Thanks for the critique, Puzzlething~
yeah I think it's clear now what's next on Felle's list. As for me I'm gonna be pushing the rest of this story forward, with Miller/Gigara comics on the side if maybe. The next Arena BB will be a collab as well, with a different artist.
I'm totally not into the soft fog stuff you guys are using in place of stuff in the background. It would've been way better if you had even just kept the building they're standing on well drawn and clear, and used that city-silhouette-at-night thing from page 3 much more often.
Every so often your line quality dips, your lines become slightly wobbly and uniform. It seems to happen most often when you pull away from your figures, because most of your tighter shots have a really wonderful attention to line weight.
Page 12 is like the crescendo of action in this comic, the end of the Anya fight, but the finishing blow is relegated to a very far shot in a super tiny panel. You should've placed way more emphasis on those final moments of the fight, really sell the power and anger of that final blow.
For something you guys say is rushed, it really comes off as quite polished. I'd say I'm curious as to what you guys are doing next, but it looks like stuff is already happening!
Preview Thumbs link for the mods: http://we.tl/pxiJG0vxKx
CREDITS
Felle:
-Artwork/layout for pages 1-12
Pyras:
-Story/Writing
-Some Layout Editing
-Flats for pages 6-12
-Artwork/layout for pages 13-14
NOTES:
Pages 10-12 we could not complete the coloring due to time constraints & life situations. For the same reasons, I took over pages 13-14, which was a rush job due to same reasons.
Relevant comics to read (outside of the previous parts of this BB, and the Tag Team Tournament '13)
-Anya vs P2 (Anya's side)
Also relevant:
-the McGuffin in Arena & P2 vs Ethanol Jones & TLbot (Arena & P2's side)
The PLAN is to get these done by at least the end of summer, so Arena can finally be up to speed with a refresh of her own in New Void City. Most of the remaining parts will be collabs and should go by smoothly one after the other.. IN THEORY.
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