving helmet with her huge horns. This problem is so big it overshadows the rest of your effort. It's such a vital flaw that I can only give you all 1s.
T-T Thank you so much guys, I'm always just so afraid nobodies gonna read my stories, it means alot to me that you did.
Choleric:
Ahhh, thanks! I actually started working on this before PPT, and just kept putting it aside anytime I had something else to work on. When I started I had never really made any digital art, so it was super uncomfortable.
I have a severe problem creating areas of simplicity for contrast and rest, yeah. More than anything I reeaaaalllly need to work on that. I think it takes alot of confidence to draw something simple and clean and move on without overworking it.
GOD DAMN IT ROFLQU:
Heeeuuurrghhm thnkej you so mchhrheef!
I definitely should have made the panel borders a little beefier. I got some crit while I was working on it to do that, but I think I just didn't push it far enough. I was sort of obsessed with the idea of keeping all the panel borders the exact same width because I thought consistency would help, but it ended up making me inflexible.
I stressed so much about the story, so I'm so relieved you like it. I was so worried that I was making Sam way too unlikable for people to care about what happens to her.
neens:
I feel like a let everybody down that I wasn't working on a webcomic. It feels like such a big deal to start one though :S
Ahhh that sucks that you were confused, I wanted to avoid that so much. There was a time where the page with Moa's workfriends had way more direct backstory exposition, like they just described exactly some of the stuff in the previous comics. I ended up changing it cause I thought it was inelegant and boring, but I geuss I really needed it. I wanted this comic to be able to stand on it's own so badly :c
And ugh, page 19, yeah! When I went to add the speech bubbles, I was really struggling to get that many words on the page in a way that made sense and didn't cover important details. I just didn't plan it out properly, and it ended up being a huge problem.
I'm so glad you thought it felt genuine and funny, I get so anxious worrying that everything sounds stilted and lame. I'm glad you though Moa looked allright, because I'm so incredibly uncomfortable drawing hot/pretty characters :\
It's so hard for me to see all these nice comments and not just believe you guys are the nicest people ever, thank you so much everybody!
so happy to see this!! someone mentioned webcomic and I'll admit- for a long time I thought that was what you were doing with this mystery comic I kept seeing snippets of, until I was told otherwise.
I guess my first "crit" is that I went into this and was really confused at first! but that was actually my fault because I needed to read sixtem's comic. also, watch your layouts! page 19 was confusing due to the placement of the dialogue bubbles. I think the second half is a lot stronger in general though, with the softer palette and action.
but actually this was a gorgeous read and funny and then sympathetic! you got it all!! the humor was on point and the interactions felt genuine. I love sam's redesign, and you drew moa like, super hot. I hope you know what a good job you've done here, and what a treat you've given us!
Astounding surprise that fits very well in with the idea of Speed Resurrection Tournament that we've just had. Ironic that I read Jazz in The Jungle earlier this week. Again, you've done a masterful story with your characters.
I can praise this all day. The art is gorgeous and fits very well. However, I think your panels are a little too tight in some spots with not enough clear visibility between them on some panels, first page is a pretty solid example. Your colors also being so similar in intensity makes it a bit hard to distinguish your stuff out, but your palette choice is so strong and so gorgeous.
It's sad that it ends on the note it does, I definitely wish I could see more however. If this is a secret pilot for a webcomic following Samandiriel, you've grabbed my interest. Everything about this is amazing and Samandiriel's Pyrrhic victory hits pretty hard at the end, despite saving the soul of her mark. I really do feel for her and retroactively hate Sixtem even more for killing her now. I really like you revisited her and it's a terrific looking comic.
In all honesty, I'm not used to having such a great story, fully completed and realized on this site at this level, so it's terrific to see something so tight and well-crafted. Amazing work, all the praise is deserved.
WHAT.
THE FUCK.
this is ultra-beautiful puzzle and the energy vibing throughout this comic is amazing. What a morning to wake up to.
I remember seeing stuff about this battle months, years ago? I'm glad now that its finished.
Some critiques though- I love the high octane color palettes, and the details are just stunning, especially in scenes where you give the reader a lot of breathing room in soak it all in. However, that same high-octane 1000% approach you take for nearly all your panels delivers an experience akin to sensory-overload, which could be uncomfortable for some. Even explosive quasars inhabit vast lightyears of empty space.
Otherwise, what a stunning entry!
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