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TTT Prologue:
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Uploaded March 03, 2013
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PyrasTerran's avatar
PyrasTerran
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12 years ago
Mintley: Thanks for the thoughts. Maybe I should start saying exactly WHICH comics people would read to get the full story from now on.. Kozispoon: Thank you, that means alot coming from you. I really would have loved to spread out that 2 day recovery period, but with Round 2 looming I had to make a choice of delaying this comic or shortening it to get all the information out. Now that I don't need to explain anything else anymore, as far as I feel, I hope my future comics will be more entertaining.
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Kozispoon
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12 years ago
First off, I gotta say that title page is hawt. I mean, true its simple, but sometimes simple totally works. The fact the eyes of both characters are showing has a nice impact. If there's one thing you showcase in a great light its action. All of Arenas attacks are really dynamic and pack quite a punch. It's really great to watch. It's especially in your face and epic on page four where she tears apart the demon dude. I think the only drawback to the comic is that since its in black and white the eye momentarily gets lost in all the lines and inks since they muddle together. The second to last panel before the sand explosion took me a while to puzzle. P2 had a great reveal on page 7. It was a total throwback to tuxedo mask- or is that just me projecting my nostalgia? XD I do wish he was drawn a little bulkier as the fighter always came off a bit more square. The way you drew him felt rather feminine. The minimal use of color throughout I feel was a benefit to your comic- especially on page 10. I don't think the elemental whirlwind would've packed the same kinda punch if it was left in black and white. Call me a sucker for emotional moments, but I would've liked to have seen the calm after the storm with Arena. To see her fully recovered and back to steely was kind of a bummer. Even so, this was a very enjoyable read and an impressive comic for just one week!
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Minteh
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12 years ago
I just wanna be the guy to say I really enjoyed this comic, and having been a lurker on the site for so long I had read and remembered so much about these characters from the past that I found this to be a very easy and consistent read. In my opinion a comic shouldn't need to explain something that was explained in the past, even with a new audience. This may be unpopular opinion time, but I think the driving point of sequential artwork is the ability to make your reader curious about character aspects. If I picked this up in a store and flipped through it, yeah, I would be confused, but I would also pick up one of two more comics from the shelf and flip through them too specifically to see if I could find that origin. That being said, I think maybe the Void medium makes it slightly more difficult to do something like that, because related stories are not always from that persons canon (for example, Set originated from koba's side of the Arena/Koba battle). The comments here have given me an idea for the suggestions thread, so I'm off to post it up! Good job Pyras, I'm looking forward to the next round :)
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PyrasTerran
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12 years ago
Thank you all for the critiques. William Duel: I'm sorry that the story failed for you. I will try harder next time. This comic was not intended to explain why Arena can turn into Set, as ledes established that in his comic a year back, so I'm sorry for the further confusion that caused you, as well. Pineapple Pocky: I will see if I can successfully use sound effects in a future comic to better establish the power fighting. That's probably what muted the sonic booms and crashes, dismemberment and blood raining that was in this comic. Tofu: I avoided hard shadows in this comic to see how it would come out(I used them alot in my Miller comics), but it looks like I would need to bring them back again for the sake of even understanding the panels here. CrackingSkulls: I will try to restrain myself from using as much speedlines in the future. A bad idea: I understand exactly what you are saying. felle and I knew going into this that the chances were certain that starting exactly from where we left off a year ago would not sit well with everyone, especially the newcomers that came inbetween our hiatus and pretty much knew nothing about our characters, nor is it fair to have everyone necessarily read all our past comics to get what's going on. We had a good feeling that only the oldschool would have any semblance of what is going on off the bat. Now that this comic, and our Round 1 comic, are out of the way with the setup, we hope to move forward towards our intended goal: a fresh start for our characters by the end of this. Thanks again for the crits here, and in Round 1, we are doing what we can do apply them to Round 2.
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A Bad Idea
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12 years ago
I think the main problem here is that you're brushing dust off of a story that's over a year old. It's highly unlikely that anyone would still be invested in the Arena, P2 or Orphanage story at that point, and trying to tie them all together doesn't help to reintroduce the story to the new audience. What's needed is an actual reboot, some fresh ground to start on so that everyone is on the same page. As a writer it's your job to guide your audience through your story, and to do that you can't just assume to know what the audience knows. You need to reestablish who Arena is and show why she's relevant or why we should care about her as readers, rather than just giving us a page of text that says "Here's what you missed", and then spitting out more plot. None of the characters you portray have any discernible motivations, so readers have little reason to even care about what's going on. If you really want to bring Arena back, you have to set the stage, establish character motivations, and ease readers into the major conflict, instead of just assuming we already know what's going on.
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Cracking Skulls
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12 years ago
aaaaaaaaside from what others are saying, the one bit of advice I would give for future notes: Don't use speedlines as a substitute for backgrounds/foregrounds 90% of the time. You can express intense movements with proper speedlines, given you have the -time- to do so.
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PyrasTerran
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12 years ago
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Tofubeast
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12 years ago
PyrasTerran: I didn't match against Lilyfeather/Satin....... ACK you are right and I apologize, you fought us! D : I think I was getting your story confused with Koba's.
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PyrasTerran
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12 years ago
I didn't match against Lilyfeather/Satin.......
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Tofubeast
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12 years ago
I'm more than a little confused, and not just because some of these characters are unfamiliar to me. I was able to at least remember what Anya, Koba, and Arena's powers sort of are, so that wasn't too hard to understand. However, like Will Duel said before, combining everyone's motivations in order to have a massive throwdown doesn't quite work here. No one is acting how they normally act--Anya and Kuma, for instance, behave entirely differently from how they were in your own TTT entry VS Lilyfeather and Satin, and P2 doesn't speak or act like P2 at all in here! I know complaining about canon and storylines in void is silly because you can make your own and do whatever you like with other peoples' characters, but at least try to make sure that the story you're trying to tell is understandable to others who haven't gone back and read all of Arena, Anya, P2, some of Sonny's, and Koba's comics before this (and I have, mostly, but it's still kind of hard to understand, especially Cue being randomly mentioned in the beginning). A single setup page still isn't enough for me to become invested in everyone's struggles or motivations, and it's doubly hard when the panels are crammed with so much characters and explosion/blood? effects that it's difficult to see what's even going on. At least some extra shading in the earlier pages to discern what's separate from what would help a lot.
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Pennydox
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12 years ago
Since no one is a normal person in this story, I think it's okay to say you should let it out and make them feel PAIN! No seriously, you have dramatic poses, but fighting doesn't work unless the other character feels the whack and smack of the pain. Make it hard! Make bones crack, the environment break upon the impact of power, make dust fly, add some blooooooood! I'm not being sarcastic. A lot of panels here, they're powering up and smacking stuff, but it doesn't look convincing that the characters are superhuman. I mean, there are shots with some splattering here and there, but it doesn't look convincing that it's really painful whatsoever. Something as simple as a sound effect can do some justice here. Check out page 7 for example. That chick lands on the guy's arm, on her stomach...from the sky. I'm pretty sure there would be air fluttering around her when she lands, and the tummy impact would hurt (even if he caught her). Watching more insane action flicks always helps here. And the unreal-ness of intense fighting anime works too.
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William_Duel
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12 years ago
This story is a mess. I understand you're trying to tie the three separate stories together (Arena, P2,and Anya/Orphanage) but you miss all the narrative flow in order to basically fill the gaps. There's no emotion or development here. The dialogue feels really stilted and unnatural. And from reading the summaries I am now even more confused about why Arena can morph into Set.
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PyrasTerran
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12 years ago
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