PsychoSean - I'm not really sure I personally like the gritty noise interrupting your blacks, but it does totally give your stuff a unique feel. It's almost like your whole comic is a cheaply printed band poster for some dudes playing local, and that definitely fits your aesthetic. I really like when you create large, light areas with fine, strange texture. I think it contrasts the large sections of black really well. I'm not too into it when you have totally empty negative space, like when your gutters start to take up alot of the page, like pages 4 and 5. You should try to really fill your space, even if it's with large sections of white space where surface details are only suggested occasionally. Energy - I actually like the softness of your grey pencil, and I like how much effort you're putting into working that perspective dude. It's tedious and difficult, but that's the way you get better. Of the comics you've done, this is probably my favorite looking. While you work on your fundamentals, try to not to create lines with many small motions, but one large, complete line. Plan your shapes out before hand super ultra lightly, try to feel out the object in 3 dimensional space, and where it's edges are. Then place your final, confident lines. You have quite a few spots with "hairy line" where you slowly and careful etched into the paper. It makes your art less dynamic and expressive, so push yourself to break that habit.

Sean! While the grainy texture of the black was distracting at certain points, overall I really liked the gritty details. The text was very hard to read here, but overall I do see improvement! Keep it up! I for one look forward to Doodle Dan's DOOMSDAY Energy! I agree with Pocky - this is as finished as any comic I've seen from you, but I think you could make the lines darker. I also think the story/conflict was a little to simple, but I am interested to see what you can do in the next comic. Remember: anatomy, anatomy, anatomy! :D

Sean, I always love the just plain raw energy you put in your comics, and even though this one was rather visually tame compared to your usual, it still shines through and here adds this kind of classic feel to it, which is great. I always hate your text though, there's always something that makes it hard to read, here it's all that artefacts shitting all around it. There's a lot of... 'dust' of speckles everywhere, for that matter,(I BET you already knew that!) but I kinda love/hate it for everything that is not text, though. On the one hand, it looks kinda cheap, but on the other it really adds character to the image, so I'm basically cool with it. Going for that less grotesque style does allow for some of your strong points to show through, (totally love your inking, by the way) but also some of your weaknesses, such as consistency of shapes. On one panel, her face is that shape, but the next, it's not quite the same... we recognize the character from one to the other, but if you're going to tighten up, you might as well try to do it fully. (although if you want my super subjective opinion, I'd say go full grotesque because you fucking rock at it) Energy, if I'm being perfectly honest, I'll say that there are several of your comics that I didn't read through, because I found them just straight up unreadable. BUT, not this one. I went through it, everything read pretty well, enjoyed it, laughed a bit at the end. You're doing some tremendous progress, man, and if only for that you're one of my favorites here. Keep at it.

ok wait energy, so... she sees a dangerous criminal, confronts him... and then calls the police and goes back to her hotel room...? I mean like thats not much of a STORY happening... hes got magic spooky pencil powers, theres gotta be something you could have thought of to do with that. but i will say your art is improving inch by inch, your world and characters seem to have a little more depth to them now, they are starting to exist in three dimensions, so thats awesome. keep 'em coming and I'm sure we'll someday see you master perspective and foreshortening. Sean I love your inking and use of black, and awesome panel layouts. Pretty fascinating story, I hope theres a continuation! Youre drawing women a bit better this time too than the last comic of yours I read though its still not your strong suit. Your text was kinda hard to read too- I couldn't read it on my laptop at all, I had to move to the desktop with the larger screen to read it. Good show everyone!

great job you guys! psycho sean: Whatever you did with the 'noise' effect in the linework, I have no idea how you did it and it compliments your gritty work a lot. However, there are some parts that burn my eyes a lot when I see it, so you might want to tone it down a little on some areas that have a ton of textures. Not sure, but it might work if you have a layer of grey underneath some dark areas to dull down the contrast. The large colored areas make it the focal point of the page, and I'm not sure if that's your intention or not. energy: I read your Margot Seraphina comic before this, so I would say this is your second comic I've seen finished. Well, is it finished in your opinion or not? I think it's time to take it a step further with some more instruction. You are starting to get the hang of getting stuff done by doing it in more constrained time limits, so my suggesstion for you is to never do any more battles that last over three weeks. Try doing more one or two week battles. Another thing is that you are using a lot of straight lines everywhere. Trying drawing more curved lines in your work (you can interpret that any way). And lastly, try and adjust the linework in your art to be as dark as you can so it matches the word bubbles (and I already told you that you need more space between the edge of the bubbles and the text). Good luck with your next comic, you're finally going somewhere with it.

love the lil' twist that all the Doodle Dans we've been exposed to so far have been copies. Also NRG, I think you mean sex trafficking. "Sexual" trafficking would just be generic trafficking, in a sexual manner.

finished as well!!!

Done and uploaded

Oh man just a few more days!

FIGHT OF THE CENTURY

Energy you slut! Ditchin' on me. Cool matchup though. Joe and I are probably gonna find another opponent to bide our time right now, so I really hope you don't post another open challenge when you finish this one lol. I kinda forgive you for getting Doodle Dan back up in hurr tho