GeePeeEss - It'd be nice if you varied the kind of textures you put down with your lines. Right now, you stick pretty closely to simple hatching and cross hatching, with a few deviations here and there. There's so many amazing, varied ways to play around with texture. You have sort of a roughness and grittiness to your style that I'd totally love to see you play up by experimenting with texture. I wish I could point you to some good dudes, but I really can't think of any by name. Just go crazy, try new stuff and look around. Dotted lines, curved hatching, irregular hatching, stippling, etc etc. I like how she just throws a cat at his face before shoving him into the Void. What a jerk, haha. It's funny, it's a perfectly fine spot to put an ending, but it's also the great start to some strange adventure. Like, I totally wonder if that butterscotch will be the thing that saves him in the otherworld. It's great, it's totally like a Twilight Zone thing. "Myke finds himself staying in a hotel, but a hotel like no other. For this hotel, resides, in the Twilight Zone" You always do such an awesome job setting up short stories. Ryzel - I really like your determination to use proper perspective dude, that's awesome. And at the same time, you set things at different angles and keep them in perpspective, so everything isn't unnaturally parallel, which is totally on another level. Judging by some of your roughs, I can tell you understand the idea behind geometric construction, but your figures are stiffer than they need to be. There's always gonna be stiffness when you're learning to draw people, but the fact that you construct your armature (fancy stickman that makes up initial posing) out of strait lines and angles bogs your figures down. With that initial pose you should focus on fluidity, get the curves and life and action of the pose down. Making your dudes out of strait, rigid lines that early is just gonna make them feel like robots later. Work with loose, expressive lines for the first part of your roughs, and it'll totally inform your art later. You have some really great panel layouts, and I love alot of the props, like the weird octagonal end table. Defaults happen dude, especially when you're new and the anxiety of the deadline is fresh and sharp. Don't let it keep from getting back out there and wrecking it up!

Rob- sorry the white bubbles bothered you. I'll definitely take it into consideration next time. As for why the greys are there, I don't have a very good scanner, so it leaves my lines and blacks really harsh to look at after I scan them in and play with the levels to get rid of nasty bits, and I've found that using greys helps soften it on the eyes. I'll make sure to try to keep everything a little more consistent next time. Kozi & Shen- Thanks! I'm glad y'all enjoyed the comic. I've never read Sandman before, so I don't know the vibe you're talking about, but a reference to Neil Gaiman is awesome in itself! As for the cliffhanger, well, I always find it fun to leave bits for people to imagine. That, and if I had a longer comic, it'd be incomplete, haha. Ryzel- It looks like you planned a bit to big for what you could pull off. I feel ya, it can be hard to properly budget for a timed comic, even if you've done them for a while. All I can say is keep at it! It does get easier in time. Maybe next time try to go a little bit shorter in length. It's a good writing exercise to try to limit yourself to shorter ideas, and it'll help you figure out just how much you can handle at once. Start small, and try to work towards something bigger in the future. I can tell from what you've got that you can practice up on your anatomy, but that'll come in time so long as you keep practicing and giving it all you've got. I look forward to anything you do in the future, and most of all, welcome to the site!

GEEPS- Dang your gals and their zany hotel seem like so much fun. I get such a Niel Gaiman's Sandman vibe from them. They would fit seamlessly into that kind of world. That last page was killer- dug the space scene and kinda dying to see what happens next! I do like the cliffhanger as an ending though- seems to fit. Your inks are dark and heavy, which really help to set the mood of your comic, not to mention I think you showcased your opponent well. Shame we couldn't see his talents at work. RYZEL- Seems you bit off more than you could chew. Tough break man. Better luck next time!

GPS- a good, consistent looking comic! nice use of blacks, solid backgrounds, and oh man that last page- I want to know what happens lol but thats the fun of Mona and Lisa too is the horrors beyond imagination! lol welcome to Void, Myke! You should have picked a different motel! Ryzel I can't follow the story very well... looks like you got a solid foundation going, good clean roughs and i like how they're in two colours so its easier to find the characters from the background, but you just seem to have run out of time and I'm not really sure whats happening in the story ^^; but good show, keep 'em coming, lets have more comics from you!

I hope this helps! *_* And take my advice with a grain of salt, it's just my random thoughts about it: GPS- I like your little story- it's cruel to finish there! What happens? What's going on? I am interested :) The main deterrent for me, was the speech bubbles. They were the whitest white and the rest of the comic is greyish and no matter where I looked it was hard to focus on the art because my eyes kept dragging away to the speech bubbles. Maybe next time, don't put the grey at all, just do the lines? Or do EVERYTHING grey. Or maybe do white highlights. Ryzel- It looks like you could have had something here, but with the epic sketchiness and so on, I just found it really confusing. Also, weirdly unbalanced? Because there are pages with no text at all, and pages with huge blocks of it, so it sort of feels like moving fast and then it draaaaags.

Forgot to say that I have submitted. It's all good Ryzel. it can be hard to budget your time on your first comic. I look forward to what you make though!

Sorry i didnt get finished =( , im still working on this have it up as soon as i can.

DO DIS

Good luck bro dudes!

I'm hyped! I've missed Geeps, and can't wait to see what Ryzel has to show us!

Oh, man this is gonna be so good.

Aw yiss! Looking forward to this, good luck in your debut, Ryzel! Strut your stuff, Geeps!

Aw man Geeps, you betta bring that fire, you're welcoming the new guy!

I CAN HARDLY CONTAIN MY EXCITEMENT.

First, a great big welcome to the site! Hope you have a lot of fun! Second, can't wait to see what you do with your first battle!